I hope you'll enjoy this short ditty
Of a girl who was potless but pretty
She does end up rich
From becoming a bitch
Which was really a terrible pity
The tale's of a girl from Des Moines
Who hadn't a note or a coin
She took to the streets
Meeting sailors from fleets
And now her bank balance is 'foine'
With her ill-gotten gains she felt plucky
so she bought a stud farm in Kentucky
The horses, she reckoned
would come first, or second
- and she'd still get a ride, if she's lucky.....
In a list
A contest entry
- Limericks: Your best three by Andantino.
300 points, ended May 30, 2006, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your best original joke by Riddle Me.
475 points, ended August 2, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BATTLE OF THE GOLDEN RHYMES by Swan song.
2000 points, ended October 12, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Limericks! by marmac.
400 points, ended November 9, 2008, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Funny piece. I can definitely see why it has done so well in past contests. Best of luck in future contests with this gem.
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LOL this was funny!!!! All three were cute and fiunny thank you for entering
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Oh...wickedly funny...love 'foine'... with gold and silver..yay!
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Really Good
Thanks for this entry -
well deserving of first place!! very very funny especially the Des Moines...great job congrats on your trophy...leanne xxx
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Mildly naughty perhaps, but I had a good healthy laugh. Thank you for entering this competition. Gold is quite a good showing
And does leave you a-glowing!
(Congratulations from Lyndon [Ron] of the Winklings.
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Thanks, Margaret, much appreciated!
PJ -
I liked these very much, congratulations for your gold.
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Well, I haven't read or written a good limerick in quite a while and this was a very refreshing read. It is witty and charming. Nice job and I think you have a solid command of this form. Keep it up!
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I just love limericks! This is a really fine one indeed... I see the contest is still judging, so much good luck!
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LMAO I'm in Kentucky! Too freakin funny!!!
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HEh Heh, this one made me chuckle! Great job! You are really talented, at both great poetry, and making people laugh! Fantastic poem!
~ADAM~ -
AHAHAHAHA! I live in Des Moines so this is funny. I wish i could get rich off of some horse.
-Chase -
this was an intriguing write,tone to it.
The images fused with sound created a dramatic
performance of isolation and abandonment.
There are so many things we take for granted in life.
So many of life's beauties go unseen or noticed.
In the stillness of contentment we are priviledged
to peer into the corridors of another dimension.
Excellent work.
Much love again
S-Zro
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Great limerick, i agree the use of foine is just great. This is so well done and very clever. Totally enjoyable.
Al -
PJ!
Oh holy cow was this funny and Foine! I can't wait to see what you come up with for the other 2-
You are such a fine poet and it isn't often i get to see this silly side of you- it suits you perfectly.
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Lencio
Thanks for the heads-up!
I've added in the ditty from my notes and a third stanza to complete the tale ( allpoetry.com/poem/1221584 )
PJ -
Just Foine!!! lol! This is excellent! and a natural, I am not half as good at limericks, but did my best. However you have to enter a set of three in the contest. you'll have to rush as there's not much time left! Anyway you wont need much time, cause I feel you are really good!
Lencio -
Cute ditty
Okay and this is a fine little ditty. I like ones like this to lighten up my day and I enjoy a person with a sense of humor. -
funny
I always enjoy a good limerick and being originally from England was raised on them lol.thanks again on your comment on my poem
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Thanx for the commment, glad it raised a smile. Tho' I do like the Limeric form, it's only there cuz there was a contest, and I can always scribble out a Limerick when pushed. I hope you got a chance to have a look at some of the more personal stuff, I'd appreciate feedback from someone whose work I admire. I will be reading more of your own work, and reciprocate.
Thanx!
PJ -
Very well done...I left your page with a slight grin...the first for the day. I tip my "hat" to you sir. Excellent
Lily ~* -
hehehe thats good. maybe i like it even more because i so happen to unfortunitely live in iowa
i like how this poem flows!! and i really like the added part in your author comment. well done, great write. Im adding you to my favorites.
Sarah
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Thanx for the applause and kind words. I had already read and laughed at your contest entry last night, and intended applauding but only got around to it tonite.
Best of luck!
PJ
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