her eyes gleam like the sun
and lips as red as a rose
could it be her?
could it be Aphrodite
she passes by
without a second glance
whispering naughty ideas
that make my heart pound
I found myself lost
in her valley of the gods
with a goofy smile upon my face
as she holds me closely to her
she speaks to me softly
and so I ask her to speak again
as I hear her speak I cry in pain
for she is only a twit
Author notes
Written April 25th, 2005
A contest entry
- Shahrazads Legends by Shahrazad.
350 points, ended April 30, 2005, 7 entries
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yes i like the short-nes ness of it! short, to the point, so therefore sweet. i liked the writing of it. i agree with laura, funny ending hehe. this kind of reminds me of this helen poem i read in english class once. it might have been by edgar allen poe? not sure. anyways, i like it and the imagery.
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LOL... funny ending, Sebass! It's a short poem but very well written... I like the images you portrayed. Good job! Applause!
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