The earth is raped with machines
and bleeds a rich, crude pitch.
Clear-cut to create, obliterate.
Concrete columns join the rest,
Neglect the nightly heavens
and veil the horizon's hopeful view.
Like an infestation of parasites,
we will devour our hostess Earth.
The sky itself is blinded
by a smokey, inky taint.
Cyanide tears cascade from
the ozone's oozing portals,
Into festering terranean wounds
scarred by urban sprawl.
Like fish oblivious to the flame,
we will swim any day in December.
And within the cement jungles,
decay excretes its vile stench
upon humanity's injustice.
Murders, thefts and violence
plague the city streets
with incurable corruption.
Like mortals on a juvenile earth,
we have just begun to deteriorate.
Author notes
I'm really into the idea of social entropy. I think it's inevitable that all systems and societies will come to an end, and ours has just started to decay.
Tell me what you think!
Written April 24th, 2005
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Have to agree with you. Our civiisation is going to come to a sticky end, and if we don't completely wreck the planet first, we will be in future generations history books as some kind of myth (Atlantis comes to mind).
Beautifully written - keeps the reader wanting more right up to the end.
I haven't read any of your work before, but will definately come back for more
Thanks for your comments too.
Love and Laughter, Chrissie
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Such fantastic writing. I studied sociology at university a few years ago and my head ended up so fucked up. I changed to visual arts. This just brought back those memories somehow.
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Awesome job on this one. It's very captivating how you describe humans as parasites of the planet. In truth that's what we are, leeching of it to live. Some of the lines are really memorable, you did a great job!
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A powerful reality...
"Like fish oblivious to the flame,
we will swim any day in December."
Fantastic lines. I agree with ricochet rabbit... I to got a Mad Max feel from this piece, combined with a bit of Waterworld (maybe it was the above lines, I don't know)
Stunning socal commentary. I wrote a piece & the last line pretty much sums it up: "we are all pre-programmed for self destruction"
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yes...i do believe the christian european time of dominance is fading...seems like Asia will replace as the power of the world...good insight in this poem...great read!
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woah
wow!!!!!!!!!!!!! that's what i think of the poem, you've done an amazing job of describing a usually difficult topic. i was hung on every word, each was as important as the other. i can't even pick a favourite line, it's a beautiful poem. you have obviously put a lot of thought into writing this. if you wouldn't mind then would you take a look through my stuff to comment.... i would really appreciate someone with a lotta talent lettin me know what they think? xxx -
A great write - very thought provoking and intelligent. I agree with your point - this is one step above the usual 'what are we doing to our world' despair one often reads. Perhaps it is our time - but perhaps we should have used our time on earth more wisely.
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I liked this poem because it was so true. This world is coming to an end, and quickly. The words you used in the poem and how well it flowed together were great too. I really liked the topic of this poem. Great job.
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well written and not bad overall.a bit overdone but still worth the read here..Good job. This worked here for the style and the feel.Very diffrent.
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Interesting write. I write similar ones all the time. My poem, Fable Majeure, is similar to this, only it posits a dialogue between Earth and Jupiter in which Jupiter tells Earth that her parasites will destroy her.
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awesome poem
loved these lines
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The sky itself is blinded
by a smokey, inky taint.
Cyanide tears cascade from
the ozone's oozing portals,
Into festering terranean scars
wounded by urban sprawl."
definitely have to add you to my faves
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You shove the evils of society in the faces of all....openin our eyes to the ugly stamp we've put on the majesty of Nature...my feelings exactly! great work!
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very different. the tone was almsot robotic. but it was my voice reading it wasn't it? should i worry about that...i dont know. anyways. its interesting. good job.
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This Was Very Interesting,
I Enjoyed As Well As My Mom Whom I Read It Aloud To,
We Both Thought It Was Deep Piece,
It Flowed Well ( When I Didn't Skip A Word By Mistake Lol )
This Was A Very Well Written Poem
That Made You Stop And Think.
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wow
Wow, this was intense. I liked the reference to the ozone hole and how you contained rhymes that were not forced at all. Very poetic and very good. -
For some reason, this reminds me of Mad Max. Now I want to get out some post-apocalyptic badness and wreak havoc on the earth. Just my feelings upon reading your poem.
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