Her dark hair
is spread out like
broken wings
from a fallen angel.
But she is no angel,
for they say that
angels cannot have scars.
Her white skin, made
even paler by the
sliver of moonlight,
is marred by
those tell-tale colors
and signs of
hurt and abuse.
Pink lips are cracked
and bleeding,
the salty tears
have found their way
to try and kiss her
sadness away
but her tired
and hollow eyes
have closed themselves
to everything...
Perhaps, when the sun
lights on her face
and tears are
no longer present,
she would
pick herself up
from the floor
and piece her torn life
together.
Author notes
this is how i view depression, and loneliness, and aloneness...
Written April 24th, 2005
A contest entry
- Dark Poets ~ Steal the Gold!! by antique.
300 points, ended April 25, 2005, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Bronze??? That's bullshit, you stole the gold, and then got robbed, good write, I enjoyed it quite a bit.
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wonderful
Beautifully done. Far too many "broken angels" in our world.
A wonderful poem.
John -
wow!! rach you amaze with ecery poem i read!! This piece is fantatic!!!! I really think you have alot of talent.
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Great poem i can relate to this alot you wrote this poem with alot of emotion and though and thats what alot of readers want to read great job you're a talented poet!
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this piece was great. It flowed with great to speed letting all the lines to hit me like a machine gun. hard and fast. I love the end of this poem, and i love your imagry very much. well done
-pasti -
Amazing. Literally, I'm left speechless. I'm really poud to lose a contest to you. <3 This was absolutely astounding.
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goshness uli.sad,dark,gut wrenchingly beautiful.goodluck
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Wow soda.. This is really awesome! All the best luck in the Contest. I hope you win. You really hit depression on the head. Trust me! *hugs* Wonderful write!
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Excellent
{{{{{sodacolapop}}}}} This is an awesome write. Very sad, dark, and deep. I hope this isn't something you have experienced; but you sound like it is and you are writing from your heart. Good luck in the contest!
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Wow! This is really good soda!
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wow sodacolapop .. this is truly beautiful .. i love it .. thats kinda how i view it too .. and how i write about it .. very beautifully done .. wonderful piece full of imagery .. thanks so much for entering and I wish you all the best in the contest
.. keep the ink flowing!
~Aimee
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