The Day...
this day..
to have your lips to mine,
your warmth all around,
your heartbeat in line,
while we're on the ground...
The feel of you under me,
controlled only by a kiss,
my mind shouts can it be?
Man, it's you i miss...
the screams inside of me,
my begging harmony...
it's Heaven with you...
I love you too..
The Day...
this day...
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Written April 23rd, 2005
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Please tell me you aren't talking about the Harry Potter wanna be.
jk jk
I didn't make you mad yesterday did I? -
Mirror images of each other
Awww, this is really nice. I must admit that I've taken a liking to both you and Justin due to his post in the group Novocaine Kisses "IM IN LOVE". You see, the relationship you two have is really close to what I have with my girlfriend words unspoken and well, its sort of comforting to know that there are others who don't get to spend every moment that they'd like to with their loved ones. And so, I applaud your poem whole-heartedly.
Good luck and goodbye, †Midianite†
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wow, this is a great write, u guys must really love each other. the imagery was awesome and you were abke to rhyme it really well at the smae time. anywho, awesome write, so keep writing, and have a nice day!!!
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This was highly sweet. I always love reading how you care about Justin. He is a really great day, and it is nice to see that he is being loved and taken care of.
Justin -
excellent
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This is a wonderful poem. you did a great job putting your feelings into word.
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Beautiful! I agree with crystal completely...the emotion is really storng. Congrats to both you an Justin. Good job hun!
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Romantic
This is a very interesting and romantic poem. There is a lot to like about it. You did well. -
thank you, i'm glad you feel that way... i've never talked to you before... i'm gonna read yur work... bybye
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why thank you
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great poem
Justin I never stole her away from you, you still got to see her at your rehearsal and you still went to the festival with her, so leave me alone and quit being mad at me!!!!! PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!! -
Cute, I like it. You must really feel strongly for this person and it shows! How sweet. ^^
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wow! I really like this! It's so sweet.. and you are both very lucky people! Keep up the great writing!
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great imagery
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Amanda, i love you so much.. so much.. so much.. And i am still wondering what you see in me and why you love me.. Ive always wondered that.. You say that "Im blind".. How? I am not good looking, im fat, and im stupid.. what do you see past that? I love you .. I dont think i can live without you.. And if Brooke ever steals you from me again.. she has a gun with her name on it.. J/k Brooke!! I love you too.. And Amanda.. So dont be jelouse..
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Amanda I wonder.......................................................................................................................................... ...................................................................... Was Justin messing with my mind or is what he told me true?
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