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one last cut

I'm ready to end my life.
It will end with this knife.
One more cut shall do the trick.
The blood comes out just a little bit.

As i let the blood run free,
I found i have a little key.
It leads down to the gates of hell.
And that's all i can remember and tell.

For i had awaken in a hospital bed,
With people all around looking sad.
As i see tears in their eyes,
My mother looked at me with great surprise.

The doctor says I'm luck I'm not dead.
That's when i felt the bandage on my chest.
It turns out i after my cut my wrists,
I fell on the knife clenched in my fist.

But it all turned out to be okay,
Because i am still alive today.

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This poem is a weird one... It was about a dream i had and i woke up and desided to write it down.
Written April 23rd, 2005

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  • BloodBathBabe09
    April 23, 2005
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    this is a beautiful poem...although...it was a suprising ending...most people put they actually died...but i still like it!