I wrote this for the guy I loved too much too soon. We got close then something happened and we split like wood at the chopping block... To you, my love!
My heart is ice and stone
I'm up too late again
And feeling so alone
In my tough pale skin
I want to go to your place
And stalk you for a while
To watch your beautiful face
Wrinkle with an outlandish smile
I see you shirtless, sitting
In front of a shining TV screen
Maybe my mind is close to quitting
But you can't hear me scream
Why don't you understand?
What have I done to you?
Silent, obedient woman
Inside, I'm truly blue
Was it something I said?
To make you act this way?
Was it really inside my head?
Just resting from day to day?
Could it be something I needed?
I doubt you even know
Is this the plant I seeded?
Truth may never show
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Written April 22nd, 2005
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breathtakingly sad but great
Love the way you expressed your feelings in this one , made me feel it too. -
I love the emotion...very honest and pure. I especially love the part when you said "my mind is close to quitting/but you can't hear me scream." I don't know why, but that's my favorite part. However, I feel that your emotions could have been expressed as even stronger if you hadn't used such a strict rhyme scheme. However, if that's what suits you, keep it up. Good poem and better luck with the next guy.
--Ivy
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