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Sympathy

you know
i can not
understand you
as i can not relate
i am i
and so you know
i never will

the echoing anguish
that resides in your heart
is only glimpsed
before you pull away

i am i
and always will be
until you let me in
let echo reside elsewhere

Author notes

hope you like it. i am still pondering it myself. lol
Written April 22nd, 2005

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  • freakaboutfrosty
    June 26, 2005
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    sorry about getting back to you so late. i have been in texas for a while. um, there isn't really an explanation. i thought of it because of a friend thanks.

  • Greenheart
    June 16, 2005
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    well... deeper than the surface yields... is there an explaination or would that be too nosey? or did it just come to you? well if you want to share, i'm here... this is wonderful by the way, not that you need me to tell you that


  • horsinaround
    April 29, 2005
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    wow. this is really thought-provoking. who is this about? dont worry a/b grammar. grammar & poetry just dont go 2gether. i agree w/ em in that it makes a bigger statement when you dont capitalize things, etc. excellent job! i'm going to go read it again now & see if i better understand it....


  • CatastropheWaitress
    April 24, 2005
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    Hey, nothing wrong with no capitals. Sometimes I think it makes a bigger statement. Well done! I am impressed with this piece, as usual. It' didn't make me sad like the frosty one did, but it's awesome! Somehow it's different than other poetry that I've read on this site, and it made me think a little.... I feel the same way about people very often. Keep posting!

    --Em

  • freakaboutfrosty
    April 24, 2005
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    how is life like a bowl of cherries?

    lol. i am not that lazy. i was enjoying my freedom from english. we have been writing 5para essays for forever and i wanted to not have to look at grammer. that and i sometimes think punctuation interupts a poem.lol and thanks for the comment and applause!

  • thesilence
    April 23, 2005
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    hmmmm i like the last line, question: is the no capitals and punctuation on purpose, or just pure and simple laziness? i do it...cause of laziness though lol, this is really well done, and i have felt that way a lot about certain people, two or three even, right now, nice way to put feelings into words, great job!

  • Shelley in the Sky
    April 23, 2005
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    this is great beth. i really really like it. i agree with tyler about everything he said except about the license plates since i don't know his friends... anyways... this is really really good... keep up the good work...

    Shelley

  • fasterthanU
    April 23, 2005
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    wow- this is pretty good, beth! i like it a lot, although i'm not exactly sure how to put into words that i like it. when i read it, it just makes me feel... anxious, or apprehensive, like i'm waiting for something bad to happen. i'm not sure if this is actually about you and another person or what, but it seems like both of the people in the poem have some pain to deal with. oh, and i really like the "i am i" things. reminds me of a couple of friends' license plates... i am also liking the no capital letters, or punctuation for that matter. many people can't pull that off decently, but you did a good job at it. keep up the awesome work, beth, and best of wishes!!

    ~tyler

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