She plucked her ring across his lips, leaving a bloody line
He cowered in her presence, her presence Divine
She smacked him, again a torrent bursting forth like wave upon her hand
And her darkness banished another slave from her beholden lands
She walked down her throne, kicking the body aside, tossing her hair back like a curtain.
And all the other men in the hall quavered certain
She slowly walked across the floor as quiet as she pleased
And all the other slaves about, fell upon their knees.
It wasn't for her beauty, she was not a striking maid
It wasn't for her wealth, no dowries she could pay
But still, they clung to her despite her temper, he wrath
Because of the power, the power she held kept her suitors to stay
And then she burst that power forth filling the room with light
And the horrors mewling on the floor were stripped of their might
And all i saw was blocked out until sleep had set me free
for then i realized, I realized that her darkness...was me.
Author notes
Written April 22nd, 2005
A contest entry
- Your Inner Darkness by The Warmaster.
300 points, ended May 27, 2005, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I really enjoyed reading this, the title had me intrigued. Anything with darkness in it's title is a must read for me and to name it Her Darkness was just too much for me to resist. Rarely do you ever find darkness expressed as a female. You did a wonderful job on this piece, I hope you are proud.
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Well it is definitely something dark with a powerful figure. I thought of it as some sort of evil goddess authority type individual and oddly enough it reminded me of such rulers in the medieval times. Great job and I'm glad you shared it! Good luck with future writes.
-Chained Fury
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Very Good.
I really enjoyed this. The setting and the main character being this dark lady, all of it made for a very captivating read. But the twist that you put at the end was something that I was not expecting, but it seemed to pull the entire poem together in a dramatic and shocking ending. Well done.
~Laura~
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i especially like the way you portrayed her i always get this sense that she is a powerful being of some sort and you really get a feeling of inferiority from the slaves ( hehehe)
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Woman power, I love it, about time women became the people with power, this powerless crap has to end! Our turn! Great read, loved the woman in control aspect, read Night Prey, it also has a surprise twist! -
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Beautiful Write
What a thrilling twist of fate! I love your use of rhyme and the rhythm flows like liquid. I love imagery; it helps me consume a poem. Your imagery is superb and kept me interested throughout the entire piece. Your structure was also very keen and it reinforced the work perfectly. Keep up the brilliant work. Kudos for such great talent and top of the luck to you in the contest.
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Beautiful twist of story, I love a good twist
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As always, a very well written and lovely poem. Powerful ending, too, very surprising. Keep up the beautiful work, bunny dearest! -
Very dark, the ending was a surprise and I like that. Good luck in the contest.
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thank you kindly
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sex and love are no longer in the same catago
dominatrics rock all socks! your very talented! i just dont know what to do.
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