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Ode to the Son of Laughter

Canto I

Greetings Son of Laughter, amid the green oak's bough,
For if in truth you are no lover, the secret is with me now
Bend your ear this way,

 that I may bite the rose,
Draw my finger slowly down, from eyebrow to your nose.
Flicking then with tongue of fire,

 taste the sweetness of your lips,
Swallow with a warming glow, the honey as it slips.
My cheeks do nuzzle the throat now drawn, following to shirt, sky blue
Button by button it falls aside,

 and I go to heights anew


Your breasts they puzzle me, now, though not before,
How small and firm a man's breast is,
Hair soft like the shirt you wore,
Warm and firm,

 I kiss them.


 

CantoII
Lain up my back I see the sunlight through our bower
Shudders my body reluctantly, my heart it seems to cower
Then gently, ever gently,

brush back the sunlit hair,
Smiling eyes you soon begin, I'm no longer there.
Touch that takes me to the clouds,

 ever harder moving me
Sunlight through the voyeur treetops,
Rocking back and forth with thee,
Come now sounds of laughter, sounds that call your name
Sounds of love ringing in my ears,

 sounds never twice the same
I laugh and cry all at once, again with joy released
Then I look into those eyes,

 where the laughter never ceased.
Dare we not, Smiling One, to let the words pass on
Lying there within your arms,

 until the laughter's gone

Joy in all vibrations,

 rising with the wind
Clean rain upon the tent folds,

 where Heaven sees no sin


Canto III
Farewell to thee Son of Harmony
Thy laughters ring is mute,
Always will my body sing
to the music of your flute


Farewell to thee Son of Mystery
I kiss thy Cupid's bow
And all my days find happiness

 in the special love, I know


Lest all should be forgotten
And there should be no more
We'll dwell in Love together
Behind a well shut door.

From: I Come to the Tent by Mickey Sutton P.

Author notes

This was originally written in 1972, but it has been thru many edits since then and now I present it as a piece with its latest copyright 2005
Written April 22nd, 2005

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  • Thedragonisgone
    October 23, 2006
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    Quite an interesting tale told which an older tone. I'm glad you entered this. It's truly a different slant than what I've read so far. I'll be back to comment more later, perhaps.


  • Tam
    October 22, 2006
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    True talent

    Wow! A true talent stands the test of time indeed!!
    Very well done. This is a lovely read, bringing the reader on a journey of love and laughter, from beginning to end.
    Written in the best of taste!!
    I envy your talent of pen.
    Blessings! Tammy


  • pixxiepoetess
    October 22, 2006
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    I think this poem is very tasteful. It;'s sensual without being vulgar, which makes it very appealing. Whatever editing process you put it through surely has paid off. It's an amazing poem. The last line/author's note implies that this is only a part of the poem. If that's true, I would like to see the rest. --->pixxie<---

  • Theasp
    October 22, 2006
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    Nope personal experience,but I will change the spelling LMAO


  • Maldronah
    October 3, 2006
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    Tops

    Absolutely lovely. Masterful poetry. Only crit=voyeur.


  • intanglio2ring
    February 27, 2006
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    Beautifully written. The revealing of the story within poetry and the longing with great closure. Enjoyable read.

  • Karen Michelle
    May 13, 2005
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    Brilliantly written; rhyming, flow, description, imagery - everything is excellent. I especially like the final stanza and the last two lines - a perfect ending I feel. A great piece


  • klassy lassy
    April 27, 2005
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    I have not read this before, and I think it is beautiful! There is such joy in the second verse and you portray the laughter with such bouyancy. I think my favorite line in the poem are the first two in the last stanza. The freedom to love unrestrained and blessed. The tear sting, but in a good way!


  • cherche -d -ame
    April 22, 2005
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    Thanks for the better explanation . It is a real good write , as I said it seemed familiar ...but could not place it ...had been wondering and trying to recall all day long where it is that I had seen it , and unfortunately I cannot come up with it ....
    thanks again for explanation
    Reenie

  • Theasp
    April 22, 2005
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    once more my added comment will explain all

  • Vanessa K
    April 22, 2005
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    Interesting. A poem with history.

  • Theasp
    April 22, 2005
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    see comment

  • Theasp
    April 22, 2005
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    Yes, I wrote this first under Mickey Sutton Ables in 1972 it became cult favorite in Texas. I put it out a few years ago on one of those fast poetry sites under a pseudonym to check the receptivity of todays audience, then three years ago under my real name on poetry.com, because they update the copyright every year, but it had to be broken up in to three cantos in order to support there 20 line system. LOL Glad it still works. and I'll change the background, I'm graphically challenged
    Edited on Oct 22, 2:15 p.m. because 'To remove personal info'.


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    April 22, 2005
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    This is not a an easy piece to read and requires the readers full attention that in know way implies that it bad just that it took several reads. Very Sensual

  • cherche -d -ame
    April 22, 2005
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    I have to agree with Courage2Survive. It does seem as if I have read this before , but I am not sure where....be it that it might be copyrighted keeps me from being able to criticise this as a write until the origin is known....however I can state that I enjoyed it again
    Reenie


  • Courage2Survive
    April 22, 2005
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    Did you write this?This was originally written in 1972, but it has been thru many edits since then and now I present it as a new piece with its latest copyright 2005? I just didn't undrstand that part? Anyways, hard to understand, but thats just me. I think you should change the blue/purple font to something that matches the background because I think it looks funny but that is just my opinion!! Anyways, Have fun and good luck!


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