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We Fade



                         We Lie,
                              We Cry,
                        We Fade,
                                And Die.

                 Life is a masquerade of souls.

 



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Ha, the Random Philosphies will win! Well, first it was lyrics, then I extended it, than I unextended it.
Please tell me if you think this is interesting, or if it seems like random words trying to sound pretty.
Written April 21st, 2005

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  • Ninque-Aiwe
    May 19, 2005
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    Thanks for thinking that it wasn't random and that it meant something! Happy you feel that it's creative.

  • TooRainbow silver member
    May 17, 2005
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    I don't think this sounds random at all. The word choice actually shows careful consideration on your part. Maybe you feel like it's "random trying to sound pretty" because the words flow so spontaneously when read and seem to rhyme as if by accident. I think this poem is very interesting and demonstrates much creativity. It's very powerful and sad (mainly because it is true for what appears to be the majority of our society). Great work here! Very nice!! Sheryl

  • Jumbie
    April 21, 2005
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    Hey! You started writing that in health class on your hand with my pen the other day! Lol, you were like "Hmm....Oh, Hey! It rhymes!"

    Short, but wonderful

    //Rock On\\

  • Julys Midnight Sky
    April 21, 2005
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    thats what i usually do a stanza or something random just pops in my head.. im starting to just leave them the way they are.... if you extend this i.m me and let me know.. it sounds interesting.. i like it the way it is too .. it says alot.. sometimes saying less means more.. let me know...