Insane with so much anger
Hot sweat running across my head
All you do is make my life hell
Then act like it is all my fault
Even though I tried I couldn't succeed
You were always there pulling me down
Only you make me feel this way
Unlike you have planted in your head
Always and forever I'll have this burning rage
Life will go on "perfectly" as is now
Losing my cool ne'er again or stooping to your level
~April 14th 2005
Author notes
Old poem i wanted to share
Written April 21st, 2005
What did you think
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Very good, but shouldn't it be "pushing me down" rather than "pulling me down"? Anyway, good job. Sometimes it's better to rant on the page than to go out and shoot somebody.
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Good.
I feel that with such a powerful emotion (rather extension of love) you could really bring something riviting. Perhaps not limiting yourself to rules such as the acrostic format. I think you have the ability to take this sort of message to higher level, and I would like to see you do that. -
Evlclown
So glad you enjoyed my acrostic. And thanks for saying "excellent work" although I tend not to think so! LOL Thanks for reading
xoxo
~laura -
Glad you liked it J Rhys Davies.
xoxo
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Well done acrostic... You express your feeling very well. Hopefully the rage lies dormant as wisdom rises to the surface... Excellent work... keep writing
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Hate is such a powerful word to use. You have done so well in expressing your anger / frustration in this. I found myself relating to bits here and there. Nicely done my dear.
~ John
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Nice little rant. Directed at your parents? Not that it matters...
peace
doug
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Hey its a cool group...thanks for reading
XOXO
~laura -
Thanks all i asked for...and i thank you
XOXO
~laura -
You're just too sweet!
XOXO
~laura -
Thanks very much cagedrat
XOXO
~laura -
You do an awesome job..I like it..I myself is in group sexiest Wemon on AP..I saw your note..And just wanted to let you know that You do a good job..I like the ones that I have read and I will return to read more..Great!
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I don't much agree w/ free style. I think you should make your poems longer and explore them more instead of trying to cram many big words into a few lines. its meaningless. I don't want to sound like a bitch but I'm trying to give you the advice you asked for.
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wow great write..i like it alot
*i think you write good poems so i dont know what other people are thinking but yea* -
sweet
Hey. I like this write. Its pretty much how I feel about my ex cause of all the shit I went through with him. But now its over and its all better, I guess.....! But yeah, off topic there, I love your write. Expresses your feelings well and I like how you choose your words. It makes it great.
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nice write
Thank you so much my dear friend.
XOXO
~laura -
this is really good.i love how your word usage in your poetry.killer shit!
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