Slowly, oh so slowly,
Away I just drift,
‘Come to me, Come to me,’
The voice echo’s through the mist.
Slowly, oh so slowly,
The voice gets louder still,
Its says to me to sail away,
It gives me back my will,.
Slowly, oh so slowly,
My body slips away,
My limbs grow numb and cold,
But still I’m not afraid.
Slowly, oh so slowly,
It registers in my head,
I realise and recognize,
But, no, it cant be she’s dead,
Slowly, oh so slowly,
My gran calls out to me,
She beckons me to go back,
She tells me just to breath,
Slowly, oh so slowly,
She calls me back to life,
She says that it just will not do,
She takes away the knife.
Slowly, oh so slowly,
My creep open blurred,
I see my mum stood over me,
My gran no longer heard.
Slowly, oh so slowly,
I look around the room,
I look for a face that isn’t there,
And am overwhelmed by gloom.
Slowly, oh so slowly,
I ask ‘were has she gone?’,
A room full of people,
And yet I am understood by none.
Slowly, oh so slowly,
I realise she saved my life,
And yet she was never there,
She hadn’t stood by my side.
But slowly, oh so slowly,
Inside my soul she’d called,
Beckoned me back to life,
Revived me back to the ward.
Slowly, oh so slowly,
Yes, a lost lady had given me,
The best gift ever… life,
She had wanted me to be free.
Slowly, oh so slowly,
I close my eyes and hear,
Here her call to me,
‘Please live on my dear,
I want you to be happy,
I want you to be free,
Even if it means you,
Cannot yet be with me.’
Slowly, oh so slowly,
I whisper in my head,
I call out through the mist,
To a women not really dead.
Slowly, oh so slowly,
I say ‘I love you gran.’
I wonder if she can hear me,
I hope that she can.
Slowly, oh so slowly,
I open my eyes again,
And decide to live my life to the fullest,
Right till the very end.
Slowly, oh so slowly,
I thank her from my heart,
I know that she can hear me,
Because we will never really be apart.
Author notes
hey ppl this isnt my usal style but i wanted to av a go @ sum dark poetry so i came up wiv dis
so wat do u fink?
is it to conwfusin?
DO i get the point across?
please tell me
luv ya
xxxlilxxx
Written April 21st, 2005
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Comments
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this is soooooo awesome. i love the pace of it. this is a great piece. i hope you win!
Michelle -
it kind of was it was set abt my gran but i didnt commit suicide but i no if i did and she had the chance 2 thats wat shed say
thanks
xxxlilxxx -
Interesting. I understood it too. Although I'm not sure if you read the rules cause you don't have the choice number in your author's comments and there the person was gonna commit suicide? It was kinda weird though but it was interesting. Was it true? Well good luck and thanks for entering my contest!
God bless,
Spring Rain -
Good
I understood it, it's a good poem. Brink of death poems always appeal to me.
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