*Mummy please tell me why your tummy's so fat,
I can't find my kitten have you swallowed the cat?
That's my brother in there? yeah that's a maybe,
But your mouth must be huge if you swallowed a baby,
How did he get in there? and how will he get out,
Can I play with him? stick my toys in your mouth?
Won't it mess up his clothes when you eat your food,
What! there's no clothes, are you saying he's nude?
Won't he get cold? how does he cover his willy?
I think you're fibbing, mummy you are so silly,
Was I really in there, five years ago in December?
No... if that had of happened I think I'd remember.
~~~*
Author notes
Dear CherylAnn,
I know this is a bit out of context, but it always makes me smile when I read it, I hope it does the same for your sister, just a little light humour to brighten her day.
V.
Written April 21st, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Something Special by Chill Out Kid.
300 points, ended October 30, 2006, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Children by Jeni Fire.
1200 points, ended June 25, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I love this poem. It made me grin. I can almost see a little baby saying those things to it's mommy. Great job and thank you soo much for entering my contest.
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Ohhhhhhhhhhh
This is too cute and gives such a warm smile from the heart...I like that it is so tender and charming in feel.My sister like me loves little babies so I know she will like this little piece of art...
Thank you for entering
Blessings
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I really like this one!it's far to late on a Monday and that made me Smile- thanks!
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Loved it!
A baby grew in mummies tum?
That can't be true, I'm not that dumb!
Babies are brought by a stork to the door
I know it's true 'cause we've had four
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I could image this as; the perspective of what a child may think toward their mother who maybe on number 2 child.
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Excellent poem!
Ecellent poem and humorous as well! that was very cute and lovable. Writen very well.
"BOO"
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this is so cute i loved it great wirte outstanding job
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Hey. Love the humor. Some of the rhyys are alittle faulty,though, Anyway, great poem
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sooo cute!
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that is cute and funny nice job!!
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Adorable..
its SOO cute!! it sound like something a little kid would say...I love it..and it sort of rolls off your tounge..
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This is so lyrical, I love it! Excellent piece, cute with a sense of innocence coursing through the lines
inviting ~Tia
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ah this so reminds me of a conversation i had with my four year old about how the baby is in my belly now...
"I think you're fibbing, mummy you are so silly," and he said this the exact way...
very cute lil piece..
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HAHA I like it! So cute and funny! Very well-penned, my dear poetess. Best of luck to you.
Warmest wishes,
Laura
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that was great....a nice bond between mother and child....i love it......
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That's just beautiful, I've got a few stories of young children. One was four and told me with a straight face that 'Hippopotamussesssssss go moo". Cute write, and I mean that in the best way possible. lol.
Congratulations on the Gold and Honorable trophies
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Haha, that is so cute and funny!
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Too cute!!! I also really like the rhyming; really good. My favorite line: "But your mouth must be huge if you swallowed a baby"...
Awesome!
Always,
Cassie
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Awwwwww this is the cutest poem ever!
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aww that is so cute!
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Lol, how cute how a lil child wonders how life is.
Amber -
AMAZING
This made me laugh and wonder. This HAS to be what really runs through a childs mind when they see a pregnant lady. I love it.
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Cute and funny!
Thanks for the smiles! I really enjoyed this!
Maureen
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Funny, naive, direct, playful, quaint, I throuighly enjoyed your poem, though the repetition of "in there" distracted me a buit from the rythm. Well, how much nicer the world would be if we could also see through childre's eyes...
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Fantastic
So quant and fun filled!!!! Sounds exactly like a child talking to their mom whoes expecting!!!! It great to say the least.... Lovely piece of work!!!!!!! I enjoyed it very much!!!!!
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this is so adorable. great rhyme scheme. only thing I can say... maybe to have the last line flow a little easier, but its still perfect the way it is, but i would try....
had that happened, I think I'd remember.
instead of
No... if that had of happened I think I'd remember.
I love it, good work!
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this is so cute and funny and true! Little children see things so differently
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Oh that is just adorable. I remember when my sister was pregnant this little girl at her church used to lift up her shirt to try and see the baby
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awwwwww....it's so cute. Well done lol.
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this was so good..... great write
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Funny , Very funny
What if she's got no willy? Did yu peek? How do you know? Big smiles!
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very cute. Nice job!
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AWWW
that was sssoooo adorable!!! I absolutely loved it.
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Aww this is amazing.
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=] Very nice.
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Aww. Very cute poem!!! Thanks for sharing with all of AP! *Mostly the ones who are Moms *
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Aww lol this is cute! I loved it!
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This is so cute and oh so true. My niece was certain I had been eating watermelon seeds and they were growing in my tummy, when my son was born I think she was a little disappointed :) children ask the most interesting questions as they haven't heard of 'political correctness' as yet. This is lovely.
Vonnie
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this is very good i liked it and it made me laugh very good job
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cute. Children see things so strangely....
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Awww. This is the cutes thing. Made me smile first thing in the morning.
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This is soooooo cute!! I recently celebrated the birth of my grandson. (june 14) and this piece reminded me of when his daddy, now 23, was about four years old when I was pregnant with his brother. Oh what a time that was. Thanks for sharing this wonderful write, from the older siblings point of view! and congrats on the Gold and Honorable Win!!!
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Aww this is so cute, and really how a little child might speak to their mommy... You have chosen a wonderful theme for this poem, I really enjoyed reading this. You did the rhyming very well.
Thanks for sharing, and congrats on your prizes!
Keep on writing!
Annie
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Simply awesome. It was cute and it flowed quite well. You're obviously a better writer than I am so who am I to say things other than "this was amazing and I loved it." -R.T
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lol
Cute
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lol that was awesome.. it was so adorable... just made me giggle! cute poem great job!
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this is wonderful all the way through. you came up with a great, imaginative artillery fire of questions, very believable the way a child might see it (though i agree with Saint-Laurent that "nude" seems slightly out of place, though it didn't jump out at me right away, but i guess that's regional) i especially loved the idea of sticking the toys down her throat so the baby could play
"I think you're fibbing, mummy you are so silly," was especiallly authentic to me, i could totally hear a little girl's voice say this in my mind... and that last confident and decisive
"No... if that had of happened I think I'd remember."
is such a kick. really awesome job with this, and i admire your ability to use rhyme so gracefully, definetly can appreciate how it adds to this piece. i don't know if you are a parent or remember a younger relative or work a lot with children but it's very convincing... marvelous, spectacular job! -
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Hmm I never did understand the "nude" word comment maybe it's a geographical thing here I know a lot of children who use the word nude, infact a very popular childrens sayin is based on it, "Nudie Rudie" Implying playfully that the child is being rude by going nude in public. oh well glad to here you enjoyed it though.
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OMG that was the cutest poem I've ever read on here, it was so sweet. I luv it!
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awwwww this is really sweet...sooo cute
You are really creative
And clever Luv!
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This is so cute. Awwwwww!
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AWWWWWW!!! How sweet and charming.. just what I needed this evening... thanks for sharing!
Nikido
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Oh gosh, this is adorable!
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BEAUTIFUL POEM!!!! AWWWWWWWWWW I SOOOOOOOO LOVED IT... very very very CUTE!!! m nominatin it for teh spotlight
lov and cheers, shuvi
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aww i love this...i kind of thought the same when my sister was born ( that was a long time ago now haha) but it's so cute..love the rhyming and how you put it together thankyou for sharing such a wonderful piece and good luck
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AWW
this is the most adorable poem I have ever read.. this is so cute....
how did you ever think of this?
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haha, this is so cute! what option is it??
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Hehe, that was so cute. Good luck in the contest~
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exelent
well done this is a very good write,I really enjoyed this and I have now got the jaw ache to prove it as I cannot stop grinning. an exellent poem and a well deserved win I knew that debbie could be trusted with her choice of winners as she has extremely good taste being such an exelent poetess herself.congratulations. -
this is very cute. Congrats on the win
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THAT IS ABSOLUTELY ADORABLE!!!! I read it out loud to my "mummy" and she cracked up laughing. She thought it was great, and so did I. I have a little sister who is seven, and she says cute stuff like that sometimes. This really is an awesome poem. The mind of a child is such a wonderful, and you have captured it beautifully. This is fabulous.....I don't know what else to say!!!!
Thank you for entering my very first contest! It really means a lot to have people entering, especially when they have such wonderful things to say!!! Good luck in all you do.
Thanks again!
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LOL! GOSH!! this is truly a good one!! (yeah, I think she would be scared!) awesome and brilliantly written!! hehe.. You've got a good sense of humour!
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This is so cute from a child's point of view for pregnancy.. it is fun to read too with its rhythm and rhyme. Thanks for entering my contest Good Luck -Pome
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i loved this piece, it was great. it really made me smile.
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o this is cute. i like the child like essence. this is really cool. and FUNNY. ahh soo cute. i think i would ask those questions too. MY MOM WOULD NEVER XPLAIN. but very sute. great imagination
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Actually it came of the top of my head I just tried to think of things a child would say not understanding pregnancy and thought it was a funny situation in itself, a five year old asking why mums tummy is so fat because they don't hold back and just say what's on their mind but mum doesn't want to be too explicit. HEHE.
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this is halarious! Great job! I love the part about playing with him. And the part..did you eat my cat? part! you just made my day. How did you come up with this? off the top of your head..or did something inspire you?
Thank you for entering.. good luck
God BLess
~Ashley~
your rating: out of 10
lets chat sometime
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In the deliberatly, naive style you wonderfully captured the voice of an embarrasingly curious toddler, except (for me) the word nude coming out of a five year olds mouth wasn't convincing. Great fun!
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This was an adorable write about the thinking process of a child.And is pretty much right to the point on the way a child will assemalate thoughts too.Good job!~~Suseann
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loveable.
simply loveable. SEE. i- wouldnt expect this type of piece from you. but, like always, you amaze me, and suprise me. this is great too because kids, really think those exact same words. you did an exellent job at comming across with MEANING, while staying away from "dumbing it down".
this really did make me smile. you portray a realistic childish mind here.
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SO CUTE!
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This is so amazingly cute! I like how you go into the mind of a child and ask constant questions to the mother. The pure innocence of the questions shine right through, which helps to identify that the person speaking is definitely a child. I like how the words at the end rhyme.
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Great job
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Wow! This is such a cute poem!!!
I really loved this piece. Do you really have a baby brother, and if so, has he been born yet?
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That's really cute - all those questions going on in your mind...
Heehee... lol.
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cute
Funny, funny,funny I loved reading it.And like someone else said I can see a five year old saying those things.Very cute. -
I have to say that this is just too cute. LOL I can just hear a five year old saying such things. Adorable. Thank you for your lovely entry, and good luck in the contest. Hugs, Patricia
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This is fricken hilarious. Thank you for entering, and good luck in the contest.
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Side-spliting funny
So funny. I am beside myself with giggles. You have a great talent...and I've only read one of your pieces. WOW! This is poetry. This was so adorable. I haven't read anything else in the contest, but you certainly have my vote!
Best of luck!!
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This is so cute!! It actually sounds like a little kid asking all those questions. And the rhyme made it all the better, and cutier. Great Job! I can't pick a favorite line I like them all so much, the first two remind me of "I Know An Old Lady Who Swallowed A Fly" and this poem sounding very much like a child said it, it fits wonderfully. The first two lines start it off perfectly and the last two end it just as nicley.
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i love this. its so adorable and cute. keep up the good write.
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omg....that's so fucking funny!!! i love this piece. a wonderful story to share with children instead of the birds and the bees. lol....well, keep on writing these little pieces and i'll be sure to comment away.
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HAHA this is so cute! Good luck in the contest.
I'm glad to have read this
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Great Poem! Cute and funny. Good Luck in the contest!
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Now that brought a smile to my face. Very cute piece. Tongue is firmly in cheek. Loved the rhymes scheme too...not at all pverbearing, and it really adds to the overall...bounciness. Haven't got a single criticism. Wouldn't change a thing.
Cheers,
Yossarian -
awww.... this was such a cute piece,
This was wonderful,
I enjoyed reading it
Angel
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WOW... THis is VERY cute!!! It has really good flow too!!! You did a great job with this poem!!!
Thank you for entering and good luck...
Hugs,
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Now that is really cute!! I loved it!! I'm so glad you entered it When I told my daighter she had been in my tummy, she asked if she could get back in I really appreciate you taking the time to enter. I wish you the best of luck!
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That's okay Vamp. Just hadn't heard the word "muchly" used like that. It's cool.
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hehe, it's prolly not, just as prolly's not, but when typing conversatonal type text I tend to write how I talk wich includes making up words. cheers.
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Muchly? Heh. Didn't know it was a word. Your welcome.
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this is adorable! I love it so much! I t made me smile and giggle, and every time I read it, I smile and giggle some more! great job!
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Your comment is much appreciated. was hoping peeps would find it funny. Ta
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Thanks so much for your comment. It is muchly appreciated.
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cute & funny
That is so cute! I love it, so funny!
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Ha ha ha. Cute poem. I like it. Good luck.
-Bethany
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