I lie peacefully beside your soul,
almost touching, almost whole,
With our skin pressed together, our spirits connect,
With our gaze locked together, our spirits reflect,
Sweat from our brow dampens and drips,
Our faces meshed together, in a dance of the lips,
Our hands are our eyes, as we discover the dark,
And they roam oh so gently, creating a spark
With you love is tender, your arms I call home,
Expression is easy, my fingers, your comb.
We speak without sound, communicating in pleasure,
Our movements are golden, silence is our treasure,
And as your loving flesh dips in to my own,
Into sweet silence, my heart gives a moan,
Only you know me this way, with discarded mask,
Just keep it this way, darling's all that I ask.
~~~
Author notes
Sensual
This is dedicated to my then lover, now boyfriend, Bretty. I Love you so much.
Written April 21st, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Love by AudreyTyler.
300 points, ended October 26, 2006, 39 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - !!!!*Making Love Intensely*!!!! by ForeverLastingComa.
490 points, ended February 22, 55 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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nice work. the ryhme creates the right pace for the feeling of the poem, like waves in pond. -silverfish
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OoOoo, I love this. I'm usually one for free verse but this is truly excellent. I love the first two lines. breathtaking. Brillant. You had me hooked instantly. It sounds like you've got a pretty amazing guy here. I wish you only the best. Keep penning and thank you for entering my contest. Good Luck.
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I can't say much more without repeating the words of others, except for that your poem shows a lovely feeling of sensuality. Thanks for your entry!
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I really like this amazing write.
See it is simple and beautiful
It does not have the sex stuff like ........vulgar kind a stuff.
this is beautifully sexy and romantic! exactly what i was looking for! great good luck -
Very detailed, and not missing a single ounce of passion and romance .. I love erotica! Too many people think it's the same thing as "literary pornography" .. but you, obviously, understand the difference .. thanks for entering!
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great
passoniate a great read...good rhyme...smooth reading ...good luck in contest -
Very nice. I really love this piece. Very passionate, very heartfelt, and very good visual imagery for the reader. A true enjoyment to read.
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This is very well done. You have made such great use of your words and in the process created crisp, clear, well defined images and emotions that could easily be followed. there is a quality to this that really makes one want to savor your words like a fine wine. Great job. Good luck in the contest.
♥ Kimberly -
Beautiful
wow really nice work. I love every line of that poem... very well written. But not forced. Very nice. -
Beautifully written. thank you for entering!
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I think you must have a great formula for erotica. What I
think I enjoyed most about this is the subtlety you use.
You mix emotions with physical actions, and isn't that just
true to life? You have some fantastic imagery in this too.
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Mmmm... this is a beautiful work. I like how you've rhymed consecutive lines rather than alternating like many people do. My favorite line in this piece is "our hands are our eyes". Feel the love! I think the last line is a little grammatically confusing though, I know it's correct but I went over it a few times and I think that a comma followed by "is" rather than the apostrophe-s that you have now, might be less distracting.
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Cool, glad you got what I was saying about the opposites thing. I love the little devil smilie. I could see you doing your little devil face. Mwahahahahahahahaha!!
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lights dark
hiya Vampstress
Well have to say i like this - your right it is the other side of the coin to Submissions Domanice` but the way youve written it seems to suit perfectly - almost like the light side of the dark i dont know if you understand but im just putting it out there....
good work
beka
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