There you are sitting there
ignoring what I say
"she's such a fucking liar"
fuck you and your brighter day
I'm jumping on the band wagon
woo what a ride
slicing up my arms
and contemplating suicide
Shall I rise above the ground
and twirl my feet so
drowned myself in the tub
come on, which way do I go?!?
What's that you said
forget everything about me
that's what I'm doing to you
I guess it's that simple
gosh, I'm such a fool
So let me get rid of this burden
on your precious lovely life
stab myself in the back
with this beautiful magic knife
Death! Oh it's so glorious
it will make this alright
you're forgetting me anyway
you will sleep sound tonight
Assure yourself my friend
I'm going to be gone for good
your wish is my command
I do everything like I should
I must admit I am a tad bit scared
now that I have to die
it's sad it came to this you know
this is my last goodbye...
Author notes
Don't worry, i'm fine.. This is an old piece
A contest entry
- Love is the slowest form of suicide... by Yours-To-Have.
500 points, ended March 22, 2007, 79 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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The first stanza put me off a little, but the rest brought me in. Thanks for the entery. I'm glad to say that you put( or had) in the author's box that this was real. Thanks for the piece and good luck.
Lots of Love,
**Amanda** -
whoa.. u kinda put a scare to me there... but this is a really dark SUICIDAL piece.. hehe very nice babe.. keep up the great work and I shall check up on some more of your work.
xoxoxo..
Demon(Alissa) -
This was awesome! I mean geniously awesome! Me personally I loved it! It was like WOW! Hehe It reminds me of some of my writing, but this was just wow! Brilliant!
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You said the F word!!!!!
Edited on Apr 25, 6:59 p.m. because ''. -
This was great hun. I liked it simply for the fact it was so full of anger and hate. Great job.
Despair
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Very moving and convincing
Whooaaa! Ahh.. I am so relieved after reading your authors' comment! I am glad that you are fine' and I am also happy that this is just an entry to a contest! I read each line so carefully and it really scared me. It is so strong and so powerful that my heart started pounding so fast and tears started rolling down on my face, for I can feel the sadness, I can feel the pain in every word that you wrote!
I will say, this is so well written that I am so carried away on my emotional state of being right now...
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As I was reading this, a twisted little smile formed on my face. To me, because I'm twisted like that, it was funny. I don't know why, but it was. There was so much anger which a I liked. And they way things were written, it was if you were mocking this person. Which I found most enjoyable. Great write as always!
Always and Forever,
~Kendal -
Wow, VERY dark!! And yet again!! Another awesome write by you!!
i hope your better from when you wrote this long ago..
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that makes me kinda sad.. good work with pulling the audience into your work.
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It's a good poem then again kinda scary LOL no i love it and keep writing the way u do!!!!
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