I sit and think, the words fill up my head.
They thrash about and seek to find the door.
Then all those words that now need to be said,
Just tumble out and spread across the floor.
The broom of pencil gathers all the dust,
And sweeps it to the page before my eyes,
Arranging it in thoughts is now a must –
By shuffling it around can I disguise
The lack of beauty that my words display,
The plodding rhythms that are hiding there.
The rules of rhyme that oft I disobey,
Constricting what I write, it’s so unfair!
But somehow things creep out despite my woes,
In bumbling poetry and boring prose.
Author notes
I chose option #3 and it's a sonnet of course. This was kind of fun to do.
Written April 20th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Watch Out For The Cheese! by LaBelle.
300 points, ended April 26, 2005, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I love this poem. I'm glad it won the gold! It's the first time I've seen "thrash" in a sonnet. i love the imagery! as for line five , what an unusual thought: the pen as broom. In line 14 I love the alliteration, and the particular words you chose.
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Thanks so much for reading Writing (hahaha). Glad you enjoyed it. Line 14 is kind of interesting but the iambic pentameter kind of went awry there.
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I love the imagery your words create in my mind. You certainly do have a way with words, that is no mistake. And you make it fun, and like you said, it seems like you had fun with this piece. Hope you did well in the contest. And you use words that majority of people will understand. Some say, I may lack enlightment or may be ignorant, however, I love it when people use words they understand and make it relatable to their readers, instead of using the same monotonous "intelligent" words to get their ideas across. Sorry for the rant, you deserve an applause.
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What a great sonnet! I love it. I can really relate to the lines:
"The rules of rhyme that oft I disobey,
Constricting what I write, it’s so unfair!"
And I also love the lines:
"The broom of pencil gathers all the dust,
And sweeps it to the page before my eyes,"
You wrote exactly what I was looking for for that option. Nice job
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Bumbling poetry and boring prose I know your not talking about your poetry lol. Another great sonnet Paul. I havent tried writing a sonnet since my first (and maybe ) Last sonnet, you make it look so easy
Great sonnet Paul 
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Awww... Grampa!!! This is a really cute write!!! I really like it... I haven't been about to write a poem about writing yet but I hope I am able to soon!!! Good luck in the contest!!!
Hugs,
Beth
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