You pass me the last stump
I draw a deep breath
smoke filling my lungs
put my arm around you
Ren & Stimpy make no sense
out the window rain falls up
exhale, launch the butt at a spinning ashtray
try to put down the remote
but the coffee table keeps dodging my hand
you take it from me and put it down
and suddenly you're on top of me
your tongue feeling my face
I can't see the TV
my hands on your breasts
bouncy warm great fun
who needs Ren & Stimpy anyway
shirts off its hot in here
the clock runs the wrong way but that's okay
your hands snake their way
into my pants
while my fingers work
magic under your skirt
your heavy breathing in my ear
'let's rock'
yes ma'am
and the skies did rock that stars fell down
and afterwards I said
'baby, that was a night I'll never forget,
what was in that blunt?'
'honey, that was just a cigarette'
Author notes
'stop being weird about it and get another one from the pack'
totally not my style but I gave it a shot anyway
Written April 20th, 2005
A contest entry
- Your Best Time Under the Influence by UncleJoshyLuvsMe.
400 points, ended April 20, 2005, 7 entries
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I loved it just the way it is... I was thinking ahh k another erotic piece and then at the end I couldnt help but laugh! Good Job
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HAHA! this is wicked! good write!
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Damn that's tight I really loved it. your talking about things that real people do everyday. I got a lot of friends that smoke but I don't. I think it's completely hilarious when they are high cause they say the stupidest things. If I didn't know any better I would think you were black IM me back.
Love the one and only never phony,
xXHotnSexyMamaXx -
HaHa Kickin some ass with this!!! I loved it!!! HaHa!!! Yeah get job hun!!! keep it up!!!
~*Lost & Lonley*~
HopeMarie -
I really like it.. it's so vague and weird. It really exaggerates the whole feeling of being high, but it does it in a perfect way, which perfectly fits the content of the poem.
I just really like it! XD
Edited on Apr 20, 2:11 p.m. because ''.
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