Rushing water cascading down
into the lush valley down below
forming ripples of crystal beads
falling gently from leaves of aloe.
A tropical oasis of colorful beauty
bestowed upon these eyes
lost for the moment in paradise
dreaming on the isle of Molokai
The turquoise sea beckons to me
the horizon seems so very near
the sun is setting in the west
as the evening shadows appear
Purple clouds bring on twilight.
as the moon rises out of the bay
whispers of jasmine are calling
as white orchids bloom in array.
God's beauty could not hold you
my broken heart sinks each day
you are on some distant shore
so many many miles away
I am alone here in my little Eden
with nothing left for me to believe
Paradise was never meant for one
that is why God created Eve.
The mist of the water falling
mingles with tears in my eyes
I stand here on my paradise lost
there is no beauty when love dies
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Written April 19th, 2005
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WONDERFUL
Thank you so much for the lovely comment my friend. It is always a pleasure to hear from you. Take care and God Bless you. Sandy
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Poignant and written well.
Oh this is very poignant and I think that you are right there is no beauty when love dies. I like how this was expressed and I liked the graphic too as well. Written very well. -
AMAZING POEM
Bless you Mary for all the nice comments you leave. I love to read them and always love to hear from you in the mornings. It's like a little ray of sunshine to start my day. You are such a sweet young lady. God Bless you. Love through Jesus, Sandy
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Thank you for the great comment Niki. I always appreciate it. It is always so nice to hear from you. Hope all is well with you. Take care, Sandy
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Thank you so much for the wonderful connent. I am so glad you enjoted it. Take care, Sandy
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Wow this is awesome. Its beautiful and makes me want to go back to the ocean. Wonderful write my friend.
God Bless and Take Care
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Sandy!! wow this is so awesome!!! I think my favorite of yours so far! Very good imagery and you just get swept into the poem! Great Job!! God Bless You! ~Niki
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Great imagery
Sandy...
I love this! So refreshing a read. I enjoyed it as well. The imagery is great. It kinda pulls you into the whole thing. I could picture this lost paradise in my mind. Thank you for sharing. God bless you.
In Christ's love...
~Donna~
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Sandy, This surely a refreshing piece to read.... I really enjoyed it
~Di
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Ah thank you Annie, It is great to hear from you. I hope you are doing fine. I guess you are busy too. This time of the year there is so much to do, God Bless you my friend. Take care, Sandy.
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Thank you so much for the wonderful comment and the advice. I appreciate both. God Bless you. Take care, Sandy
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Beautiful Sandy I love it! And when I read these two lines, I just smiled:
Paradise was never meant for one
that is why God created Eve.
A beauty once again my friend, always a pleasure to stop in and enjoy your lovely writes, all the best my sweet friend, God Bless, Annie
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This is so refreshing! I really enjoyed it. It took me further than Calgon EVer could..lol.
Images in here are special and well written.
A critial review is invited
Since you're open, the Only thing I would suggest is that you count the syllables so that the unstressed to the stressed make an improving melody. In iambic pentameter, you'll notice that makes such a difference. I know I nit my own for that. If recited, then, it will fall, as Shakespeare put it...trippingly on the tongue.
Rhymes are very well place...and I do like how it ends for the most part.
Thank you for sharing. Warmly, CookieZeal
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