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My Purple Sky

Looking up at the purple sky
The perfectly shaped moon holds its sway
As you pull it closer
And make my legs give way.

As the ocean waves are pushed towards the moon
The night is warm but cold
Staying in your arms through out the night
Feeling the pressure of your hold.

Your my contradiction
The sun still shines upon your face
Still looking up at my purple sky
As everything takes its place.

Author notes

erm, this is a very different style of writing for me. It was just really from the picture.
Written April 19th, 2005

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  • z etoile
    July 11, 2008
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    Amazing write I lovd this. I loved the last lines Your my contradiction The sun still shines upon your face Still looking up at my purple sky As everything takes its place. Amazing write I lovd this. I loved the last lines

  • z etoile
    July 11, 2008
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    Amazing write I lovd this. I loved the last lines Your my contradiction The sun still shines upon your face Still looking up at my purple sky As everything takes its place. Amazing write I lovd this. I loved the last lines

  • Jane Matilda
    April 28, 2005
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    nice...I can relate to this poem...

  • Arkhayne
    April 25, 2005
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    This is really cool! I like your use of contradictions to parallel the picture. It is very pleasant and reads very nicely. Good flow and word choice, the rhyming is very nice and not at all forced. I really love the bit about the ocean's waves pushed towards the moon. I really like last stanza and the ending, fantastic way to close the poem.


  • April 23, 2005
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    THIS WAS AWESOME! this was very different from your other poems but it still kicked ass! it was amazing and i loved it. the flow of it was great. i also love the background! keep it up hun + [victoria] +


  • CrimsonImmortal
    April 20, 2005
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    Aww this was a pretty poem!! Very different style for you, but i think you did it great!! Great descriptions and imaginary, good luck in the contest, and keep up the ace work
    Love ya lots

    Charlotte


  • Samplette gold member
    April 20, 2005
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    This is beautiful, and I could definitely see the picture in your words. Thank you for entering the contest. You did a great job.
    S♠m


  • Mana MAYHEM
    April 19, 2005
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    This is amazing i love it. great description. MoonShadow

  • Cobra
    April 19, 2005
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    Indeed a different style, but I love it. The imagery is great, and the rhyming fits well. Nice, keep writing xXx

  • angela wells
    April 19, 2005
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    This is gorgeous. I love it. You make it seem like the picture is there to compliment the poem, instead of the other way around. Great job!


  • LostHopes
    April 19, 2005
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    well you know i think its amazing! its very different for you, but its fantastic! well done hunni this is great...hope you win, you deserve to!
    xxLuvLozxx

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