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The Perfect Girl

Saying everything is fine when nothing is alright.
Being the well-put together girl.
Who is broken up inside.
The mask worn is fake,
Full of smiles and laughs.
No tears.
Fair complexion,
Hazel eyes.
Behind the mask is something no one understands.
Fears and tears,
Ruined inside.
Broken hope
Broken pride
The thing no one ever sees.
Depressed and alone,
Emotions felt everyday.
Always cold, never warm.
The open door has now been closed,
So no one can see the broken girl inside

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Written April 18th, 2005

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  • Bettyboop24
    July 20, 2005
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    OOo... wow. this was great! loved it. Well done and keep it up ..

  • dream catcher
    April 20, 2005
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    This is a strong piece, very emotional and whatnot. The feelings are real and that's awesome. Good write

  • -Silenced Dreams-
    April 20, 2005
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    Very original and creative. I like this piece, its written to perfection, flows smoothly and is deep, insightful and emotional. A very moving write indeed, thanks for sharing.

    Take Care
    - Becca


  • April 20, 2005
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    Bravo!!! lol I've always wanted to say that and actually mean it...This poem was very well written and I could tell it was wrtten from the heart as well...I can relate to this poem so it means a lot to me and touches my heart...Once again, great job and keep writing amazing poems!!!