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Tears in Heaven

Clapton musing Cocaine, Cocaine
Enters the Monkey
She don't lie, she don't lie
Climbing my back
Went down to the crossroads
Rockin' my brain
Fell down on my knees
Hiding in shadows stare
She don't lie, she don't lie
Enters the demons
Cocaine, Cocaine

Tears in Heaven

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Written April 18th, 2005

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  • girlxonthewall
    July 3, 2005
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    This poem is alright. This poem left me feeling kind of empty..there just wasn't enough emotion there. Reading it, I felt nothing. Good luck in my contest.

    J.


  • kryspin
    May 6, 2005
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    i find this choppy and unconnected. ALthough your intentions were interesting i just find it too cut and paste. I'm not trying to be negative but that whole "cut and paste feel" just didnt do it for me


  • Sonja
    April 29, 2005
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    Nice poem

    I agree with the words from this poem: Tears in Heaven, because I meet somebody adicted. It is so sad and truth:
    ...
    Enters the demons
    Cocaine, Cocaine
    ...
    Touching and sad poem.

  • marrow
    April 28, 2005
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    Well, I am back again to read some more of yuor work so I can come to a decision on the contest.

    I really liked this piece a lot, because it did differ greatly from the one that you sent to me. Versatility may not be a problem afterall. I will read one more, and then post the results in a day or two. Thanks.

    Justin

  • Warrior7
    April 28, 2005
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    Enjoyed this very much. I really like that song cocaine, but very much love the song tears in heaven, actually i just really enjoy all of eric claptons music.. Great write, weird but great


  • DarlingStac
    April 27, 2005
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    this is awesome! i loved it... i LOVE how you write.. your wonderful...xoxo stac


  • queen Moderators member
    April 26, 2005
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    I love that song Cocaine, especialy when i have had a drink or two i like to sing along. This poem reminded me of that song. Very cool

  • Strawberrymoose
    April 21, 2005
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    great

    rather confusing sounds like on drugs themself is that what it is suppose to be
    really enjoyed it was refreshing and different
    good write
    me


  • panhearts22
    April 19, 2005
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    monkey!!!!!!!! woot! (^_^)


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    April 19, 2005
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    Holy cow I had forgotten all about that song thanks for the reminder Dam showing my age again... top stuff


  • Eeyores Buddy
    April 19, 2005
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    Ah i did like this alot and clapton's music is very good aswell as this poem. Thanks for enteirng and good luck in my contest

    katy

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