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On the Side of the Road


There was a little girl lying
On the side of the road.
You’d think she was sleeping
If you didn’t know.

She was outside playing
Like all little girls do
Innocently oblivious
As the cloud passed through.

Follow the trail of man’s weapons
And it’s these sights you’ll find.
Bombs, missiles and gas clouds,
They just don’t pay any mind.

Exactly how is this progress?
What human need does it fill
To constantly improve upon
All the ways we can kill?

Politicians argue incessantly
Far away from the stench
Of the bodies that lay rotting
Face down in the trench.

And the men who develop weapons 
Then sell them to whoever can pay,
I wonder, do they ever feel guilty
As they watch their children play?

They're surely aware of the carnage
Their products are responsible for.
Do they lie in their beds and worry
That they might reach their door?

No, I’m sure they’re quite happy
And they sleep soundly at night.
For some men, a lot of money
Can make almost anything right.

But if there’s one thing I know,
It’s that we get what we give.
We always reap what we sow.
We can’t promote death and live.

All those weapons will be turned on us
And the battlefield will come home.
There’s no reason that this empire
Can’t suffer the same fate as Rome.

 

We wonder why we've lost credibility 
But at least one reason for all the fuss 
Is that we flood the world with weapons
Then wonder why they’re pointed at us.

 

Sometimes war and violence are unavoidable
In a world with tyrants springing up all the time
But arming the world should not be a business
And fanning the flames of war should be a crime.

Our technology is constantly advancing
But our souls are still stuck in the mud.
If we don't find a way to align them,
This world will be swallowed in blood.

~ ~ ~

There was a little girl lying
On the side of the road.
You’d think she was sleeping
If you didn’t know.

She was just one more little life
And just another statistic to some.
But, of course, she was much more
And she died for what we've become.


Author notes

The photo was taken down to avoid misinterpretations.

I wrote this poem after seeing the aftermath of Hussein's chemical gas (WMD) attack on Halapja in 1988. It is not an anti-war or anti-troops poem. Far from it. Unfortunately, in a world full of maniacs running countries, war is sometimes a necessary evil. This is an anti-irresponsible weapons proliferation poem. Nothing more.


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Musical - Zorba the Greek
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Written April 18th, 2005

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  • Tam gold member
    June 12, 2006
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    GOLDEN

    This is a great poem. You have weaved so much compassion into your message! I LOVE THAT! Very well written and I am so happy to read poetry with real content. I shall read more of your work as I suspect I will enjoy your views. Blessings! Tammy

  • CoveredInTheBlood
    June 12, 2006
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    This is very good, at first I thought it was anti-war and was ready for hippie-bashing, but I agree with your standpoint on retarded weapons usage.


    Erin
  • PalmettoSky
    June 12, 2006
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    This a very important message and you delivered it with great style and grace. With faith as small as the size of a mustard seed, one can move mountains.This is such a beautiful piece of writing.....the words and lines flow perfectly...I must say I really enjoyed this! thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the good work.

  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    June 12, 2006
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    Very well written
    and thought out
    poem. Great points
    made. Bravo for
    having the courage
    to speak out.
    Thank you for sharing.
    Good luck in the
    contest.

    Jeannie D Hunter
  • Yvette Champ
    June 12, 2006
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    Well written,thought provoking write,poetically raising many pertinent issues for society as a whole.Why does mankind concentrate on more effective weaponery rather than more effective ways to not need them?Why do the countries sell the arms to certain countries even if they are at war with them?Why are some politicians shareholders in these companies and in the companies that get the lucrative contracts to rebuild the devastation?Surely that is a conflict of interests?The irony is that nuclear weapons are the next phase of man's inhumanity to man and whether one is a Dove or a Hawk,whatever nationality they are,rich or poor,everyone will ultimately be affected by the sanctioned testings of these and the unleashing as the soil will be affected,affecting the food chain,the sea will be affected affecting the myriad life forms,the air will be affected,circling around the planet and up the stratosphere affecting global warming.That is where society will then be completely rearranged as Africa gets hotter than ever,ice caps melt and flood entire regions and tsunamis cause devastation and reclaim land to the sea.Radiation will reign on us all,whatever our colour or creed,and the money market will collapse,money is only worth what it can be exchanged for,if there are no technological gadgets,no economy,no share index,you could have amassed millions but it would be meaningless,as usual Mark,your write was well done and well worth the read and worthy of applause.Love and light,Yvette
  • beautifully human
    June 12, 2006
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    brilliant

    This is a very brilliant peice. I loved the opening. It shows readers a side of war that many do not wish to think about. After reading this poem the phrase "War is not healthy for children and other living things" sticks out in my mind. I believe that this peice will open the many minds who read it to all the consequences of war and how it affects life.

  • June 12, 2006
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    You have driven home the fact that there are not any winners in war despite any strength a victorious or even a defeated army might wield, just a great deal of sadness and needless destruction well.

  • Jeremy0826 gold member
    June 12, 2006
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    Awesome write! This poem is so insightful of the world that we live in today. You brought up a lot of good points throughout this poem. Great work!


    Allen0826

  • martinezjjoe
    June 12, 2006
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    excellent

    a very insightfull write excellent

  • grannyeri gold member
    June 12, 2006
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    So much of what goes on we never hear of, only what either side wants us to see - the really bad, the really good. Tragic circumstances that you have shared with us in this write.

  • AgeofAquarius
    June 12, 2006
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    awesome write Mark ...good to see this again...

  • Lady Altheia
    June 12, 2006
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    Very powerful; poem. It is sad our world is so filled with so much violence and killing. It is always the children that get hurt and killed.

  • grannyeri gold member
    September 14, 2005
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    Hi - commented on this one before. Thought is was just awesome. Thanks for your comment on mine too. Appreciate it.

  • lovely lemon tree
    August 3, 2005
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    i loved it. we coused our own armageddon. i was suprised so few people used that concept. bravo. so much emotion. you displayed it beautifully. great write! best of luck in the contest, and keep penning!

  • sewasham gold member
    August 2, 2005
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    Hey Mark, this write really shakes one into reality. The innocent always seem to pay the ultimate price when the dinosaurs clash. Great write and good luck in the contest. Take care and Have fun. Steve

  • July 23, 2005
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    This is very powerful, and in my opinion brings home the problem at hand. You hit the nail on the head. Too often, our politicians forget that real people suffer for their arguments. Arguments and power struggles, and they forget humanity in the mix..its truly tragic.
  • Apparition
    July 15, 2005
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    No reason poetry can't have a conscience. I have read this over several times, always wanting to leave a comment, but not being able to. In this day and age when television is in the middle of the battlefield, we can easily become hardened and used to seeing so much death. The heartless murders of so many children bring it so much closer to home. This touched a tender spot,...not just what you said, but how you said it. I haven't watched much television, lately. Either working or too tired when I was home to turn it on. I suppose I haven't been very sociably responsible lately. I didn't realize how very out of touch I am.


    Bravo.
    Edited on Jul 15, 11:36 p.m. because ''.

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    July 1, 2005
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    Hi Tammy,

    Don't hate me too much but this is not an anti-Bush poem, it's an anti-Hussein poem. I wrote this after seeing photographs of children killed in his chemical weapon attack on Halapja in 1988. ( See massgraves.info ). I don't think Bush is the monster the American public is making him out to be. He's not flawless, either, but he's killing a lot of terrorists, the kind of people who want us all dead and who would gladly use a nuclear weapon against us if we left them alone long enough to organize it. Yes, Osama is still holed up in a cave somewhere, but even his quality of life is in the toilet and will be until he's found. Millions were liberated in Iraq. The majority of the population turned out to vote at great risk to their own lives. They weren't afraid of our soldiers, they were afraid of the terrorists, who kill their own people without hesitation or mercy. If the Iraqi people didn't support what we were doing there, nobody would have showed up at the polls. The terrorists are bugs. Bush is exterminating them. I'm all for it.


    You're not the first to interpret this as an anti-war poem, but what it's really about is the irresponsibility of flooding the world with weapons and then acting shocked when those weapons are turned on us. I didn't mean to say there is never any need for war. Unfortunately, in this world, there is moral violence and immoral violence - bad guys killing good guys, or good guys killing bad guys. Terrorists, Islamic or otherwise, are some of the most clearly drawn "bad guys" the world has ever seen, right up there with the Nazi's and Japanese fascists. Leaving them alone to plot more attacks is not an option.

    Thanks,

    Mark

  • Whispering Winds
    June 30, 2005
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    Mark,
    I dont know how i missed this one, but i have to say that this brought tears to my eyes, and a ache in my heart. I dont know what to say. But its about damn time that someone can see what I do. Why is it all the lil one have to die. Why are we still at war? I dont get it...so many people in this world die every day...but how many have to? I just dont understand. How can Mr. Bush lay down at night? How can he put food in his mouth? How can he even look in the mirror? I would love to ask him those questions..and when he answered with his poor excuses, i want to show him some pics that I have seen...and then see what he has to say. I dont understand, and these tears that are falling down my cheeks right now, are for all the ones that have to die cause of the one we are suppose to call president..
    Thanks for sharing, and i hope this write touches everyone the way it has touched me
    Take care, and thanks again for sharing this with us,
    Tammy
  • Kasheera
    June 24, 2005
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    Amazing! this poems stands out amongst all others..This world needs a positive change...and the people need a new set of ideals to live by to end violence...You are very talented..thanx u for entering! this was amazing!

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    June 9, 2005
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    Hi Lencio,

    I have added you to my favorites as well. I'm looking forward to exploring your work. Thanks again and all the best to you.

    Mark

  • lencio-sunchild gold member
    June 9, 2005
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    Thanks Mark, I am glad you have liked my writings. You are truly an amazing writer yourself and a very sensitive soul. Will add you to my favs, so I can read your new posts everytime I log in.

  • lencio-sunchild gold member
    June 9, 2005
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    I think you are conscious about yor Sad poems, I had these feelings when a few people said they were sad,and tried to change the feel and emotion, but then I realised, that I was not too good at writing humour poems. Your poems, all those I have read, are truly beautiful. This one is sad, but excellent as your other writes. BTW, Lencio is a spanish name, and its root name is "Lawrence" the meaning is "crowned with laurels"

  • SharonLynn
    May 21, 2005
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    Mark this is absolutely beautiful. It made me cry more than most of you poetry does. You struck a chord in me this time. It makes all the hell I've been through lately seem like nothing....Beautiful.....I don't really know what to say. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    May 15, 2005
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    Hi Michele,

    I know what you mean. I believe there is a necessity for defense in this world, even war (when all other options are exhausted.) There is naked aggression and maniacal leaders like Hussein who must be fought. Holocausts can't be ignored. Neither can the people who would commit them. So good people are forced to take up arms over and over again. My anger in this piece, as you know, is the irresponsible slugs who market weaponry to the world indiscriminately for the sake of profit. Marketing weapons and weapon technology the same way clothes and cars are marketed should not be allowed. The U.S. has been more responsible for arming the world to the teeth than any other country and the long-term survival of all of us becomes more unlikely as a result. We were all better off when we could only throw rocks at each other.

    Thanks for your thoughtful critique.

    Mark

  • Michele La Pointe
    May 15, 2005
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    -----this one little girl would have been reason enough for me to do all we have done in Iraq, twice-----
    i admire your strong views.... strong is probably too weak a word, but this is an intense piece of work that had me reflecting on my own opinions and social ideologies.... i feel strongly about such issues myself but for some reason, i am always able to see 'some' merit to the opposing opinion... maybe i'm just weak... anyhow... i love the irony here too, weapons being produced to protect ourselves, and people still act shocked when their 7 year old kills his baby brother with dad's gun ... people suck

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    May 11, 2005
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    Pongo,

    I'm sorry for bringing back bad memories. I just wish a poem, book, movie, etc. could change things. It feels powerful to write because of the release but when I am done, they are just words on a page and I know the massacres will continue as they always have, and wars to stop the maniacs in our midst will always be a painful necessity.

    As a Vietnam veteran, your opinion on this means very much to me. Thank you for the comment and, as always, thank you for my freedom.

    Mark
  • pongo
    May 11, 2005
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    I remember seeing many of these dead bodies....little girls, boys alike. Women of all ages. Just a different country, different war.

    P~

  • Grieving-Willow
    May 7, 2005
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    Now I could have sworn that I had commented on this, I remember reading this and I know I appaulded it... perhaps that was the day when I was needed for something in the office and your poem was the one I appaulded and was going to comment upon later but being the nerd that I am forget whose piece it was Well, I guess that problem is solved!

    Sorry for taking so long to respond back to you on this one, I dunno what quite to expressed that hasn't already been expressed. Your work is always amazing and as I tell dad on his work, your poetry is always a MASTERPIECE I hope to see a new write in the very near future.

    Love You!!!
    Your Niece
    Sara

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    May 7, 2005
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    Lassy,

    Your comment on this poem made it worth writing. If you don't mind, I'm going to quote you in my author's comments. You're right - I'm not against war under all circumstances because sometimes there's no other way to remove maniacs from power. They never step down willingly and people who live under them are usually too beaten down and defenseless to fight for themselves. The world can't stand by and watch an atrocity take place indefinitely.

    Thanks,

    Mark

  • klassy lassy
    May 7, 2005
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    Beautifully penned, Mark. You are right, of course. This will touch those who have heart, but I know you would give your all to slay the beast. There have been walls and armour since the days of old, but not for the innocent victims of terror. I know that there are many who question if there is a God, or a heaven, but I've reflected on Jesus' word many times: "But whoso shall offend one of these little one which believe on me, it were better for him that a millstone were hanged about his neck, and that he were drowned in the depth of the sea." He never stood for the slaughter of innocence.
    Edited on May 07, 10:34 because ''.

  • plinkyponk
    May 5, 2005
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    i have gone all goose bumpy reading this. gulp. if only more people were like you

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    May 3, 2005
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    Hey Galfalfa,

    Sorry to bum you out. lol Here's one that might cheer you up, if you haven't read it yet - allpoetry.com/Poem/938530


  • galfalfa gold member
    May 2, 2005
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    This is certainly sad...sad because it's true. That last stanza sure gave me a pain in my stomach...now you're going to have to make it up to me and make me laugh - give me your best Knock Knock joke or write a funny piece
    This is flawless - you should be proud ...brilliant!
  • Antipodi
    April 25, 2005
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    EYEOPENINGSADWORDS

    WoW! this is exquisite ..the terrible tradgedy is these people are taking a tighter control opf society using terrorism as bogyman..how do we fight this mentality and the vile weapons they produce..which little child will die today and which one tomorrow..life has become unimportant in our struggle for power..

  • PurpleSky
    April 25, 2005
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    you always got to go and make me cry this is so sad and heartbreaking as most of your writes on this subject. well expressed and it definatly leaves an impact with the reader.
    huggles
    ~Lena~
  • AnneliesMarie
    April 24, 2005
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    Very beautiful...
  • OneandOnly12
    April 24, 2005
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    I loved the poem it's frustrated how true everything you said is and I also loved how you put some much information on your "Authors Comments"

  • April 24, 2005
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    Amen. Well done.
  • bloodfromsuicide
    April 24, 2005
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    WOW this was a really good poem! and a really good subject to do it on and i agree on what you are saying! well done!

  • BABii
    April 24, 2005
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    OMG! This is the only write that has made me cry! Keep up the good work.

  • April 23, 2005
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    great

    wow! this is incredible! i love this u diserve like a medal or something! lol this is wonderful! ur an amazing writer and i know will go read more of ur work

  • JasmineMarie
    April 23, 2005
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    WOW I will have to read this poem a few more times to absorb it all. Just wow.

  • finding myself 84
    April 23, 2005
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    I'm sure that I'm not the first to tell you how absoulutely amazing I believe this poem truly is. You've spoken volumes with these words. Awesome work... keep the ink flowing through your viens. *Sonya*
  • tamralynn2004
    April 23, 2005
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    This poem should definitely be shown to the world. Your type of thinking could open the eyes of a new generation. I am absolutely in tears right now.

  • Aeturnu
    April 22, 2005
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    Fabulous portrait of your emotions on the subject. Was a very nice read and flowed perfectly. Keep it up.*

  • HeMeansNothingToHer
    April 22, 2005
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    Good write.

  • YerTweetyness
    April 22, 2005
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    Removing Saddam Hussein from power was the best thing that came from this war.
    Now if we can simply capture Osama. I've read several books about these two animals.
    My son was over in Iraq for several long months. ( Almost a year) He saw things that will forever haunt him.
    Mark, This written piece was simply amazing and very insightful! Excellent
    I share many of your views.
    Yertweetyness
  • persecuted poetree
    April 22, 2005
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    I appreciate how you feel about war and violence. The poem was amazing. Great choice of words and i love how you got into the scene. I felt like i was walking down a road and i saw the little girl. Beautiful

  • Touchof1der Moderators member
    April 22, 2005
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    I understand the purpose of your poem and I share in your grief. I truly do. I also see another side to this, as unfortunate as that is. I am not only reminded of the laws of reciprocity here... whatever you reap, you sow. But also... for every action, there is an equal and opposite reaction. Although there is no denying that weapons of mass destruction and carnage do indeed protect us as United States citizens, it is done at the cost of many innocent lives. This is hard piece my friend and it pulls greatly at my heart.
    ♥ Kimberly

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    April 21, 2005
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    Orion,

    America is not intentionally killing civilians. Our military personnel has the same conscious you and I do. I have repeated myself about a dozen times under this poem so I'm just going to post a previous response below.


    I agree that any civilian casualty is a tragedy. Our President and military feel the same way, but it's next to impossible to avoid when the terrorists we are fighting hide among the people, using our own desire to avoid killing civilians against us. To the terrorists we are fighting, civilian casualties are the main goal. To us, they are a tragedy which we mourn.

    As you probably know if you read my author's comments, I don't agree that Bush has taken more lives than he has saved. Neither do the great majority of the Iraqi people. Saddam killed at least 300,000 and would have surely killed many more thousands if left in power. Over 7000 were found last weekend alone, but most of the mass graves will probably never be located. Some researchers have even estimated the dead at over a million. A lot of damage can be done by a madman in 30 years of power. We should have taken him out a lot sooner but as usual, we waited too long. John Kerry wanted to take Hussein out, and so did Clinton. In fact, Clinton proposed it to Congress but they rejected it.

    I think the main difference between myself and the "anti-war" crowd is that I believe war is sometimes necessary. Tyrants don't relinquish their power voluntarily, and they can't be allowed to run amok, even though the U.S. continually allows them to for too long before doing something about it.

    However, I don't support Bush blindly. I think he's an idiot on environmental matters, for instance. But this is a messy war because we're fighting a cowardly enemy with no honor or code of conduct, an enemy who sees nothing wrong with hiding behind women and children.

    Bush could have avoided all of the accidental civilian casualties so far by simply lobbing missiles in from miles away or carpet bombing the entire country. Instead, our soldiers are walking through alleys and knocking on doors, getting picked off by snipers one by one, in an attempt to weed out the terrorists hiding among the civilian population. If Bush didn't care about civilian casualties, he wouldn't be engaging in microsurgery.

    There is moral killing and immoral killing. Ridding the world of evil men is moral killing. A "leader" terrorizing and murdering his own people is immoral killing. Can you imagine Bush killing Americans for whatever reason he wanted and burying them here and there in mass graves? The idea is unthinkable, but for some reason, many Americans have no problem doing nothing while leaders of other countries do that very thing.

    Visit this site for a few photos of the kind of thing Hussein was up to and then tell me if you think it was a bad idea to remove him from power.

    massgraves.info

    I heard a quote when I was about 18 and maybe I took it to heart too much, but it says all I could ever say about this war - "Evil flourishes when good men do nothing."

    Evil was flourishing in Iraq. It isn't anymore, and every Iraqi knows it. I also tend to pay more attention to the average Iraqi citizen than I do to college professors and media whores who live in bubbles and have little or no knowledge of the realities of war. Over half the Iraqi population went out to vote at great personal risk - not because they were afraid of our soldiers but because they were afraid of the terrorists. I heard an Iraqi man who had just finished voting for the first time in his life say, with tears in his eyes, "God created America to bring freedom to people like me." He had lost most of his family and friends under Hussein's regime.

    It's not as simple as "war is bad, peace is good." Thousands of children were dying of either hunger, murder or torture under Hussein. How much longer should we have allowed that to continue?

    Thanks for your kind comments on the poem, and I hope you don't mind the difference of opinion.

    Mark
    Edited on Apr 21, 4:51 p.m. because ''.

  • StoryOfaLostLove
    April 21, 2005
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    wow

    wow...you are published??? that is ubercool! i reallly like this and i totally agree with you on the subject. amazing poem
  • ecrivain01 silver member
    April 21, 2005
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    We've already cussed and discussed the options.

  • Orion
    April 21, 2005
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    The poem is well-written, and you used some powerful wording and imagery in there. It's really quite good, with an exceptional message. However, I'd just like to throw this idea out there: When death and murder is the ultimate atrocity, is war an appropriate solution? At what point does America's killing of civilians justify our search for the alleged enemy? As we quickly and efficiently add to the death toll, how many lives are we in fact saving?
    Edited on Apr 21, 3:54 p.m. because ''.

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    April 21, 2005
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    hardlove,

    Thanks very much for your comment. Actually, this is not an anti-war poem. It's an anti-weapon proliferation poem. Unfortunately, just as violence is sometimes necessary in our individual lives (muggers, lunatics, etc.), war is sometimes necessary in this world because there are lunatics running countries. Of course, I do believe that war should always be the last possible resort after every other option has been exhausted.

    Thanks again,

    Mark

  • April 21, 2005
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    THIS IS GREAT ANTI-WAR LIKE..I LIKE IT ALIT..YOU DID A GREAT JOB..I HAVEN'T THOUGHT OF ANYTHING LIKE THIS BUT YOU DID VERY WELL AT IT..IF YOU'D LIKE TO STOP BY AND READ SOME OF MY WORK FEEL FREE WE ALL LOVE COMMENTS WELL ATLEAST I DO ...HA!
  • Adam Gellings
    April 21, 2005
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    yes

    the general conscious is appluading and rightfully so, keep writing hope to read more from you, you have what it takes to gain applause thats for sure
  • lilqueen618
    April 21, 2005
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    This piece is amazing. I appreciate all poems and poets at that, but I find this one to be especially unique because most pieces are written on other topics such as love, suicide, and hate. I think that you put a lot of mind into this and it's a very up-to-date piece. Fantastic.

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    April 20, 2005
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    knarfman,

    Thanks! Actually, I have been published. Next time you're in the bookstore, check out Chicken Soup to Inspire the Body and Soul for my poem, Gratitude. Getting poetry published in real books (as opposed to vanity and self-publishing) is quite a trick these days, but I'll keep trying. Difficulty or even impossibility is never a good reason not to try.

    Thanks again and best wishes,

    Mark
    Edited on Apr 20, 5:08 p.m. because ''.
  • knarfman
    April 20, 2005
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    great

    WoW - this was a very touching poem and it is hard for me not to break down into tears reading this peice but it is very well put together and i can honestly say that your a great writer and you should be published.----thanx for the tear jerking poem
  • Dragon-Fly
    April 20, 2005
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    You make a really good point. I'm not "anti-war" i just think a lot of the deaths could have been prevented. I actually agree on a lot of what your saying. and i definitely don't mind your opinion, even if i hadn't liked it, i still wouldn't mind. It's always good to get different sides of one story.

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    April 20, 2005
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    Dragon-Fly,

    Thank you very much for your kind message. I agree that any civilian casualty is a tragedy. Our President and military feel the same way, but it's next to impossible to avoid when the terrorists we are fighting hide among the people, using our own desire to avoid killing civilians against us. If the situation were reversed, our soldiers would not be able to hide among civilians. They would just blow up the whole place. To them, civilian casualties are the main goal. To us, they are a tragedy which we mourn.

    As you probably know if you read my author's comments, I don't agree that Bush has been responsible for more deaths than saved lives. Neither do the great majority of the Iraqi people. Saddam killed at least 300,000 and would have surely killed many more thousands if left in power. Over 7000 were found last weekend alone, but most of the mass graves will probably never be located. Some researchers have even estimated the dead at over a million. A lot of damage can be done by a madman in 30 years of power. We should have taken him out a lot sooner but as usual, we waited too long. John Kerry wanted to take Hussein out, so did Clinton. In fact, Clinton proposed it to Congress but they rejected it.

    I think the main difference between myself and the "anti-war" crowd is that I believe war is sometimes necessary. Tyrants don't relinquish their power voluntarily, and they can't be allowed to run amok, even though the U.S. continually allows them to for too long before doing something about it.

    I don't support Bush blindly. I think he's an idiot on environmental matters, for instance. But this is a messy war because we're fighting a cowardly enemy with no honor or code of conduct who hide behind women and children.

    Look at it this way - Bush could have avoided all of the civilian casualties so far by simply lobbing missiles in from miles away or carpet bombing the entire country. Instead, our soldiers are walking through alleys and knocking on doors, getting picked off by snipers one by one, in an attempt to weed out the enemy hiding among the civilian population. If Bush didn't care about civilian casualties, he wouldn't be engaging in microsurgery.

    Anyway, again, I appreciate your comments and encouragement on this one. I hope you don't mind me sharing my opinions with you.

    Mark
  • Ellmist
    April 19, 2005
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    Very Well Done

    Whoa.....that cut deep my friend, Very lyrical, this would make a great song, and a popular one ar that, You did a wonderful job at getting your message accross and for that I praise you, well done.

    ~Ellmist~
  • Paper Muse
    April 19, 2005
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    As has been said before, powerful piece of work - it made me very sad and angry when reading it. I loved the raw truth and your message was clear and blunt. Great work.
  • Dragon-Fly
    April 19, 2005
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    Poems like this are what help keep our world as kind as it can possibly be. People like you who stand up for what they believe in, I don't think we would be anywhere without any of you. thats why i think this poem is so beautiful. It's so true, so touching and so well written. I don't agree we should be in Iraqi, but i think sense were there, we should stop the killing, instead of increasing it. I don't mean to offend anybody by saying this, I'd just like to say that Bush has killed more people then the amount he has saved. If you take out one person, or add one person, everything changes. Maybe if that little girl would have lived, she would have made her change visible to everyone. she didn't, and i think its definitely something I'd cry over, if i hadn't done that enough tonight. Thanks for a great political piece. Even if it's not supposed to be political, thats the way i interpreted it. your a great writer, and you describe real things like this so well.

  • April 19, 2005
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    amazing

    Wow, I really love this poem. It's amazing. There's so much emotion and feeling in it. The sad thing is that it's so true. You make some very good points. Great job on this though, I love all of it.
  • xfallenxdarkness
    April 19, 2005
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    There's so much emotion and meaning in this poem..I was bascially speechless after reading this.

  • icequeen
    April 19, 2005
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    great

    This is very good and touching. It is definitely getting the message across.

  • -LilacThOughts- gold member
    April 19, 2005
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    extremely funny

    this is a very powerful poem and really gets your point across...i began to shed a tear as soon as i thought about the little girl, such an innocent child to be caught up in war...there is no excuse for the loss of anyones life through war...probably most of the dead never really knew what the fight was all about...a terrific poem thx for writing it and thx for caring
  • Forever Unknown
    April 19, 2005
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    You're amazing

  • mozarts funeral gold member
    April 19, 2005
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    Bravo bravo!!

    This one wrenched at my heart, and i'm crying as i'm writing this, as I should be....i often think all the good we do in this country, and whether or not we do it because we can or because we want to.. i LOVE it bravo

  • Pammers
    April 19, 2005
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    Wow this is a very emotional, powerful, sad poem all in one. and it i understand what your talking about with all the weapons and how even though through out the many many years everyone on earth have been trying to improve and make the world better and build it to what it is now but we also have the power to destroy it (i'm not sure if i'm making sense but i thought it was something to do with the poem lol) but your poem makes a very strong point of view on the world and the war going on. this is an amazing poem. keep up the great work!
    p.s. i'm sorry if misspely things in this comment

    =^..^= ~Pamie~ +Applaud

  • shastadaisey123 silver member
    April 19, 2005
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    most powerful and poignant piece I have read today...I think we must all remove the "blinders" and see this war for what it really is ....no matter what we think of the politics...one innocent child's life saved is worth the fight....bravo

  • BattleOfBlood
    April 19, 2005
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    It was captivating and go..beautiful in sad and truthful way. I hope that came out right. It was so true and I felt so much sorrow when reading this. You are talented and can shape the world with your pen. Remember that for it could take you far. Keep on writing.
    Blessed be,
    Lefay

  • truembrace
    April 19, 2005
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    I'm a big fan of reading poems that are based on real world events. Granted, there are the normal share of heart-attack, abuse and break up themes - still, I think the theme you've chosen depicts the magnitude of things we overlook even more.

    This reminds me of how many civilian lives in children are lost in warfare, orphaned, left for lost. There aren't words for such shame. Still, you did well to capture the gravity of such situations in your poem.

    Nicely done.

  • SuZyCuE
    April 19, 2005
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    This is one powerful piece, one of those poems that make you stop and think. Being a mother of 5 girls my heart breaks for that little girl in the red sweater, and the many other little girls and boys that were not shown. Wow thanks for making me stop and think just how lucky I really am

  • saviya
    April 19, 2005
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    The Chinese first invented gunpowder some thousand years ago. And Otto Hahn in 1938 first split the atom in his Berlin lab. Now to your poem... it was very profound. Made the reader really wonder about war, the pros and cons. I know - are there pros? I suppose it depends on how you assess each individual war. Your comments below explained alot & were delpful to understand your poem. It's good that people write out like this.

  • Stirrer of Stardust
    April 19, 2005
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    The piece flowed well. Good work with the rhyme scheme, though the mud/blood bit seems too obvious/forced to me. Overall, quite a good bit of writing. Keep up the good work!

    ~ ~ Sincerely, Janet ~ ~

  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    April 19, 2005
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    Excellent!

    It is with sadness that we see in white and black just what we have become. There is no peace in war nor greed. A wonderful verse. Timely, strong, and forceful. Excellent work. ~Pam

  • Kestryl
    April 19, 2005
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    Absolutely beautiful poem... i was almost going to complain about the fact that the first stanza's rhyme scheme wasn't reallly.... rhyming... .... but then i read the rest and was so blown away that I realized it didnt matter much. Absolutely breathtaking and thought provoking.

  • CountryCousin
    April 19, 2005
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    Very good

    You have a very special talent in your writes and bring out many powerful points. I like both of your poems and do think that you have the making of a masterpiece.

  • Methodic Breakdown
    April 19, 2005
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    Great job with this poem! I totally agree with you. This war is pointless. We don't need to be killing so many innocent people. I don't usually read political poems, or get tangled up in politics, but I felt like I had to speak my mind about this poem. Great work!
  • Willow34645
    April 19, 2005
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    this is a magnificent piece. i love political poems, but this one more so than any other i've read. this is a moving poem. something that tells you to step back from the world and look. step back from the "patriotism," step back from the war, step back from all the excuses and just look at what we've become. great write.

    wills

  • MagicLady silver member
    April 19, 2005
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    I read this poem, as I listen to the bells at the Vatican ring in joy because a new Pope has been chosen. The irony of it all. I am not Catholic, but I am moved by the whole process of it.

    Your writings always move me, but for some reason the tears are flowing freely right now....with the bells ringing in the background, still......

    Death in the poem....hope in the background.

    Cheryl
  • searching4josh
    April 19, 2005
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    I don't really want to be like everyone else on this site and point out what I "liked" or what I "related to." I'll simply state this, and then be off.

    Truth can take many forms. Be it the facts found in your local encyclopedia, the stories of your late Uncle Bob, or the sight of a dead child, buried on the side of the road in the unfitting grave of sunlight, dust, and lack of notice. I believe that your piece has touched upon the most real of those -- the sight of life's great tragedies.

    I personally believe that these are the things that make us human, and are the things that are most important to learning from our mistakes. Simply learning about the Holocaust is nothing compared to having been there. Don't ever stop posting like this -- pass on your memories so that perhaps one life can one day be saved...

    Good Job.
  • Son Of Sun
    April 19, 2005
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    I should thank you for posting such a honest and true poem of sadness, of can I say foolish kids who governs countires to make stupid/worthless wars ends with the death of innocents, I liked the imagery of the innoncess as it's a young girl who's been killed by bombs, and also that line was the voice of truth:
    "All those weapons will be turned on us"
    but I will say as I always do, God's worst mistake is creating us the Humans.
    Edited on Apr 19, 10:13 because ''.