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ponderings

I think i shall let go of these questions
They lead me to no resolve
they just keep me running in circles
my reasoning beginning to dissolve
It hurts to hold on, but it hurts to let go
so i don't know which to choose
I have nothing to gain
and everything to lose
maybe someday i can look back
And realize it's all OK
But for right now i just wish
All this pain would go away
Clasping is much softer
Still falling always hurt
On wonders why you stay by the flame
When you know touching gets you burnt
Playing the game of fools
You lose yourself somewhere along the way
I'm tired of getting lost
and i really don't' want to play
Finding hope in foolishness
A joy never found
I'm sorry God for trying to find
Love in something so unsound
Please make me whole
Let me laugh again
I know if i want to see the sunshine
i must endure the rain

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Written April 18th, 2005

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  • Angelicwhisper
    April 20, 2005
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    aw thanks *smile*


  • Angelicwhisper
    April 20, 2005
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    yes, i just need to keep holding on to faith, cause that's the only stable thing in life :-)

  • Mia Donna
    April 18, 2005
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    Something about this didn't make it flow like a regimented, structured piece of rhyming poetry. It flowed like a freeverse, but it rhymed, and it rhymed nicely! That's like magic! This was very heartfelt, and great last two lines. Wow, nice job.


  • April 18, 2005
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    Oh hon, I feel the pain, tears inside little one... what a beautiful write from your heart... the pain does ease, it's easy for me to say... but over time it does and we learn to grow stronger I promise... it was beautiful, Love, Annie