I can feel it welling up inside of me
I am crafting something nuclear
My particles are becoming
More than what I am
I am pulling god out
Of everything
but the truth
And I am
barely trying
One day, when
I put my mind to it
I will form light from sound
Dismissing names and titles
I will become everything with a
brilliant bang, of utter focus and will
having gone from angel and dinosaur -
- To semen & egg by light from darkness
I can converge my self into another
Without looking back at what
I have done.
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Written April 18th, 2005
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Different.. Not really sure that's to my tastes, but it's very well written. I like the shape you wrote it in as well. Athena
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Great write. This captures the readers mind and makes them think a bit. I liked the layout you used for the words, very neat and easy to read. Good luck in the contest.
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well written
Wow Very intruiging piece and I agree with Stinger you have definately gone where no one else has before .Thanks for entering and good luck
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i love the format it adds a lot to the feeling this. very creative. let me not repeat what every one before has said lol good stuff.
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Creativity is a rush.. all those little flashes going off at the same time...
love your use of words in this, and the way it's formatted. The first look made think of a vase, a vessel to hold the words ..the second look brought to mind a keyhole.. a place to look through...or that place we peek in when we'd really like to know what's behind ..door number one...
creative to say the least.. and a damn potent potable.. which still doesn't say enough
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Awesome
Ever see Powder? Not, like, powder in general, but the movie; Powder. In the end, Powder gets struck by lightning and explodes into white light, achieving a higher form of existance. This kind of reminded me of that.
Brilliant line alert!
"I am pulling god out
Of everything
but the truth"
What a great bit of poetic nonsense. -
Surprising amount of eternity crammed into such a bottle. You have taken a different turn here poet. It seems you have turned your face from the shadows for a moment and stand facing the Sun.
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Though I'm not top notch in the knowledge of metaphysics, this piece made me think I am
A dynamic write, Jeremi. Unique and oh so interesting.
Dee
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Nice piece of work...i know i can't ever write something like that...wish i could write more but im pressed for time...nice write...and keep writing!
Pure -
Well it probably comes as no surprise from my own brief foyers into metaphorical physics that when I saw the title I was going to want to read this -- and as per usual, you did not disappoint Horus. The meta-physics of this work nicely; a self-contemplated transformation of being in an atomic implosion, indeed. Another great piece from you -- you never disappoint.
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absolutely bloody amazing.. Bravissimo!! you captured my being and told the story of life within us all.. such a joy to read my dear friend
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Quantum Physics for $200 please, Alec.
question is: What is "becoming superluminal"?
Amazing piece, Horus.
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