I have lived my entire life
In between somewhere,
And something hidden
A special place where
Gods sleep against broken -
- Temples, and bent light
And like a child staring
Off into a vision of creation
I have found the exact spot
Where love and death
Crush the soul out of a man;
As Einstein's theory grinds
Me into energy from memory.
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Written April 18th, 2005
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Hi.
I'm looking for a poem. This wasn't it but
this is still good.
I know this place.
Lisa
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BEAUTIFUL PHOTO
YOUR PHOTO IS LOVELY.
YOUR POEM IS VERY ABSRTUCT AND YET YOU STILL HAVE A ABILITY TO LET PEOPLE SEE THE EXACT POINT OF THIS PIECE.WELL DONE
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I like the picture, very cute.. The poem was kinda thrown off by that, to me, but still, it's a good write. I like when a piece makes me sit back and think. Athena
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Wow! This had such meaning in such few words. I loved the way you described everything with such interesting and beautiful words. Good job! Thank you for entering my contest.
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I really like the wording of this poem. I like the picture as well, cute baby is it yours. I get the torment of the poem but I read something else into it maybe it was unintentional or maybe just the picture. I am sure the pic was to illustrate the line 'like a child staring in the face of a creation.' I read into that being a father could lead you to know:
I have found the exact spot
Where love and death
Crush the soul out of a man
Like I said it could just be the picture but thats what I picked up on in the poem. Great write. I liked everything about it. I would applaud it but I have not more.
God Bless
Tammy
Edited on May 02, 8:35 p.m. because 'fucked up a word'. -
Awe inspiring
They have complimented your phrasing but have they turned your head, I doubt it, writhing and fighting against his own nature, for a soul is wrested deep in one who speaks so, but you shall survive. -
I'm not a man or a professional writer Yet! But I know where you talk about, You dear Friend, were blessed with the exact words to express that place while I'm not blessed that way. I do admire your talent.
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I really hope so because when those black clouds come they hurt like hell. On the other hand, we can both stand under the eve and drink and curse and dream together. But I swear, you have to be such a good writer to pen something like this poem. There would be many a person on this site who wouldn't have a clue to know how it feels to be there.
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You're going to be okay David, we'll drag one another there together.
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must say i enjoyed this write wonderful wording and flow interesting conscepts that fill the mind yeah wonderfuly pened thanks for sharing
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Fuck me! Were you and I just talking about this? That is a very spooky moment for in a lightening strike- this is exactly how I feel. Exactly. Now I don’t bookmark too many pieces but I think I might just be framing this fucker! Just to remind me at one point in time, somewhere in the world, someone actually understood and articulated it precisely. Thank you, this is exactly where I am at.
David
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Wow, this is nice poem..I like this personal writes ..you just a thinker i guess..great job!
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Great write . I really like your stuff .
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marvelous!
i like it because it makes me think. and then i laugh about einstein's theory.
hm. "in between somewhere / and something hidden." how mysterious! -
I have the tire marks to prove it.
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I have found the exact spot
Where love and death
Crush the soul out of a man;
Phenomenal poem. This line alone is absolutely amazing. I keep rereading just to catch the nuances.
wow.
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NIcely done
I enjoyed this poem [you talent has no boundaries] keep up the good work. -
yea. I might need help judging them because there are a few i really like so far.
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Brilliant. Just brilliant. You kept me interested and i read the entire thing....usually if i don't like a poem i quite reading it...but this was Great! keep writing.
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