skeletal protest,
self-holocaust,
dying
to make them see,
crying out
against being silenced,
till your outside
matches your inside,
dead, broken,
starved of life
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work in progress, i think i have more to add, and i'm unsure about the title, suggestions please?
in response to many things, seeing this sort of thing all the time, feeling the same way, and also in response to ''Hunger'' by Maggie Helwig
Written April 17th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Dying To be Beautiful by Faerie.Princess.
450 points, ended January 18, 2007, 40 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I remember feeling these thoughts and living life day by day thinking nothing would ever get better. You are a dark poet like me (Congrats on the trophy) but being a dark poet doesn't mean being a dark person
... hang in there, things will get better 
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i like the phrase self-holocaust
very intriguing
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Holocaust- mass devastation, destruction or death, esp. by fire; a burnt offering.
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Your work...
It has edge.
That's it.
This is edgey
In a
Beautiful
Way.
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Thanks. Edgy is good.
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self-holocaust. Original, never heard or even read untill now, it put quite that way, but the fact remains that under the term holocaust you are 100% right!!! That's exactly what is going on here. Not even a one on one, but, to oneself only.
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gets a gold on my list =]
this held so much meaning, using such descriptive words......
wonderful imagery =]
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wow...this poem is amazing. its short yet has a lot to say. this is a powerful poem and has hit me so deep that im speechless...wow. great poem. good luck in the contest and keep writing
Thankyou for Enetring -
FAN-FUCKING-TASTIC!
Hey, I liked this poem. My favorite line was 'Skeletal Protest'!
Awesome!I think this piece deserves more than two applauses, so, you can have on of mine! Thanx for the comment and for this great write!
xXKiSseSXx
Love *~*~*~*RAELYNN*~*~*~*
Edited on Apr 19, 7:50 p.m. because 'I FUCKED UP.......GEE!'. -
thought-provoking
Wow. The raw anger and frustration coming through this piece are almost tangible! You've done a smashing job conveying your emotions with this piece; I agree with Myno. It does feel complete. As for title, I think "Gaunt" works well. It really accents the message of the piece. -
This poem is dark, and definately makes you think. I really liked it
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woah... this is powerful... It actually feels complete to me, but i'm not sure of a title.
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