Awoken
The spirit of life leaches into me
Flooding every fragment of my soul
Every breath
Strengthening my desire to live
And filling my heart with love
Light
Pours into my eyes from every angle
Blinding without regret
Eternal bond
Content with the knowledge I am loved
By those who conspired to bring me here
Smiles
Everywhere I look
As I greet this solemn world
Little angel
Perhaps for a short while
Guide me well and blessed I will be
Arrived
At last into welcoming arms
Yet before I rest
Thank you
To mum, dad and god above
For to them I am born
And forever adorned with love.
Author notes
I wrote this after reading other poetic works and was inspired to describe arrival through the eyes of a baby.
Written April 17th, 2005
Scott Venus (AP user-name: Errant Panther)
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congrats
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This was so beautifully written and I love how you were inspired by other works of arrival of birth through a baby's eyes. What an original idea! I like how you emphasized the words Awoken, Light, Smiles, & Arrived. The style in which you chose to write was so lovely & I really enjoyed reading this. A treasure! Thank you for entering & best of luck
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well written ...good luck....I am proud to be the natural mother of this talented poet
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Wonderful
I've yet to read a poem though the babies eyes and I love how you precieved it. Great write and thank you soo much for entering my contest. I love the background, by the way. -
this is an excellent write. wonderful take on the subject. thanks for the entry!
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Very cute, excellently written, this flows very nicely from start to finish. This is wonderfully done indeed. Best of luck...Scott
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Ahhh yes, this is a beautiful write seen through the eyes of a precious newborn babe...Full of love and emotion...
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loving
Excellent and tender. Your folks were blessed to have you as their child, just as I am blessed to have you as my AP son.
You are special. Technicals in this are perfect... tone is what one would expect from a baby - you have presented a great write here!
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beautiful.
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Thank you for your entry. i found your flow interesting. i must admit, it threw me the first 2 reads. very well done.
Walk with a light heart and heavy resolve-
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A most befitting tribute to your parents and God above -all working together in producing a poet of great words deep feelings and the ability to emote- a wonderful combination
through the eyes of a baby -very interesting concept indeed.
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Thank you for your kind words QueenT. I hope you enjoy reading my other work also.
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this was really beautiful! You have a good way with words! It was awesome. If only my life were that good. Thanks for commenting on my poem. Keep up the good work. Take care. ~QueenT~
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good!!
This is beautiful. Great job describing this... very interesting! ~Katie -
interesting. different. through the eyes of a babe, or baby? lol. good job with writing this. enjoyed the read.
Blu
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