A whole new world
this is before me,
as I stand
firmly planted on the ground.
I remember those days
when I would float on air
float on possibilities,
float on feelings
that although unreturned
were enough to lift me
to a place I'd never been...
I floated on naivety
and Disney princess dreams.
But when I was way up there
nothing was crystal clear
and the higher I soared
the more distance I had to fall
and the more it would hurt
if I came crashing down
toward the world.
So now I stand firmly
with my feet planted
on the steady ground
and walk alongside you
eye to eye
with no strings
making me think I can fly.
My mirror is broken
but my eyes are freshly opened
to the future,
and I want to know
a whole new world
with you.
Author notes
This has so many layers of feelings, and memories, and everything that I don't feel like explaining everything. Analyze it as you wish. I started out with an idea in mind, and had NO clue it would turn out at all like this...I had no intention of any Disney references actually...lol
kayla*
Written April 17th, 2005
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You know this is one of my favorites by you. I think you should use it.
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This may be my favorite of all your poems.
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A good poem, very expressive and thoughtful. You did so well with this one, Kayla
There's all the pleasure and pain, the hopes and realities all wrapped up.
I do have just a little suggestion, though...in the stanza about crashing down...... the term crashing down toward the world, seems to imply that you'd be crashing as you fall, when in actuality you'd be falling 'til you crash to earth.
Just a thought that came to mind as I read...maybe I'm not interpreting it quite the way you mean it.
Anyhow, I do like this one, you did a wonderful job
Dee
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very good
this is very very sweet! A pleasure to read, and wonderfully written!! I look forward to reaidng more of your work as this is very good! -
Wonderful work.
Wonderful satire against Jasmine... I like the verse:
"and the higher I soared
the more distance I had to fall
and the more it would hurt
if I came crashing down
toward the world."
gives a realisation of what is real; dreams arent real until one wakes up...
My favourite, though, was:
"and I want to know
a whole new world
with you."
Sweet lines- I wish someone meant those for me
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I love the disney song, and I love your poem equally. It was beautifully written and it was beauty all in its self. I like it alot and think that you did an astounding job. Keep writing forever and ever; for eons!--Ann
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And might I ask, is there a particular reason why everything is right aligned?
Cause it looks neat. -
Mmm, well lets see...
This made me think of you and your feelings for 'Bob'...how you soared on the clouds of hope, longing for him to feel the same way. And let me say that the stanza -
"and the higher I soared
the more distance I had to fall
and the more it would hurt
if I came crashing down
toward the world"
- was spectacular.
So it seems as if you came to the realization or maybe just the conclusion that things would be better off untouched, and now that your head is clear and there's nothing in your way, everything makes sense. And you can go along with life in peace... And that in this time of understanding that 'Bob' will come to you...
That's what this was like to me. So there you go. Awesome, awesome poem Kayla. I think I shall bookmark this (like, my 10th from you lol). Even if my interpretation is nowhere near what you were aiming at, it makes a lot of sense to me and you are very right, how there are so many layers of feelings and thought packed into this one poem...yep, it would take forever to get out with all the possibilities. So anyways, I'm not gonna take forever lol, I'll just say wonderful.
Christine
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This is terrific. No more explanations needed!!!!!!!
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Lots of hope is in this poem, and yet it does not come across as needlessly sentimental. There is a lot of meat in this piece, and it makes me want to sink my teeth right in. Lots of verse, lots of emotion, lots of outright description. In short, I thought this poem was simply good. I hope to write a few optimiistic poem in the future, as I see that writing about happiness is much harder than writing depressive poems. Anyway, I'd like to congratulate you on your awesome work, and I hope to read more from you in the future.
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This poem is delicious, Kayla, I could eat it right up!
The line about the Disney Princess dreams is fabulous, and I am actually a little bit jealous of it. I may ask to borrow it some time.
The whole new world, is the Disney theme, and then the floating part makes me think of Aladdin when they were floating on the magic carpet, the line about the strings makes me think of puppets, and your strings are no longer there, showing that you have grown, you are in control now.
The line about the broken mirror makes me think about Snow White and the magic mirror... but since the mirror is broken, you are no longer relying on magic... it has so many levels. the images are spectacular, this is probably one of my very favorites by you.
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You gave wonderful imagery.
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