One too many heartbreaks
I myself have gone through
and sometimes I too wonder
if I’d find someone like you.
I must look around on AP
every night before my sleep
Your poem “Love Me First”
made me feel complete.
Someone understood me
and made me understand
and although we’re far apart
i wish I could hold your hand.
I probably couldn’t be your wife
I’m far too young and so naïve
but something is advising me
to just shut up and believe.
When I read all your heartfelt words
and the emotion that you had
I knew at that one moment that
you will never make me sad.
You seem like an awesome guy
one who would always put a lady first
if anyone needs that it’s definitely me.
I’ve gone through a great deal of pain and hurt.
If you can kiss away my tears
then you’re the guy for me.
To be honest you seem way too good to be true
you just seem way too sweet.
If you’re the way you say
in that beautiful poem of yours.
I’d love you till forever,
But I know you’d love me first.
Author notes
The ending sounds sort of cocky but I want to clarify that in no way do I mean it to sound that way. You just seem like you'd put yourself out for someone and love anyone for who they are (not judge anyone). You seem very giving and honest and you'd probably give anyone a chance. So... with that said I hope I can be your wife and if I can't then I hope we can be friends. 
Written April 16th, 2005
A contest entry
- Looking for an AP Wife by C.W. Bush.
400 points, ended April 17, 2005, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I found this to be very sweet and innocent..sort of made me think of "mail-order brides" from way back when , although it still happens in the present day. It was filled with honesty, and touches the heart. wonderfully done! Congratulations on your GOLD!
Blessings, Sandi -
Steph.. First.. hearty congratz to u.. for ur new hub !
Next, U truly desrve the gold in this poem and the real treasure.. ur AP husband..
You have written this poem soooo welll.. and dear.,,, not only Raven.. anyone who reads this
poem of yours, would definitely LOVE YOU FIRST Good day to you..
And wish u both a long and happy (AP) married life
Truly speaking.. i enjoyed reading each and every line of this poem... I likedt he style u used to write..
lemme get to read more of urs soon
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tres gentile
goodness dear girl this is so lovely! congrats on winning first and on capturing the heart of a true gentleman. enjoy the experience dear. this is a splendid write, keep it up. and may peace be with you in both mind and heart
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I have to agree with Chris's choice on this. You seem just like the woman for him. I think that you did a wonderful job and you deserve this gold more than anyone. Big hugs and best of luck in the "marriage." You'd best be inviting me, hun! LOL!
Hugs
Jess -
i really like this poem i was going to enter but i knew i wouldn't be able to write anything good enough in the time left to enter. your word choice is a bit bland but the message you get across very well. the imagery was amazing you would make any guy not able to refuse such an offer. well done
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Hmmm, the poem is very sweet and kinda vulnerable... I dunno, sometimes I just think it is too much so. Especially on a kinda pink background, this poem just makes me think the word "Nice".
Which feels a bit bland.
That said it's very caring, honest and pretty so well doen you.
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Wow, this is an amazing poem. I saw this competition earlier, and decided to not enter myself, I'm not good at that kind of thing. But wow, you really are. You sound like you would make the perfect wife for him indeed, well done for this poem, it sounds convincing enough to me!
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AWWWW this is sweet, I love it
Congratulations on your GOLD, a very deserving win
Jenny
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"Not to offend"? What the hell would you expect a comment like that to do? Fill her with warm and fuzzy feelings. Jesus.
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I really enjoyed this write. It was so sweet and honest and down-to-earth. Any guy should be honored to have someone write this for him. Thanks for sharing this. Great write.
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This poem seems forced to me. The rhyming is so bland and trite and your word choice is so limited. You sound like an eleven year old in love...not to offend.
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very good.
I liked this. at times, yes, the rhyme was a bit forced, but it was very good and had great underlying emotions. for example, you came across as modest but at the same time you were courageous and bold. good message. nice write. -
Great job, glad to see you won!
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Ok, ok...you guys are making it so hard for me to help pick out my son a bride...this too was just beautifully written. Thanks so much for entering and good luck
~Carrie -
Oh... wow. This was beautiful. Amazing. If you were serious and said it in person, I think I'd have a hard time saying no. So sweet, so vulnerable, and wonderfully phrased as well.
I can't really select one thing in this poem that made me think 'wow', but I read the whole thing with a smile on my face. That's a big effort, considering I just saw my football team lose (again). Hehe
BTW, I love your author pic. You're quite cute.
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