It used to be that this could never be
The writings were upon the wall, not the canvas
The need to leave that world behind came slow
Slow, and hard, and suffocating-like
It used to be that I could never see
What was right there in front of my eyes
I refused to believe, I did not listen
To my inner angels fighting the demon in sight
I used to think it was not fair
That no one else would ever care
But I was wrong
The time came for me to be strong
No more doubts
Because the truth came out
I have come to see that I will forever be
The wonderful future is here, I won't be alone
This is beautiful, the feeling inside
To know that everything will be just fine
I have come to see that they will never see
The scars they left underneath my skin
But it doesn't matter, in the end, because
I have overcome, for the final time
It will be forever beautiful
The future wonderful
Author notes
Written on 16th April 2005 at 17:35 GMT
Let me explain this a bit. Our Lady Peace was introduced to me by someone a few years ago. This someone tore my life apart, to put it bluntly. This poem is about how it was back then, and how it is now.
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- red lady postal eyes loves photography... by more like war.
400 points, ended July 31, 2005, 12 entries
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the background was kinda distracting for me to read, but that was probably only me lol. It goes with the poem so I'll forgive you. I have already said so much to the others I don't wanna sound like a repeat but I honestly loved this to is fullest. It makes me wanna scream out a tune, unlike a lot of them. So congrats. thanks so much for entering my contest and good luck!
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There were somethings about this that I did like, and others that I didn't think were quite as wonderful. I don't like the line "The wonderful future is here", I don't know why it feels so out of place to me-but it just does...and it's not even that it's cliche', just I think you could've gotten that same meaning across, with different words. I liked the way this began...it showed a strong sense of creativity-and was really inviting with a great flow! Good job on this poem...this contest probably won't get judged until this coming weekend-I'm very sorry about the delay, at first we didn't have enough entries, and Abby is away for this week-but I promise we will judge this as soon as she gets back! Great job again, and the best of luck to you!
Amanda -
awsome poem...and i love your background as well, i especially like the begining part,
It used to be that this could never be
The writings were upon the wall, not the canvas
The need to leave that world behind came slow
Slow, and hard, and suffocating-like
the imagery here is awsome, and your word chioce rocks too...all in all great poem. -
hmm....nice poem...
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I like this. OOOO Ireland. Really great title links to the style of this poem. Titling is always something I have difficulty with hehe.
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this is a great poem. thats the best song, which im gonna play rite now. anyways, thanks for entering.
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