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I dug my heart out with a spoon

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I dug my heart out with a spoon
so I'd know
How the bluntness would remind me
of the pain
it blends inside this soupy mix

And then spurts out
with a forked tongue
spiralling around

I'd knife myself in the ribs
scraping along bone
Fingered pain on my blackboard brain
such a searing fuck

I would always remember
why
Why, it was me, that you picked
to grovel for you
You, that speck in the sky

My silent shadow

My painful reminder

The instinctive behaviour in me
would be to run
far away
I don't want to see, what I know
is going to happen one of these
ever -nearing days

But my lungs fill with gasoline
You know, the choking kind
and all I need
is just one

One lighted match
&
in a puff of smoke

I would go
go somewhere

My ashes would assemble
on that spoon
And I'd repeat my life
digging away with that old spoon
to feel the blunt edge of it
all

Author notes

Just some ramblings.. some people will know why.. referrences to lungs and not being able to breathe and such..
For those that don't.. just read and imagine how it can feel on all sides..    
MEH!!
~GILL~
Written April 16th, 2005

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  • Martooni
    April 18, 2005
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    as they say, the journey is the destination.

    nicely done, oh hot chilly one


  • RollingStone silver member
    April 16, 2005
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    very touching poem, Gill. I'm moved by it. your imagery vividly paints the pain that life can so unexpectedly mark us with. your words make me feel it. excellent expression of your emotions in this.

    and, yeah, no matter how much sorrow life might bring, I think many of us would repeat those valleys in life just to feel what it was like when we were on the mountain tops inbetween.



    ~travis


  • April 16, 2005
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    Absolutely blinding


  • MoonDragonVamp
    April 16, 2005
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    wow. that's so dark and deep. sounds so sad. great write.

    Sue