you point
condemning fingers
while hiding
your own sins
behind stained glass
your church
has become
nothing more
than a ministry
for self-righteousness
you've twisted
scripture
that delivers
into doctrine
that imprisons
you proclaim
the god
of love
while worshipping
hate
worst of all,
you crucify
the very souls
you are
supposed to save
Author notes
in response to this short of shit: www.godhatesfags.com/
this is not directed at all christians, just those that are over-zealous fundie biggots.
Gay Pride
Written April 14th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
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555 points, ended November 1, 2005, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
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What did you think
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I agree with everything you say here. Unfortunately, far too many people get away with anything they want to in the name of religion. In terms of style, your short, clipped phrases got the point across without being flowery or melodramatic. The poem was very effective and it stirred my emotions. Good job.
Love, Black-Moon -
This poem makes my stomach hurt.
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i really like this. omg, though, a guest minister for our church talked about that site, that site is bullshit. and some guy was brutally murdered and hanged or whatever...i was like um why? and it's like because he was gay. wow great reason no that shit makes me f-in mad. the minister was gay too so he was all like yea...i'm so mad i can't write right. anyways, i gotta go explode somewhere, but great write, and we unitarians are always here for you. be who you be, not who others wish to see
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i like that this peom is short and to the point. great write and thanks for entering-allie
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Fanatics are everywhere, just read some of the poety upon this site. Some worship gods, some worship pain, all are bound by a religion and faith.
Good stuff. -
awesome. i totally agree. and really well-written. i luv luv luv it!
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wow
not only do I agree with it and have unfortunately experienced it, but this as a poem is simple yet effective and written well.
I loved it.
with best wishes,
~Lea -
Yes, it certainly is confusing when the doctrine preaches love and forgiveness and the people act with hatred and condemnation. It boggles the mind. If people practiced the unconditional love which christianity teaches then maybe this world would be more peaceful. Good write.
peace-
Toltec Warrior -
That was pretty straight forward, I like the concept, though I wish there was more background to it. Some cork to plug the bottle if you know what I mean.
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Yes, this is nicely worded and carries a strong emotion that more and more people are beginning to share. Well done and good luck!
peace
doug
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Ah, I see, on bracelets I can understand but why would they want to wear it on their crap? Sickos.
Lol, you read my version of the Bible? Unfinished as yet, I think you would appreciate it, has upset a few people, mainly ones who hve something against JC being portrayed as a homosexual cripple molesting fraud. Some people I just dont get!
Thanks for explaining, I might get a tatoo of it on my cock, then I could say "yep, that's right, He'd blow me, that's what he'd do!". That might work. -
What Would Jesus Do? it's something christians like to wear on bracelets and crap.
~Kate -
I may be being dumb but I dont get the title, whats it stand for? Somebody commented on my bible or contradiction poem with something like: "if Heaven is such a wonderful paradise, whats the problem with being crucified?"
They have a point.
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That was a cool poem, very clear on your opinion...
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I caught the secondary meanings- although people who don't want to get the message won't. Those who really need a smack in the face may not feel it. I do not like organized religion for these very reasons- people corrupt it, interpret things as they wish, change things for personal purposes, and contradict themselves to try and confuse people into blindly following a leader (any leader). It's not really faith or belief that's wrong but WHAT PEOPLE DO WITH IT. As you so concisely say in this poem. Excellent job. Good luck in the contest!
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Very nice poem, thank you for your entry. This is the first poem in the contest that followed the rules. Your point is clear and well presented. Great job
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all i can say to this is amen...i liked the iea behind this and how your described it..you were straight to the point and short about it..your made your point in the least amount of words as possible witout taking away from the meaning..well done
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oooh....i like. im not athiest or anything, but i know how organized religion and denominations can be - just the was you said in your poem - which i thoroughly enjoyed! i especially liked the last line! very well done and best of luck!
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I am really sorry you have encountered people like this. That is not Christianity that is something completely twisted and wrong. The church, unfortuntately really can be a breeding ground for hypocrisy and that makes me unbelievably sad.
The poem is blunt. Very blunt. And I like that. Hypocrites need a good boot in the arse now and then. I'm glad that you realize that these people do not represent all Christians though. *shudder* Ugh, can you imagine?? Thanks for not sugarcoating you accusations, but also for not just being immature and calling names. I can't read poems that just yell, "yeah, well you guys suck" without making a point. Good job! -
i attend houghton weslyan, so i totally understand, sometimes i don't mind it, and sometimes i swear if one more person witnesses to me i'm gonna puke.
~Kate -
actually most of the words were chosen because they have a second level of meaning, and becuase of their religious conotations, thnx for the feedback, (although i would have preferred feedback on the problems i mentioned in the author's comments).
~Kate -
I completely disagree with MorbidRain. This is poetry, not "make a statement blurbs" and you should employ the poetry to help you make your statement better. Now you have the idea you want to work with. This is a very good start. But what you need to do now is go back and develop each line. There are CENTURIES of material on religious conflict. A five stanza poem this short can't hope to capture something that hasn't already been captured. One of the greatest things about poetry is that it allows you to show your thoughts in an interesting, intelligent and (most importantly) original way. Try to use words that bring out more than just the surface of the church, some that lead to a second level of meaning, etc.
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Thank you so much for directing me to this poem! I also go to a Christian University (it's Church of Christ dominated) and I see this everyday. There is so much that people don't understand and don't know. I have written others on this same topic also. I'm glad to know that I'm not the only person who see the fallicies of it all.
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I've met God across his long walnut desk with his diplomas hanging on the wall behind him, and God asks me, "Why?" Why did I cause so much pain? Didn't I realize that each of us is a sacred, unique snowflake of special unique specialness? Can't I see how we're all manifestations of love? I look at God behind his desk, taking notes on a pad, but God's got this all wrong. We are not special. We are not crap or trash, either. We just are. We just are, and what happens just happens. And God says, "No, that's not right." Yeah. Well. Whatever. You can't teach God anything...and I don't need a reason to be angry at him.
I appreciate your sentiments here.
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blessed be ~ crisstiena
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You seem to have the right end of the stick which is great to see. You have gone straight to point and there is no need for poetic finery which such a strong opinion. Well done x
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