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The Spinning Top Appears Too Beautiful To Touch (but that's because it IS)

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I'd accept your love letters
If only my heart wasn't already bleeding to death
From various gaping paper cuts
That pulsate every time I breathe in
And dilate
Every time I breathe out.
My blood isn't even red anymore.
It has started dripping out in inky black swarms
Of guilt-infested pus.
And the only people who care
Are the ones who have to bleach the stains
Out of their living room carpets
Because they're having dinner parties
With important people
That deserve to be treated to spotless visions of white
Because that's the type of world we all have to live in
In order to make partner.
I won't apologize for bleeding too profusely
But I will hold one hand over my wounds
And the other over my eyes
To mask the tears
That come out in embarrassingly dark hues of midnight blue.
But I haven't got anyplace
To unleash into
So I just keep staggering along
Overflowing the bits of me that accumulate over my limit
And try to swallow gulp after gulp
Of the reality of my situation
That even though anger tastes a lot like green saliva...
It's still just as poisonous
As the intravenous incorporation
Of other people.

 

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Written April 14th, 2005

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  • PsydewaysTears gold member
    May 21, 2006
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    Thanks, you're right about the theme choosing the poet, not the other way around. I'm almost always a slave to how the words in my head are preemtively feeling rather than how I'd prefer for them to feel. When I try to force simpler, brighter, happier endings onto unhappy stories... it never turns out as impressively in the long run.


  • icebloo
    May 21, 2006
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    deep and meaningful

    that is so sad...everyone says my poems are like suicidal cuz they are kind of like yours...like mine : start anew, but yours are like mine in a way...i dont mean to write sad ones, thats just how I feel inside and in my heart, and my heart can't lie, and neither can yours.


  • anyonita jenea
    June 18, 2005
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    amazing

    raw emotion always births the most maginificent poetry...i love how you put the reader at fault...one can't help but wanting to apologize then the realization hits that you're not really talking about them...or maybe you are.... anyhow, this was brilliance captured in stanzas...sheer poetry, raw and applause worthy...one of the best i've read in a long time. the words form pictures that quickly get embossed in the brain and there's no forgetting....the line that i keep coming back to: "I will hold one hand over my wounds and the other over my eyes to mask the tears" got shivers! wonderful write.
    anyonita


  • Kalima
    April 20, 2005
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    WOW! What can I say, Very amazing and yes a bit weird. It had some really gross images but I liked it. Great write... Stacey~

  • marrow
    April 15, 2005
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    Really impressive piece. This has been my favorite of yours. It was home to such amazing descriptions and lines. You really should be proud of this... it is absolutely perfect.

    Justin


  • chat noir
    April 15, 2005
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    ....wow.


  • Claide
    April 15, 2005
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  • April 15, 2005
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    Wow. Your poems always blow me away. They are so beautifully written. I love it. You always make your poems full of emotion and deep as well. Great job.

  • honeybe
    April 15, 2005
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    oh my god that was great! so much feeling...wow. can see it so well. wow.lol sorry just at a loss for words right now. keep writes like this one coming. its nice to know that one is not the only one to have these kind of feelings. later Honeybe


  • Blind-Ambition
    April 15, 2005
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    This is incredibly visceral. I think you specifically chose every word, and nothing is wasted here. This is so incredibly full of all sorts of emotions. Wow.


  • April 15, 2005
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    amazing

    Wow! - i dont know what to say. this was beautiful and full of emotion.

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