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10 years later....

THE WIZARD'S GOT YOU ALL TIED DOWN.
CHASING THE DRAGON ALL AROUND TOWN.
RUMMAGING THROUGH SHIT, I MEAN, OTHER PEOPLES LIVES.
YOU'VE SEEN SO MUCH NOW YOU THINK YOU'LL NEVER DIE, BUT...
....I'VE SEEN YOU...DUCKING BACK ALLEYS
GLADLY FINDING FRIENDS AND STRANGLING ANY HOPES
--OF THEM BATTLING--
REAL DEMONS 'AINT LEAVING THEIR HOSTS
CAUSE THEIR MOSTLY IN THEIR HEADS
NOW THE LEAD THAT YOU'RE PUMPING
THROUGH THEIR SYSTEM
TOTALLY PREVENTS THEM
--FROM LISTENIN'--
COMMON SENCE, THAT'S WHAT'S MISSIN'
I CAN'T AGREE WITH THIS TYPE OF



                                 RESISTANCE.

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Written April 14th, 2005

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  • Ale E
    February 24, 2008
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    Very enjoyable and certainly has a point. I liked it. There was a bit of random spelling and punctuation but i'm guessing thats your writing syle or you did that on purpose..so it doesnt' really matter.

    Thank you for entering my contest. I wish you the best of luck.

    ale xox

  • GoldenHope
    April 14, 2005
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    once again fun and powerful. but i didn't really understand what you were saying here. by the way "sence" is sense, and "cause their mostly in their heads" is "cause they're mostly in their heads"
    good job, jess
    Edited on Apr 14, 7:44 p.m. because 'oops the equal sign puts a strike through it'.

  • The Boy of Oz
    April 14, 2005
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    This was fun. It was really short and I didn't enjoy the caps, they really annoyed me. But that's me just being weird. But this was enjoyable. So good job.

  • leggomyeggo
    April 14, 2005
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    I liked it, 'cept the caps and random shibboleths, like aint. Who knows, maybe that was your goal. I dunnnno. Goo write though. I mean good, of course.
    LEgggggooo


  • wayward cry
    April 14, 2005
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    This is really good...it was short, to the point...well done, it was enjoyable to read...keep it up!

    WOO HOO!

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