An angel stood at my feet, as I lay in my bed.
I asked, if it was time to go, the angel smiled and said.
The masters built a home for you, a place for you to stay,
Where pain has been banished, and sorrow locked away.
Where age has been suspended, and weariness has gone for good,
Were people rest in peace, and live in brotherhood.
But what of this sadness, for the ones I must leave,
And the time spent as they in turn shall grieve.
My bride that I leave behind, the children that I lived for,
I find this all unkind, these feeling I can’t ignore.
And once again the angel wings fully unfurled
Glowing in eternal light, calmly reassured.
Time on earth is short, separation is not for long,
So for those that stay behind, they must carry on.
You will soon be reunited, all together once again,
But in the time decided, for no one knows just when.
And so in peace I leave you, I know its not for long
remember me fondly and think of me when I'm gone
for I shall await you looking forward to the day
when we once more are reunited at the gates to heavens stay.
Author notes
Written April 14th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Dry Her Tears (For 400 points- make it good) by Distorted Clarity.
400 points, ended October 19, 2006, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This is absolutely beautiful, the voice in the narration is so comforting and sincere...will return to play again...
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Well Done
Paul!
More than worthy 
of that Bronze 
. I've a vastly different understanding of angels & your topic here as I understand it written in His Bible, but that being said I can appreciate your sentiment here. Wonderful content, flow, rhyme & timing! Believe it or not when I was a child, sick, & greatly distressed, feeling like I just wanted to leave the world 'cause I knew it was crazy 
& that my parents didn't have a clue 
I had a vision of about 6 angels in semi-circle at the foot of my bed. 
They didn't have wings, but were in robes & were genderless. I understood by their presence & what was communicated without speech [I'd an inner understanding given me] that it wasn't time for me & that all would be all right! 
An inner calm & peace flooded over me.
The beginning of this piece reminded me of that! I'd not thought of this for a long time. 
for bringing this back to my remembrance. I needed to have that memory today! 
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Delightful Poem!
Very Nicely Done!
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Excellent
This is my favorite of the very few of yours I have read.
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a very comforting and uplifting poem that soothes the suffering spirit of one who experiences grief over loss of a loved one ...
compassionate and reassuring words ...
maa
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Very comforting words you have to share here with someone who has lost a loved one. Congratulations on winning bronze in this contest.
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THIS is exactly what I hoped for when I started this contest. Thank yuo sooooo much for sharing it. It's absolutely beautiful and overflowing with inspiration. This exactly what my friend needs. This will help more than you know. Keep up the amazing work and thanks for entering the contest.
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I see you have a wonderful collection of spiritual poems? This is very beautiful. A very peaceful read, if you know what I mean, yeah? A great read for a disturbed mind.
Lencio -
Death is a hard thing, though I haven't figured it out yet, does it hurt more for someone else to leave, or for you yourself to leave those you love? All in all, it's still hard, the fact that you'll never see them again hurts tremendously. I might be in the wrong for saying this, but it's nice to know others are just like you, the fact that that they too have lost someone, so we know that we're not alone.
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i'm not so good with comforting people, but for what it's worth, i offer my condolences to the family...
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I guess this is good if you are looking for that Hallmark effect, but from a personal standpoint, I'm not such a fan. It's not that I don't think your words are genuine or that this poem will comfort the recipient, it's just that I prefer a more naturalistic form of writing -- because I don't think such higjly structured poems are capable of conveying empathy. Of course, this is how I'd feel if I received such a poem. The recipient may very well see this poem as the thing she needs in her time of loss.
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OMG! This is so overwhelming! so well thought out! I lost my mother 5 years ago, so this hit close to home! Very good flow, rhythm, and rhyme. It's a wonderful piece deserving of millions of applause!
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This is such a wonderful piece. I really enjoyed reading it. It made my heart weep. It is full of such great emotion and heartfelt honesty that I had to read it again. I have lost several close family members over the past few years and this really hit home with me. It's so beautiful! Just awesome! I can't wait until I see my family members again. And yet, like in the poem, It makes me sad and depressed to think about dying and leaving behind my children and other family members. Keep up the great writing!
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wow this is amazing. it is so beautifully hopeful and just amazing. I recently lost someone i loved and i think that this poem would comfort everyone else in my family, as it did me
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IM GONNA CRY! THATS AWESOME!!!GOOD JOB! HOPE U WEN! ITS VERY DEEP AND TOUCHING I LUVED IT!!!!!! KEEP IT UP! -SARAH D.-
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beautiful
Very beautiful. Etheral and dreamy, I think this is wonderful. I hope you do well in the contest. Thank you for sharing such a touching poem.
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Aww,this is truly beautiful,aww,I just love it,this is very touching,my favorite parts,
My bride that I leave behind, the child that I lived for
You will soon be reunited, all together once again,
But in the time decided, for no one knows just when
And so in peace I leave you,It’s only for a while,
as long as when you think of me you’ll stop and smile...
well theres so many parts that truly touch me,so I'll just say I love the whole poem,means alot to me,thank you so much for entering,best of luck...luvmybabys...
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this is so sweet... hell if my eyes werent gooey with ointment id b cryin by now!!!
thi is a beautiful & inspirational piece
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I stopped by and read the poems in this contest.. My sisters the one running it.. its my father who passed away. this was a very very beautiful deep write.. Lost for words.... Good Luck in this contest this was a beautiful poem!!!!! Always Angela
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