His secret he remembers where the sparkling silver liquid flows
Down by the stream where the French wind happily blows,
His secret hidden in the beautiful silver streams
Always coming to him even in his dreams,
His secret that he will always treasure and hold
The flower and streams tell the secret he never told.
He comes here alone to relive the days of his first love
The days before she flew away on the wings of a dove,
The happy memories of the love they use to share
Running happily down the silver streams without a care,
The two of them making love by the silver stream
Lying in each others arms, of their future they would dream.
However this future was never meant to be
She lost the battle with cancer, and died you see,
She told told him to move on that he was still full of life
Years go by before he finds the one to take for his wife,
He is happy with this family he has made of his own
The memories of a deeper love, she wouldn't be shown.
For he knows that she would not understand how he feels
In his heart he knows this is a memory, the other is real,
He comes to the silver springs where the memories start
Here he feels that they are never really far apart,
She is still running by the sparkling silver streams
Where the flowers grow and the sun, off the water gleams.
When the flowers are in bloom, it's his favorite time to be here
Watching and waiting for her to show up, feeling she is near,
Telling the flower of this wonderful girl he loved so much
The fragile flower reminds him of her sweet gentle touch,
When she was alive running and her hair falling free
Memories he treasures, and her he really does see.
Holding the flower, he told his secret, in one hand
With the other, he scribbled her name in the sand.
A contest entry
- ~Update~ Give me whatever you got! by lizwicker.
950 points, ended April 8, 2008, 43 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow your poem made me cry and get chills at the same time.. this is beautiful.. and so sad.. im sorry for what you have been threw!
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this poem made me cry, it was that touching. my father died of cancer almost 2 months ago, and although i dont go to a silver stream, i still go to our place and hang, and when i do i know he is there. you write wonderfully, effortlessly. really beautiful. i applaud you
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well done
I can really relate to this. My grandma lost her husband of 34 years to cancer too. She has yet to find someone else to call a husband. I don't think she ever will either. She has given up on everything except for her children and grandchildren. She is my hero. -
as beautiful as a blooming rose
truely a beautiful poem. I could picture it as I read it! very clearly written and the emotions lose no intensity either. great write! take care and god bless
ciao
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Thank you death-sucks for your comment on my poem..It really does mean so much..Thank you!
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Thank you for your comment on my poem. It means so much..Thanks again!
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Amazing..
WOW... This was a really great poem.. I still have chills down my spine...you did a really great job, it was great to read to I really enjoyed it!
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Much liking much much liking
OMG its beautiful! I loved the poem -
Thank you so much for your comment!
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nice write
I really liked the last two lines. But the whole poem was wondefully great! Great job!
XOXO
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Thank you Serophia, that really means more than you know!
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this excellent your writing style is superb
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You Welcome!!!
-Mina
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Thank you for your comments..And on the luck..I need it. Thanks again!
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Oh Yeah! Good Luck on the Contest!!!!
-Mina
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Nice Piece!
Such a sweet and beautiful poem you written I love it a lot Asome Write! I could really picture it in my head Keep on writting and again Excellent Poem!!!!
-Mina
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no doubt, nothing can beat that, no way.
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Thank you Innosence..Let's hope so, right?
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lol. you are soooo gonna win. That is fantastic!
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Thank you so much. I do appreciate your feed back! Thanks again.
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Dear..this is simply beautifully written. I love the imagery and the feeling you have weaved within the words. I am wishing you so much luck in the contest. \
Liz
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