A spectral shade
a ghost of love
a warm embrace
that never touched
A haunting song
pulls strings of love
will his cruel fate
come shed my blood?
No simple creature
of active mind
this Opera ghost
that no one finds
the upper class
all look around
his love is gone
as is his sound.
A lovely voice
a pale throat
the purest heart
and down he wrote
the score of genius
that would entwine
the love he grasped
and could not find.
Spiraling down
insanity’s slope
bespeaks of horror
beyond control-
his world then tumbled
onto the stage
a shattered heart
a silent rage-
unmasked, the heart
unmasked, the rage
now lying there
on a silent stage.
Author notes
Andrew Lloyd Webber- wrote musical version of 'Phantom of the Opera' recently adapted again into film.
Main picture and background picture- both takes on the Phantom of the Opera. Main pic modifled by me...
Written April 12th, 2005
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A contest entry
- Phantom of the Opera by Sonrio.
400 points, ended March 18, 2006, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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thanks, KiwiiwiK, for catching my typo, and nice contest!
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stanza 1, last line, I think you meant, 'come' not, 'cone'. very good. this is a great piece for this contest. The pictures really creep me out, and it made me sick to see it, but the poem itself was good. It explained how the phantom felt...you did a great job with this piece.
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This is a fantastic write!....I can see we have no chance for gold with you here....
) A much enjoyable and enchanting writing telling of the tale so very well. Your words are so full of feeling and imagery! I truly do wish you the best of luck in the contest.
LIZ -
Wow i really liked this poem it was written beautifully! good luck in the contest!
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Just an excellent write and an enjoyable read!
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This was dark for sure, and deep. And the picture blows my mind away. Very creative...Keep it up! Stacey
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bravo!
you just get better and better. i love the rhyming in this, you are superb. very descriptive in such a little bit of words. i love it. once again, well done!!! -
Wow, hold on while I wipe this tear away. This was an amazing piece I just recently saw the Phantom and I could just picture all this happening and I loved the way you wrote it. Nicely done and congrats on making me cry.
Love
your silent muse
Erin -
Awesome! Very good! Keep it up!
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Awesoe i love that soooo much it was great....it....i dont' have words to describe it...its awesoe how you put that all together....its just like...WOW!
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I am once again amazed at your detail and expression!
"the scores of genius
that would entwine
the love he grasped
and could not find"
So touching!
Brilliant!!
Thanks for entering! I am speechless!
Princess -
Not really into it. There simply weren't any words that connected with me. Oh, well. You can't please eveyone, you can only try and please yourself.
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The guy who wrote phantom of the opera, and I think Jesus Superstar, I surmise. A quick google check reaffirms that.
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Although im not sure i know who Andrew Lloyd Webber is i still enjoyed this poem. The picture at the top was a bit scary but fitted the poem. Well done.
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I enjoyed this. I saw the dialectic with the play and a monster. IT was nice imagery there. I do not find it scary at all, since most of the time, trepedition is mixed with imagery. You did not employ too much imagery except for the direct imagery of the monster and what have you. I liked that. I would, however, fix several parts where there seemed to be flow problems, such as when the line about 'as the sound' comes in, and 'beyond control'. Maybe it was just my ears, but I heard a faint dissonance in reciting those lines audibly.
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That was a really awsome poem it sent shivers up my spine keep up the good work
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