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A few shorties


left me broken on the floor

open to any suggestions

value the love I have to give

even if it may not seem like a lot

~.~.~.~.~.~.~.~.~


Many times you’ll find me

usually lying on the ground

smooching Mother Nature’s gifts

inspired by all around me

cause I appreciate beauty

~.~.~.~.~.~.~.~.~


People can you not see

Even the strong can fall

Not knowing when it may happen

~.~.~.~.~.~.~.~.~


Perfect world full of imperfect people

Always screwing up what can’t be replenished

Pathetic idiots can’t you see

Everything here is being destroyed

Ready for the end of time

April 12, 2005

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Written April 12th, 2005

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  • Forms of Me
    May 20, 2005
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    Laura...my daughter... I too sense the pessimism coming through the pen here. It is ok..though cause they are all really great. Keep up the great work.

    Liz

  • DevilsWrongHand
    April 12, 2005
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    Thanks for reading shameless.
    XOXO
    ~laura


  • Shameless1 silver member
    April 12, 2005
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    a few shorties huh...I could go for a few of those ..lol...pretty good stuff here

  • DevilsWrongHand
    April 12, 2005
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    nice write

    Well thank you dear. "I'm wise beyond my years..." looks into the future....LOL Thanks for reading my stuff Mike. Glad I've made a new fan! I always appreciate every one of them and treat them as i want to be treated.
    XOXO
    ~laura


  • evo-mx5
    April 12, 2005
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    Very insightful bits of wisdom from one so young..especially the last one. When God created the world, it was perfect..the he created humans..I suppose he knew we would screw everything up and I also suppose when we get done, that will be when He comes back.

    Very good, Laura..you are wise beyond your years..

    Mike

  • DevilsWrongHand
    April 12, 2005
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    Thanks gdog for reading my work. If you say it rocks then it has too. Actually to tell ya the truth it just came to me of the top of my head.
    XOXO
    ~laura

  • DevilsWrongHand
    April 12, 2005
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    nice write

    Doug,
    Thank you so very much for reading my work. I really appreicate each and every comment you have ever given me. Thanks for being there to guide me through this world of poetry and giving me some pointers also.
    XOXO
    ~laura

  • gdog
    April 12, 2005
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    dude thats scary its alsome it rocks it's so true i love it it rock alsome flow good base perfect


  • Watuwant silver member
    April 12, 2005
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    Hmmm, a little bit of your pessimism coming out? lol
    A neat little rant though, and one that is and has been shared by many of us at times in our lives. Thanks for sharing!
    peace
    doug

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