Take a look at me
What do you see
The pain in these eyes
The destruction of my soul
Torn apart
Thrown down to the ground
Spit on
Picked away at my soul until there is nothing left
Laying there as I get fucked over more and more
Slitting me open
Blood pouring out of me like a fountain
Pain begins to build
People wanting more pain and more of my blood
Never being satisfied
Crying out in agony
Hoping I will drown in my despair
Wanting all of this pain to cease
Now as I lay on the ground and stare up into the sky
My world begins to spin
My pain rises to it’s peak
My body begins to crumble
Everything turns to red
My body begins to lose all feeling
My eyes get heavy
As my world turns to black
Author notes
first attempt at free verse, btw
Written April 12th, 2005
A contest entry
- if you can keep secrets by more like war.
320 points, ended April 15, 2005, 7 entries
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ouch. that's not a happy cheerful at all, mi norte; quite sad in fact. not bad though, for your first free verse attempt. keep in mind that even though it's in free verse, you can still use stanzas. (I did that with my early f.v. too.) anyway, blah blah - good write and stuff.
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