On my hands bloody
pearl. Smell of roses are still
flying in the air.
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Roses
Written April 12th, 2005
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Beautifully inspiring artistry...
I love this poem, Sonja!! 
I'm wishing you all the best!! 
Peace & hugs,
xx Cyn xx
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I am glad to see you on my site, reading my poetry. I am glad you like it. Thank you Bradley.
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A very peaceful, beautiful piece Sonja, well done, haikus are one of my favourite forms of poetry and you have done it proud, nice one.
Keep up the good work.
best wishes as always
xElectricEyezx
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I read this few times but still couldn't get an imagery of it.
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Thank you Leander. Yes, it was pretty hard to do that because om real meaning and syllables. Sometimes it works better, sometimes not. But, here we are.
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I just want to add once more that it's remarkable when you have the ability to translate haiku from one language to another
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I am glad you like it. Thank you.
~Sonja~ -
This is beautiful! Very well written, I enjoyed very much.
Ostara
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Thank you Fallen1.
~Sonja~ -
You've done well thanks alot!
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A very interesting haiku. One that is refreshingly not boring and redundant. Very well done! Good luck in the contest! Best wishes ~~Meli~
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Sonja, no problems! I was I was a careful reader. I love haikus, I should do them more often. But yeah happy to have read yours. Good luck in the contest!
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Thank you Liquid. Yes, you are right. I saw that you have been very careful reader.
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I see your words as saying something like this..even though my hands are bloody, there is still a shine, a chance that everything will be ok. Or it may be saying..that even though a pearl and a rose are portrayed as beauty they can also be portrayed as pain and sadness. Anywayz..w/e your meaning is, I really agree that your Haiku is cool!! Nice pic of a rose too
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Thank you dawn
~Sonja~ -
Great job
Wow, I am impressed Sonja! It is hard enough to get them 17 syllables! It is a good thing if you can do it in less than that. Very good job! Way to go Sonja! -
I was also a little bit confused when I took a first glance at this haiku... but then your author's comment explained a lot... It's indeed difficult to translate them, since you can lose some details when you do so, however, I think this is quite remarkable
I wish you the best of luck in this contest!
Leander -
pretty.
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No, Tiya, you are not wrong. Thank you for you comment
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hmmm, I was confused with this piece at first, but I have come to the conclusion that a beautiful thing like a rose/pearl may be painful, however there is always something to look forward to, tell me if I'm wrong, lolx, nice write...keep writing....
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Thank you silverael
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Hmm.. I'm not sure what I'm taking away from this, but I love how different this is. My only suggestion is that you change "rose" to "roses" in the second line, because as it is now, that line is only 6 syllables when it should be 7. I hope that wouldn't destroy the meaning. Best of luck - Liz
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wonderful
you a wonderful writer my ap friend. keep up the wonderful work -
This was very creative, so far the poems of yours that I have seen are short and stay near the format of a haiku, I like this style you have, its amazing how much you can get out of a few words. Once again, very good job. Keep using your talent, maybe it will get you somewhere, someday.
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im with pozo with on the virginity thing. i thought i was the only the trashed mind...good to know im not. but maybe i am because pearl on the hand...anyways. i dont know what its about. but good job.
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OK, I was looking at latest comments and I think I forgot to return the favour... so hey better be thanked twice then not at all
Great haiku here, I liked it a lot Keep writing, this was quite a dark write- I think it almost refers to the loss of virginity with the 'rose' and the 'blood'.
Thanks for commenting on my poem
All the best,
Pozo
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Thank you my friend
When you say something, I always have to think about it. Thank you Mina. I agree that my intension was something that you recognized in this poem.
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This is the beauty of poetry.. each and every poem has a different taste... and this haiku is not an exception... this has a very deep meaning... it's a metaphoric... it's living in a castle made out of chocolate... you can live in it but can't eat it... such is the assence of this haiku... immatrialistic things can't provide happiness... very well written and you should write more of these... good luck...
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Different, yet nicely written.
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Life has so many twists, so many turns, yet we tend to focus on the pains more than the joys...I loved the simplicity of form blended with the complexity of thought in this piece.
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Very nicely written. I loved how you made it so simple and yet so powerful in meaning. Very nice
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No, no, you are probably an optimist with experiance
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Grateful
Thank you Paula. I saw you are so qualified to verdict a poem like this one. That means alot to me.
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on my hands a bloody pearl
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well done
bloody pearl.. smell of rose.. roses have thorns.. they sting.. blood.. Sometimes beautiful and wondreful things can be really harmful.. hurt emotions.. -
When you are writing a poem some principles are different. If you are just following a rules probably you will never have a chance to understand all. Enter your soul and close your eyes.
Anyhow, thanks for your opinion
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enigmatic
hi...i've been away recently & am still quite busy....but dropped in to see this. it's quite enigmatic...i'm not quite sure what it means or what it could mean....the first line is confusing; is there an indefinite article missing/
all the best,
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Thanks Amy.
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Thank you Sandi. this is more than rose and thorn, this is a life.
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Don't you just hate it that something so beautiful can be so harmful at the same time? Maybe they'll come up with a "thornless" rose one day
Nice job with this Sandi
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Very nice simple write....the smell of roses....so definied...loved how your refered to blood being like a pearl...and your pic..accents great! -Amy
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