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My Suicide

No matter how loud the music plays
It can not drown out my sobbing
I've never felt so empty
So alone
I'm dead again
And you don't even care
This is my suicide
I still kiss you goodnight...every night...at least a thousand times
And yet you don't even feel me
My pain is Novocaine and I'm numb to everything now
I kill myself by loving you
This is my suicide....

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Written April 11th, 2005

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  • Angelicwhisper
    April 18, 2005
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    thanks :-) glad you enjoied it

  • Angelicwhisper
    April 18, 2005
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    i'll be ok...eventually. Thanks for your caring words ;-)

  • Mia Donna
    April 12, 2005
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    Very, very good first two lines. They capture the reader and keep them. Nice job.


  • April 12, 2005
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    Hon, what is this sadness.... I hope you are ok... You always pen your feelings beautifully, as you did in this, take care sweetie, just continue to write you have much talent, Love, Annie