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the plan - we go in, we run out


There are many things and places
Where I would like to have and be
But unfortunately many
Are just too illegal to plea


for my final year:
I dreamt about traveling
The world across and far
I would not fly, or boat or sail
I would rather drive a stolen car


If I was given a month to live:
I might pillage, steal and riot
And live the high and wanted life
I’d be a local celebrity-
everyone would give to me


Now if I knew I had a day or so:
I would tell everyone just where to go
Loud and proud and in their face
Spitting at their setback state
I’d be more than ready to lay in my place


A matter of hours before I croak:
I would buy a thousand fur coats
Strip them down and make a blanket
Send it to the animals activists
And give a return address just to see’em get pissed!


A year? A month? A day?
But if the doctors were all wrong
Hearing the same sad sorry song
I would be a little more confused
Cuz I wouldn’t know which tactic to use!

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Written April 11th, 2005

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  • poetryality silver member
    April 24, 2005
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    LOL! Now you can tell you are free-spirited and young because I would have never thought of these things now, not at my age! LOL I agree with the "fur" stanza, although I will never own a fur coat, allergic! This is just great! I hope you have a bazillion more days and don't have to worry at all with what to do if this was your last day! Good musing! Good Luck!

    Renee ♥


  • Diamond
    April 12, 2005
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    Live For Today!

    The wise thing to do is to live your life to the fullest as though each day were your last and not wait for a doctor to tell you that you only have a year left to live. It would be difficult to fit an entire life time into just one year but this poem was sort of a wakeup call for all those who are living an idle life. Start living for today and cherish tomorrow. Great write, excellent thought, thank you for sharing. Avril

  • InsomNiAC
    April 12, 2005
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    Nice Job.

    Interesting write. I found this pretty funny after I read it a couple of times. Great moral to, you have to live every day as though it's your last. Well done.

    I don't know if this was a form poem, I'm always looking at that kinda stuff (><). The rhyming was there, for the most part, and its flowed pretty well. All in all, good write. Good Luck in future ones as well. Later...

    ~The Sleepless One~


  • ToltecWarrior
    April 12, 2005
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    Hehehe...
    Cute write. What ever you may choose to do in life, please live life now. Don't wait for a doctor to tell you that your dying. Everyone is on a time clock, no one knows when the alarm will go off. So don't wait, live your dreams now....
    And try not to get caught!

    BE GREAT!

    Toltec Warrior


  • BluRosePoet8488
    April 11, 2005
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    Verry witty... I loved it!

    This brought a smile to my face and a chuckle to my lips. A pretty amazing write. It makes one think too... With a little wit and humor. Just what would I do knowing I had a certain amount of time left... I'm not sure... to be honest. Thanks for sharing. Good luck. Love... hugs...
    ~Donna~
    Edited on Apr 11, 11:10 p.m. because 'spelling'.


  • kryspin
    April 11, 2005
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    thank you for your comments, i'm glad you had a laugh.


  • joliemere
    April 11, 2005
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    This is awesome. There are times when I think of doing something bad just to say "hey , i've done something bad"..but then the little angel on my shoulder wins out and I step back into my dull life. This is a wonderful strategy for those last months, days , or hours. I especially loved the sending a fur blanket to the activists idea. That rocks!! EXCELLENT WRITE!!

  • brackattk
    April 11, 2005
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    Nice write, put a smile on my face,lol.


  • catz Moderators member
    April 11, 2005
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    Lol... this must be a lot of otherwise upright and honest peoples dream, kryspin....lol
    A cute tongue in cheek write....

    Good luck in the contest
    Dee

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