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Just Bones

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Just bones.
That’s all they are finding.
Just bones.

The collection has begun.
The accounting of horrors.
The tally of the dead
Unearthed by the thousands.

It is a ponderous task.
There are so many.
And these are only the bodies
They have been able to find.
How many others will spend eternity
Trapped beneath this rocky soil,
With no one to weep over them?

My friends and countrymen,
Women and children,
They are all just bones now.
All met the same fate.
No mercy was shown,
Not even for the little ones.

Today, I held a tiny skull in my hand.
There was a hole in it
Where the bullet had entered.

What could a child do to deserve such a fate?
How can men do such things?
What could a child ever do?

All that they were,
All that they might become,
Just bones.
Remnants of lives.
Bones, as dry as this desert.

How could these empty skulls have held so much?
So much love?
So much hope?
So much fear?

What terrible sights did these hollow eyes witness
In the final moments?

And somewhere, among them all,
Lies my love,
Gone now for seventeen years.

 

Seventeen years.

I will never love another.

Her skin was so smooth.
Her hair was so soft.
Her smile was so warm.

They came and took her one night
And I never saw her again.

How will I find her?
How will I find her here
Among all this human wreckage?

Some say the outsiders don’t belong in our country.
I don’t know about politics.
I am a simple man.
I only know that my love is gone forever
And now, the people who took her from me
Will finally pay for what they have done.

And this dry earth 
That has held her for so long
Can finally receive my tears.








Author notes

1. I wrote this about two years after the liberation of Iraq when they were discovering the true extent of Hussein's atrocities, digging up thousands of bodies in mass graves around Iraq. It was inspired by a story I read by a man whose wife disappeared because Hussein took a shine to her. He and his cronies would often kidnap women and use them for sex, then dump them on the street where they would be considered dishonored and forced to become prostitutes to survive. Others were just killed outright and buried in the desert.

2. Mark Rickerby - real name and screen name.

3. My poems are usually based on my own experience. This one marked the first in many where I'm writing from another person's perspective. I found it liberating and heartbreaking at the same time. I have found that putting myself into the mind of someone who has suffered something beyond my comprehension is the best way to increase compassion.

Everything below this point was written when this was first posted.

Because a few people have mistakenly assumed this was written in the first person, it is not. It is written from an Iraqi man's point of view searching for a loved one lost in the Kurdish massacre by Hussein in 1988.

Another favorite pasttime of Hussein and his sons was abducting women they found attractive. ("Kidnap" would not be the right word because they were above the law. In fact, there was no law other than their own moment-to-moment whims.) They would keep these women at their palaces as sex slaves. When they were bored with them, they would either kill them or throw them out on the street again. Hundreds of women disappeared this way during the 30 years of Hussein's reign.

The photograph is one of Hussein's many mass graves. For more photos of Hussein's atrocities, visit http://www.9neesan.com/massgraves/

Here are some messages from our friends here that bear repeating -

"This is so touching and sad. I'm sure that many of the Iraqi people feel this way. When this war started, I thought it was completely senseless and that America needed to worry about itself and not everyone else, but now I see that I was just being biased because I didn't want Paul to go. I have read so many stories of people who have felt closure, been helped, and been saved by American soldiers being over there that I cannot say that it is senseless. They deserve to be free and feel justice just as much as we do and they could not get out from under him without the help of America."
- SharonLynn

"25,000 children under the age of 5 died each year of hunger under Hussein's rule. Thousands were placed in mass graves, other thousands sent to torture chambers and yet no one speaks of this. On the other site I moderate, I asked the protesters "Then you would prefer that the children keep dying, right?". They have no answer to that. There are protests all over the world but you won't find an Iraqi taking part in them. They understand, and appreciate, what has been done for them. As you say, NO ONE should be forced to live - and die - that way."
- Balladeer

"The reality and cruel reality at that is that this piece could just as easily relate to the inhumanity in Rwanda, Sudan, Ethiopia, East Timor, Tibet, Chechnya, Balkans, from the purges of Stalin, the atrocities of Hitler and the cruelty perpetrated by the Japanese army in World War Two as it relates to the killings of Saddam Hussein. The reference will date a message that is timeless and an enemy that is universal."
- D.P. Robertson

Written April 11th, 2005

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  • Viyanna Rosemarie 2
    September 18, 2007

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    the imager in this is quite fantastic. i am grateful that you have chosen to share this with me here at all poetry.com and am looking forward to reading more form you in the near future. i wish you the best of luck in this contest that you have entered (though i do not think that you will be needing it) viyanna rosemarie

  • Dienush Greeters member
    September 10, 2007

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    Wow, this was so powerful that I honestly thought it was about your own experience. The first and last stanza are especially captivating. I liked how this poem begins with something so sad and heartbreaking, "just bones" says more than thousands of sentences could. The ending related perfectly - you had given the bones a history, and now there comes release. I like how by putting the "dry earth" and your tears finally together, though it is somewhat sad, this is both a relief and maybe a promise for better times, since tears also symbolize water that might make the earth more fertile/alive. I think this poem's style is really suited for the message. It sort of makes me want to hear it recited. Thank you for entering my contest.

    ~Diana


  • Dragons Lady
    September 9, 2007

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    A sad poignant write. This brought tears to my eyes. The atrocities that have been committed by mankind against each other is truly horrifying. Thank you for sharing this write. Good luck in the contest.


  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    November 30, 2005
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    drummerzgirl,

    It's not about me. Please check the author's comments for an answer to your question. Thanks.

    Mark

  • spamwitch
    November 30, 2005
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    There is so much to what you say, and the reminder on a human level is so important. I will not share my opinions of war, as I feel one man captured is not enough. I do think it's a good start, and I wish we as a society could have handled a war based on humanity, meaning, there is much of this world wide, and if we really beleive it is important, than this is just the beginning. There is much to be done, are we ready to step in and correct it, or do we justify this mans capture based on the reasons you portray so well here. It's a thought, because so many people agree with the meaning behind this peice, how far are we really willing to go? Beautiful expression here, I think you have captured many readers emotions.
  • bad-poet3
    November 30, 2005
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    very deep!!!! were you in love? n where do you livew to where they had to take her awaty?

  • NoWayJo
    November 30, 2005
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    Your poem touches on the attrocities not only of Hussein himself, Mark, but attrocities of the Holocaust, and so many other areas of the world even to this day where our interjection as a country is and had been so necessary. It's just that the attrocities are so often overlooked or allowed to continue for so long before we do intercede. It shouldn't be a case of the genocide or murder of millions before someone takes notice...

    I think your approach to this poem, by bringing a sense of personalization of you as narrator to the reader, was a fine technique and did not overdo any sentimentality in this poem. In fact, it felt to bring it to the right level where the reader is left with a sense of thought and caring...Any poem which can provoke the reader to that sense is a good one!

    Good writing Mark and you have truly impressed me with this poem!

    Jo
    Edited on Nov 30, 7:33 p.m. because ''.

  • TolkienGirl20
    November 30, 2005
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    I am the kind of person who can watch a horror film, holocaust movie, and a touching movie about a murder all in a row without sheading a tear (not because I'm heartless, just because that's the way I am), and this poem has touched me in such a powerful way, it has made me cry for the first time in a year. Thank you for writing such a beautiful piece. This is amazing, equal to the work of fameous poets all around the world. Enter a contest, you would win. And now, if you would excuse me, I have to go grab some more Kleenex.

  • November 30, 2005
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    wow excellant job (crap i cant spell for sh*t)
    i love it heaps

  • angelofthecentury
    November 30, 2005
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    to answer the question of someone up there i may be wrong but i dont think his wife was taken like he said it was from another mans point of view threfore it was probly that mans wife or just in the sense for you to get an idea of what was going on during the time period to these poor people you have to look more in depth to it than what is seen by the eye because it is said beauty is in the eye of the beholder and so i think (What could a child do
    to deserve such a fate?
    How can men do such things?

    What could a child ever do?

    All that they were,
    All that they might become,
    just bones.
    Remnants of lives.
    Bones, as dry as this desert.

    How could these empty skulls
    have held so much?
    So much love,
    So much hope,
    So much fear?) brilliant and the most touching absolutley wonderful the flow form everythig the way it all fits in great job

  • Manicmuze
    June 29, 2005
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    This is extremely powerful... i found the repetition of "just bones" to be very effective and i almost was waiting for it to happen again somewhere near the end... could make a powerful last line if worked in somehow.

    A painful and disturbingly sad poem, not an easy topic to tackle.

    Very well done, impressive work.
    ~ Wendy

  • lencio-sunchild gold member
    June 9, 2005
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    From whoever's POV this is written, it is heartfelt and deep. The issue is very sensitive. It just tells a story, ruthless and unjustifiable. I wonder where all this is leading to. What happens to all that we write. I too have written a couple of such poems. I hope one day, the world will come to a point when it will fight no no, and no children will be killed. This is a very beautifully written piece. If you do have the time, I invite you to read mine, you may find yourself on the same side of the spectrum.

  • Catressa gold member
    May 27, 2005
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    Sadly unless it is in front of peoples faces they do not see this as a reality in someone elses world.. My heart mourns.. Take Care Mark and as always your pen flows well, Catressa

  • May 15, 2005
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    MUST SEE

    NO DOUBT YOU ARE IN MY FAVORITE LIST

    well this is a similar topic to the ones I read before
    I see
    that you have a similar way and a style to all your poems
    a seroius tang to every piece

    well mee too here was mistaken as in the poem was written in first place

    this one has really ripped my "mind"
    a very straight language used potraying a sad feelings

    this was the best line I found here
    "How many others
    will spend eternity trapped beneath this rocky soil,"

    again few verrry interesting ones
    "Today, I held a tiny skull in my hand.
    There was a hole in it"
    abd when he describes his love

    leaves an effect on mind
    keep penning

    Edited on May 15, 6:23 because ''.
  • pongo
    May 11, 2005
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    Well done
    P~

  • J Rhys Davies
    May 11, 2005
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    Mark, though I figured as much, I am still glad I read your notes regarding this. I assumed this was not from your point of view and it just had to be from someone else’s. Or at least I was praying it was. You always have such a brilliant way of taking the pain that must be felt from someone and writing it down as if it were you own. I’m sure that there is a little bit of you in this, but that is neither here nor there. Excellent job my friend, as always.

    ~ John

  • klassy lassy
    May 7, 2005
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    Mark, this is the first piece I have read of yours. Atrocities like this leave my heart in my throat and tears in my eyes and soul-felt despair. It is totally beyond my ken, yet I know it is not just insanity; it is evil incarnate that wreaks such savagery. Your poem staggers the imagination because it voices truth on a gut level. And I'm glad you make your voice known. You will, if you have not already, make a difference, I'm sure.

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    April 20, 2005
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    Ellmist,

    No, this was not personal. It was written from the point of view of an Iraqi man who lost his wife in Hussein's massacre at Halapja in 1988. While writing this, I was trying to imagine how it must feel to watch the thousands of bodies being pulled out of the earth and wondering which one is a lost loved one.

    Thanks,

    Mark

  • illusions
    April 19, 2005
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    you always have a deeper message than what lies on the surface. i love that about your work. this is a wonderful piece with a very powerful message. i really like the repetition of the title throughout the piece - places emphasis where it needs to be. thank you for posting something like this - forces your readers to think outside their own lives, even if only for a moment.

    illusions
  • Ellmist
    April 19, 2005
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    I have to ask...Your wife wasnt REALLY one taken was she? I Don't THINK so but I just wanna know, that would be something I could not live with, I dont know what I would do in that position. Again, very well writen.

    ~Ellmist~

  • queenie
    April 18, 2005
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    i just have to continue to laud your adhesion to your convictions and the ability you have to convey it to others.this is a very moving account that is a real possibility coming from an iraqi man.it gives a clear insight into the truth of what is happening in this world.this is all the more reason why i seek to draw closer to God each day.your compassion runs deep and the world is a better place because you are in it.

  • ladylyric
    April 18, 2005
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    Wow...it is very eye-opening...and scary. I have always thought myself to be a child of peace...but this is a war worth fighting...those people are savages. I think God everyday that I am an American. Awesome job....another masterpiece.
    Peace & Love.....Shannon Rose

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    April 18, 2005
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    Hi Linda,

    I can't imagine having any attitude toward these maniacs in the world other than yours. It is the only right way to live. To be against taking out maniacs who murder their own people by the thousands is to be FOR murder, torture and genocide.

    Thanks,

    Mark

  • sanity silver member
    April 18, 2005
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    Your words are the sad and painful truth of life, some leaders of the world will get rich off their country and persecute their own people, madmen in this day and age that should be taken from power, then we have those that will, young men fighting for freedom, not their own but for the freedom and salvation of those who cannot do it alone but need help, isn't that what the world needs? A very heart wrenching write.... Thanks for sharing

    hugs and love
    LindaXX

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    April 14, 2005
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    Michael,

    Thank you for your great response to this poem. I hadn't heard that statistic but, of course, it doesn't surprise me. I have posted your response in the author's comments section here, if you don't mind. I've used your argument with protestors myself, though with slightly different wording. To be against this war is to be for torture and a wide variety of persecution by Hussein's horrendously evil regime. Some people just don't seem to get that.

    Thanks for your thoughts on this. As you know, I have the highest respect and admiration for you and your work, so I'm proud to know you consider me to be a kindred spirit.

    Mark

  • Grieving-Willow
    April 14, 2005
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    Wow Uncle Mark, This is so sad and really opens your eyes to just how lucky we, Americans are, my heart drops seeing images of such as the pic that is posted on this piece. You really express the depth of sad truth that we need to realize --- one of the many qualitities I love about you is how wonderful you touch people Love and Miss you ---Sara

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    April 13, 2005
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    You're not insane. I deleted my comments, too. I realized I was bickering. lol Everything's cool. Thanks.

    Mark
  • missgeorgia
    April 13, 2005
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    Just to confirm whether I'm insane or not, did you delete my comment? I was looking for it and couldn't find it. Anyway, I didn't want to cause an argument, it's just personal taste. No hostility meant.
  • La fanciulla
    April 12, 2005
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    amazing

    This is such a deep and beautiful poem. It's so sad and powerful and what makes it all the more sad is that it isn't fiction. People are going through and have gone this grief and pain.

    "Some say the liberators
    don’t belong in our country.
    I don’t know about politics.
    I am a simple man.
    I only know that my love is gone forever
    and now, the people who took her from me
    will finally pay for what they have done."

    Very touching poem. I absolutely loved it.

    -Anna

  • Balladeer gold member
    April 12, 2005
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    Mark, if I ever needed any more proof that we are kindred spirits (which I didn't) this poem is it. 25,000 children under the age of 5 died each year of hunger under Hussein's rule. Thousands were placed in mass graves, other thousands sent to torture chambers and yet no one speaks of this. On the other site I moderate, I asked the protesters "Then you would prefer that the children keep dying, right?". They have no answer to that. There are protests all over the world but you won't find an Iraqi taking part in them. They understand, and appreciate, what has been done for them. As you say, NO ONE should be forced to live - and die - that way. This poem is masterful...
  • chimaera
    April 12, 2005
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    Your poem was truly beautiful. The thing that really got to me about it was thinking of it in terms of coming from and Iraqi man. We see so often the horrible way that women and children were treated and our hearts go out to them, imagining how they must feel. But nobody speaks of the men. Of their loss of their wives and children, their pain and loss. Thank you for presenting this very powerful and touching point of view.

  • Invisible Comfort
    April 12, 2005
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    I don't believe anyone deserves to die for no reason. Things like this happen and it sucks. It may just be one person that gets killed, but it has a ripple effect to other people also. Iraqi people will have felt like this, and they shouldn't have to. Another brilliant write. Well done, Antish xxx

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    April 12, 2005
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    I wish it were fiction too, John. Thanks for sharing that philosophy with me. I'd heard it before but not quite that way. Thanks for stopping by.

    Mark

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    April 12, 2005
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    Please don't lump Bush's name in with Hitler, Amin, et al. There is no comparison. The reason Iraqi civilians are dying in this war is because the cowardly terrorists we are hunting hide among them, depending on our decency to not carpet bomb the whole place just to get them. That's why our soldiers are walking through sniper-ridden alleys every day trying to separate the terrorists from the ordinary people. This is micro-surgery, not cutting off the patient's head. That's what the terrorists do.

    Our civilian casualties are accidents, which we mourn. The terrorists' civilian casualties are intentional, which they celebrate. That's one of the many differences between them and us.

    And what about the thousands, perhaps hundreds of thousands, of lives that Bush has saved by taking Hussein out of power? Shouldn't he get a little credit for that?

    Thanks for commenting.

    Mark

  • SuZyCuE
    April 12, 2005
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    WOW I can honestly say that I have tears in my eyes as I write this. The image of a childs skull with a bullet hole in it just haunts me, I write this as I am looking at my youngest daughter and thinking how lucky I am that she is here with me and not in a mass grave somewhere. Wow your writing is sure powerful, and describes all the hurt and horror that this war has brought. Excellent write Mark.

  • cherche -d -ame gold member
    April 12, 2005
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    Mark , I must apologize but at this present time I could read no further than the skull of the child with the bullet hole.....maybe I will return at some later date to finish. Call it cowardly on my part , but I personally cannot handle this right now ................ I do believe I am at a point where just one more little drop will create a flood that I will not be able to swim through . However I am sure the rest of your write will be a great message to the reader ....and as I said , once I can breathe again , I will try to finish it ....
    xoxo
    Reenie
    Edited on Apr 12, 4:59 because 'Typo'.

  • April 11, 2005
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    This is so good. it gives us such a bad feeling about all this war and terrorism.. Hussein, hitler, bush,custer, amin ect. have all killed many people.. many inocent people.. especially the case in iraq, they have killed many incocent people when will all this stop never i supose
    Well done this is a great peace

  • Adios Muchachos silver member
    April 11, 2005
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    Dear Mark,
    I have read both your narrative and the comments here.
    I liked this writing very much, and I know it to be true.
    What could that kid have done to deserve such a fate?

    Some of the commentaries brought to mind an adage that I learned in religious school, which is as follows.....

    "If I am not for myself, WHO will be?" (a person)
    "But if I am only for myself, WHAT am I?"(a thing)
    "And if not now, WHEN?"

    Only when you become your brother's keeper do you become
    human!
    That is why God sent Cain away! To grow up, and not to come back until he did!
    Informative piece of writing. Wish it were fiction!

    John

  • -BlackKnight- silver member
    April 11, 2005
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    I accept your apology. Now, onto the main part of my reply.

    I agree that, in the long run, the invasion of Iraq and the removal of Saddam Hussein and his family from power will greatly improve the quality of live for most, if not all, Iraqis. I'm not saying that those that fight against their rescuers simply for being there, for being on their homeland and fighting what they may believe to be their war, are right, nor have I ever stated that the insurgents or terrorists are right about anything. I'm merely stating that the first group of people in that last sentence exist; not that they're right or wrong or anything like that. They're there simply because they are.

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    April 11, 2005
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    Sharon,

    You made my day. I couldn't have said it better myself. I'm going to post your words in my author comments section right now for all to see. Thank you, thank you, and again, thank you.

    Mark

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    April 11, 2005
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    BK,

    I apologize. I assumed. Sorry.

    But every time - and I mean EVERY time I get into an argument with a liberal, they are the first to become insulting. So I guess I'm a little hand-shy as a result. I certainly didn't mean to insult your mother, for cryin' out loud. Please apologize to her for me, too.

    One of the main differences I've noticed between conservatives and liberals is that conservatives tend to think in moral absolutes and to liberals, everything is relative. I think in terms of right and wrong, and the greater good. So I believe what we're doing in Iraq, in the long run, will serve the greater good, for us, for the world at large, and for the people there. The insurgents know that, too. That's why losing is not an option to them. They want things to stay as oppressive as they have always been. Bush is right when he says they hate freedom, because freedom for the people in Iraq means the end of what the terrorists/insurgents consider to be "the good life". Yes, there are other reasons for their "insurgency" but that's the main one.

    So what do you think we should do about places where people are being tortured and killed by the hundreds of thousands? Should we do nothing because some of them don't want us to come and help them?

    I'm off to bed now but I will expect a damn good answer tomorrow, you liberal pinko. (Just kidding! lol)

    Mark
    Edited on Apr 11, 10:17 p.m. because ''.

  • SharonLynn
    April 11, 2005
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    Yet again you manage to bring tears to my eyes. You have a way with words that no one else I have ever read anything by has. I'm not sure what to call it but you have poetry in your soul. It seems like very poem, story, comment, etc... I have ever seen you put on here has partially bore your soul to the world. This is so touching and sad, I'm sure that many of the Iraqi people feel this way. When this war started I thought it was completely senseless and that America needed to worry about itself and not everyone else but now I see that I was just being bias because I didn't want Paul to go. I have read so many stories of people who have felt closure, been helped, and been saved by American soldiers being over there that I cannot say that it is senseless...They deserve to be free and feel justice just as much as we do and they could not get out from under him without the help of America... You have done an awesome job expressing emotion once again. Thanks for writing this, it was beautiful.

  • -BlackKnight- silver member
    April 11, 2005
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    Ugh, you should know damn well that I'm not a liberal, yet you immediately assume someone is a liberal because they may not believe exactly what you believe. It's pathetic.

    You can't tell me people in, say, New York City, would want a bunch of British folks walking around what they feel is their city. And, gasp, if you want, I can show you a good example, though there was little, if any, fighting taking place: WWII. Yeah, when the Americans had to camp out in England for a while to build up the Normandy invasion, there were some Britons that didn't care to see all these "Yankees" running around; it didn't matter that they were helping to fight back the Nazis, the point was, they were there, and they didn't much care for them. The same can be true for virtually any country, including ones in the Middle East, because you assume that the only reason some people there hate America is because of the horrendous propaganda machine that serves as their media. There are people there that have undergone little, if any, influence from the media, yet don't want anyone that isn't from their country (or, at worst, their region, including other Middle Eastern countries) running around on their streets. I'm not talking about insurgents or terrorists that support such horrible, corrupt regimes as Hussein's was; I'm talking about people that could very well have hated the previous government, but also can't stand the idea of foreigners being on their land. It's got nothing to do with politics, religion, or any of that, but like I said, it's hard to really explain.

    By the way, you might want to tighten up your usage of the term "liberal." I'm not a liberal, and I'm not a Democrat, but I know several people that are, including my mother, and it annoys me whenever someone refers to a liberal as basically being an empty-headed, naïve fool, and though most have differing ideas than those of conservatives, the implication that, somehow, all liberals are "bad" or "stupid" simply because they believe differently than us is one that doesn't hold up for about 90% of liberals out there. The same applies whenever a Democrat refers to a Republican as a "donkey" or "redneck," in that it doesn't include many of the Republicans in the country. These days you only hear about the ultra-left and ultra-right wingers; you never hear about those that prefer not to make idiots of themselves.

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    April 11, 2005
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    Thank you, David. You make some good points. I'll consider your suggestions tomorrow. Right now, the pillow is screamin' my name. lol

    Thanks again,

    Mark

  • dp robertson
    April 11, 2005
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    This is brilliant. In fact I will go further than that and say this was easily the best thing I have read of yours. It has everything good writing is meant to have. This piece is incredibly emotive, painfully empathized and skillfully portrayed. The only problem is the overt reference to what is obvious. This second last stanza weakens slightly what is magnificent writing. I believe the message would be more powerful without the American reference simply because it makes the message more universal while still maintaining what is obviously a poem inspired by mass graves in Iraq. The reality and cruel reality at that is that this piece could just as easily relate to the inhumanity in Rwanda, Sudan , Ethiopia, East Timor, Tibet, Chechnya, Balkans, from the purges of Stalin, the atrocities of Hitler and the cruelty perpetrated by the Japanese army in World War Two as it relates to the killings of Saddam Hussein. The reference will date a message that is timeless and an enemy that is universal. That said, it is a great piece and you should be proud to have penned it. I know I would be.

    David

  • withdrawal
    April 11, 2005
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    Omg...what a heart-squeeze!

  • heartnsoul
    April 11, 2005
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    superb!

    Hussien, Hitler, Amin, Stalin,Custer, the list goes on and on. My history teacher was right after all. History does repeat itself. Unfortunately, no one it seems has learned the lesson. My father once tried to explain war as a necessary evil. I didn't believe it then and I don't now. The questions that sang in my head then are the one's that still to this day sing. Only louder. I guess because I understand it more now than I did then.
    How many roads must a man walk down
    Before you call him a man?
    Yes, 'n' how many seas must a white dove sail
    Before she sleeps in the sand?
    Yes, 'n' how many times must the cannon balls fly
    Before they're forever banned?

    The answer, my friend, is blowin' in the wind,
    The answer is blowin' in the wind.

    How many times must a man look up
    Before he can see the sky?
    Yes, 'n' how many ears must one man have
    Before he can hear people cry?

    Yes, 'n' how many deaths will it take till he knows
    That too many people have died?

    The answer, my friend, is blowin' in the wind,
    The answer is blowin' in the wind.

    How many years can a mountain exist
    Before it's washed to the sea?
    Yes, 'n' how many years can some people exist
    Before they're allowed to be free?

    Yes, 'n' how many times can a man turn his head,
    Pretending he just doesn't see?
    The answer, my friend, is blowin' in the wind,
    The answer is blowin' in the wind.

    Your poem sears the soul Mark. I do hope that some day these questions will have answers. Instead of bones and ashes "blowin in the wind". I do love my country. The American people are the most passionate and compassionate of any nation. And we as individuals have proved that time and again. It's the politicians I have the problem with. Most of them anyway. No man/woman or child should have to suffer the loss of a loved one in this manner. Nor should they suffer a death such as this.
    A poem such as this is one of the things I love about you most. It's your passion. What you feel, you feel deeply. When you express it, sometimes brutal, sometimes softly. But always eloquently.
    ~Michelle~

  • Pookiebubu
    April 11, 2005
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    What a powerful piece, Mark. Like BlackKnight, I am frustrated by battles for political reasons. And, I see our battle in Iraq, primarily fueled by politics (pun intended).
    But there is still a part of me that is broken to tears when I see what oppression can do to people. It is one thing to say that we shouldn't destroy a way of life that people have lived for many years. It is another to say why shouldn't we step in when we see lives destroyed. The killings that took place and continue to take place were/are unneccessary, served/serve no purpose and ARE WRONG!
    Thank you for having the courage to write this piece. It is very well-written and filled with emotion. Thank you, also, for sharing your work with the rest of us!

  • PlayfulPassion
    April 11, 2005
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    excellent

    Such a tragic loss to all. My heart weighs heavy on the loss of life and it just rips me to shreds to think of such innocence of life taken so young. Great write. Very touching.

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    April 11, 2005
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    Funny how the liberals always get condescending first. ("Yes, yes, yes"). You sound like Commander McBrag.

    I'm sure there are some non-terrorists who hate anyone on their land, mostly because of the repeated assertions by hateful mullahs that any non-Muslim and/or non-Muslim on their land is an infidel, no matter what they're doing there.

    Insurgents and terrorists are exactly the same thing. They both want to destroy anything unlike themselves. They blow up cars and kill their own people, right? What does that sound like to you? That's a rhetorical question. You don't have to answer. (But you probably will. lol.)

    We better just agree to disagree because Lord knows I've heard all your arguments before, too.

    Peace and love,

    Mark

  • suseann
    April 11, 2005
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    Compassions Calling

    For all mankinds cultural growth,some are not even as civilized as prehistoric cave dwellers.He dug himself a spider hole alright.May God have mercy on thoughtless evil,because I can't.A true compassionate write.

  • Kendall Campbell
    April 11, 2005
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    Such a modestly written poem , with pain running through every word. I hope what sounded like some closure for you at the end wasnt just my misinterpretation. You've done a beautiful job and its nice to hear a voice from the other side on this topic. Best of wishes to you.

  • -BlackKnight- silver member
    April 11, 2005
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    Yes yes yes, I've heard many of your arguments before Mark, but I'm not talking about insurgent fighters or terrorists or any of that. I'm talking about people fighting against foreigners entering onto their land for that simple reason; not for politics, not for defending their government, not for loyalty towards a murderous nation. It's hard to explain. Maybe I'm just being naïve, or foolish, or something along those lines, but it's what I've come to think lately. Insurgent fighters and terrorists are something different.
  • LonelyLover01
    April 11, 2005
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    WoW...

    WoW...very good job. I am very sorry that you had to experience that....you did a great job of showing true emotion for the dead mentioned here. Your emotion was so strong that it gave me emotion for the people mentioned here.....great work. I invite you to come and check out my work and see what you think. thanx

  • AgeofAquarius
    April 11, 2005
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    X cellent

    what a kewl write ... there should be a law against such madness. But as old as man is, so is war... Excellent Write

  • Night Hope gold member
    April 11, 2005
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    '...I am a simple man.
    I only know that my love is gone forever
    and now, the man who took her from me
    will finally pay for what he has done.

    And this dry earth
    that has held her for so long
    can finally receive my tears.'


    My Friend...what can I say to such profound eloquence...such elegance of speech??? This is a hauntingly beautiful piece, Mark...Beautiful for its raw & intense Honesty...You, my Friend, are an Honourable Man...The tragedy is that it has become so rare as to make me mention it at all...You speak for many that are voiceless & silent, Mark...I love you, my Friend...There are no superlatives fine enough for your writing, Mark...You've grown so much, just since I've known you...It is my Honour...my privelege...to be your Friend... Wanda

  • truembrace
    April 11, 2005
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    Such a very solemn write. It not only reminds me of the more current situation in this war, it also reminds me of the holocaust and of the situation in Rowanda where so many suffered through genocide.

    The poem reminds me of a room in the holocaust museum. All it holds are shoes of many of the victims - thousands of shoes that symbolize each person that had once held the tiniest feet and those of their parents.

    Seeing the title, "just bones" creates a solemn enough persona about your write here. Still, your words bring so many other images to the surface.

    A very impactful write. I think you did this as well as one can regarding such a hard subject to capture.

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    April 11, 2005
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    1. These people were too beaten down by 30 years of horror and oppression to even throw a punch, let alone fight "their war".

    2. The people fighting us are not ordinary citizens. They are not the ones we are "rescuing". The people fighting us are terrorists, even though our liberal news media refuses to call them anything except "insurgents". They are flooding in from all over to protect the status quo they have been benefiting from for decades because if the reformation movement wins, they know they will be held accountable for their crimes. Saying we are "infidels" in Allah's eyes or that we are an occupying force is a ploy to manipulate the masses and turn them to their side, but anyone with half a brain knows that an occupying force doesn't organize elections or train the other side's police force and military so that we can leave as soon as possible.


  • StalkingWaffles
    April 11, 2005
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    wow.
    this was so... emotional, powerful, touching, sad...
    the wording was perfect!
    "just bones"
    wonderful usage.
    You did an amzing job on such a horrible subject.
    thanks for sharing!
    ~Maggie~

  • -BlackKnight- silver member
    April 11, 2005
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    I'm sure many would be, but I have no doubts there would be others that would fight the rescuers, not for political reasons or anything like, but simply because they can't stand the thought of someone else fighting their war, ya know?

  • serene darkness
    April 11, 2005
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    powerful. touching. great.

    Jen

  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    April 11, 2005
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    I keep starting my comment and erasing it. I don't know quite what to say. What can we say when there are such atrocities going on amongst the human race. I guess I can just say "thank you" for such an incredibly honest and heartwrenching write.

    ~Lyrical
  • LiLDove
    April 11, 2005
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    Wow, this was really great.

    Very heart moving, and it starts a lot of thoughts.

    I, just like BloodRoses, loved the usage of 'just bones', it really fit the poem.

    Amazing job.

    * Kat

  • imonlyme7
    April 11, 2005
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    This is powerful...The family of all these people...so sad to think about. Some things I guess we sill never understand..how?Why? So forth and so on.
  • BloodRoses
    April 11, 2005
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    wow, this was heartwrenching...
    i have the utmost faith in my loved ones sent there to aid in such a painful process
    this had so much of an effect on me
    i think ill go and cry now...
    wonderful write here,
    brilliant
    i love the repetitiveness of the "just bones"
    that was a wonderful use of emphasis

    great work
    BR

  • Rj
    April 11, 2005
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    I can't begin to fathom why people do what we do. But it is good to take pause to reflect on it from time to time.

    If we need lack the ability to stop, at least some of us have the capacity to regret, to grieve, to mourn and to hope.

    Peace,

    ~RJ~

  • redonyx
    April 11, 2005
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    whoa...thats a lot of graves and I feel for them, they are unmarked so how can the family mourn the lost?

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    April 11, 2005
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    Grateful.

  • -BlackKnight- silver member
    April 11, 2005
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    Reading this, I can only wonder how many of America's citizens would react if we somehow ended up under a rule like Hussein's and someone came to rescue us.
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