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Imperfections flatter a canvas of dappled sky
White washed by age; sun rays beating down
Ancient stone walls protecting silver lined tears cried
Only to find an angel’s tarnished and tattered crown
Falling straight from Grace while hearing whisper’s lullaby
Hiding behind sparkling pools of blue
The price of this life is consequence’s scared fire fly
Memories fade with each year brings promises to choose
Shattered dreams hang; actions are screaming to be set free
Mirrors around deceive perception
Matters of time; mind over matter; no guarantee
Thought there would be an experience; true life connection
Jani J. Fraim
©2005
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Written April 11th, 2005
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Need I say more?
Such a lot of irony, well-coordinated with a fascinating vocabulary. Intriguing, exquisite. I don't know any poet who can quite put it the way you do. There are some unforgettable lines here (Dammit - the whole piece is unforgettable). My conclusion, after reading two of your poems, is that, you are a truly mature writer - that's the main thing. Every subject matter you tackle you view it with a neutral eye, or that's the way it seems. -
Well Done!
Very detailed, I as well liked your choice of words, the content you pen is deep, and the imagery is crystal clear, and here, there, and everywhere...You sure know how to captivate the reader, great work here my friend, pen on!
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Some of my fav lines
Imperfections flatter a canvas of dappled sky
White washed by age; sun rays beating down
Ancient stone walls protecting silver lined tears cried
Only to find an angel’s tarnished and tattered crown
Falling straight from Grace while hearing whisper’s lullaby
Hiding behind sparkling pools of blue
Awesome Pen!
-Timothy The Poetic Weaver
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I'm not exactly sure what this is about, but it flowed very well, and I liked your choice of words. Not sure what else to say...
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