Sit back,
and watch,
as everybody smiles,
and everybody laughs,
Having fun,
without a care in the world,
But it's all so fake,
so transparent.
Notice how,
their smiles never light up their face,
and their laughs never put a twinkle in their eye,
Everybody hiding behind a happy face,
hoping to decieve the world,
hoping,
somehow,
to deceive themselves.
Author notes
Written April 11th, 2005
A contest entry
- MiRaGeD SoUl by Sunkissed.
300 points, ended May 28, 2005, 43 entries
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Wow...I can relate to this like you don't even know! Seriously, this is a very powerful poem, very, very good job. I hide behind a smile, too, except for me it works...unfortunalty. I would LOVE it if someone would see through it, because I"m too scared to let it down myself.
Keep up the good work, and I'll keep an eye out for your poetry. -
Wow this was so beautiful and relly just reminded me of myself in so many ways. You are so right so many people fake their smiles and everything they do. This was amazing you made me think about myself as well.
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my my i like this great job, hmmm its something i do myself makes me reflect on my actions, good job you've made me think!!!!i love the ending as well.
sammie -
dito to that!!!!!!!!!!!
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"hoping somehow to decieve themselves" love how you ended that.
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This is so true! Just one suggestion, instead of 'so see through', maybe you could use the words 'so transparent'. Still means the same thing though. I especially liked the last line, we all try and deceive ourselves at some point.
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Deserves more than I give
I cant believe no one has commented on this yet [This poem is a poem of truthful human nature- our self-denile within that we never notice] I am honored to be the first to read and critque this lovely, mature material.
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