Deep into the solitude
of a starry night
I hear the flickering of a candle
snapping, popping
burning brightly
then fizzling out.
I wait for your footsteps...
The roar
of a thousand butterflies
carried aloft on a hurricane
wing their way
across a marshmallow sky
lodged in the goo of my mind.
and now I wonder,
what would butterfly marshmallows
taste like right now?
When I see you,
will my heart flutter
faster than my pacemaker will allow?
What of the marshmallow butterflies
that alight on my pulse-betrayed lips?
Save me from your hazards,
such is the delirium you bring
to my wrinkling life
and the madhouse reflections
of my fibrillating mind.
Author notes
A wayward springboard piece off of touchof1der's 'My Heart's Reflection'. May she forgive me!
Written April 10th, 2005
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A very romantic poem bravo . -
That's adorable! I love how you write love poems, they are magnificant!
~Jen -
wow. this is awesome! "Madhouse Reflections of my fillibrating heart" I love the way that rolls of my tongue! It's kinda funny actually cuz I totally get your poem. Keep up the good work! I love it! -Maddy
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I've never been able to inspire anyone to write anything from my work, but if you did this from a 'springboard' of Kimberly's work (which I did read today), then this indeed is an amazing spinoff. I would've never thought of 'marshmallow butterflies'...although now I see where the thought comes from. Seems like those madhouse reflections shot off at three million light-years a minute.
I admire your usage of diction and rhythm to make this an enjoyable piece. Well done!
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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wow. i didnt understand any of this whatsoever, but it was still really fun to read. the diction made it just fun to dawdle thru. i liked this a lot, even tho i didnt really get it. hmmmm. oh well. have a great day, and thanks for sharing!
~mikey
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Kewl
Great job! The marshmellow part I've never seen before so I liked that. Don't stop writing!
~Carlie -
Lol, I belive there is no theft in poetry only plagurism and allusion, if she feels the same way she'll forgive you.
I would actually be flattered. This was a great poem and definetly applause worthy. Oh, yeah please excuse any spelling errors I'm terrible at spelling. -
Ah, a hopeless romantic ... there's still a few of us left
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