I remember a winter long ago
When the gentle wind had whispers low
A voice that sang with melody sweet
The song in my heart was made complete
Such a peacefulness was in the air
As silver lace danced without a care
A lovely picture was painted that night
At that moment everything was right
It was perfect as darkness drew nigh
Snow clad trees stood audaciously by
The blaze from the moon sparkled this night
The image glowed in icicles bright
Winter kissed mountains covered this view
Radiance glistened with a brilliant hue
The stars shined bright on the crystal pond
As if they were placed by a golden wand
I’ve been captured by this splendid scene
Where time had stopped and was quite serene
I had to leave that picture of lace
But I shall treasure that beautiful place
Author notes
Commented on Snow
Written April 10th, 2005
A contest entry
- Christmas Time is Here Again! by snukums.
300 points, ended December 21, 2005, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
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1300 points, ended July 11, 2007, 638 entries
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475 points, ended August 5, 2007, 17 entries
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What did you think
Comments
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very nice poem. thanks for entering and good luck.
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Delightful - so descriptive
Color dancing without care I see!
You REALLY like winter, for goodness sake!
For one who feels down, it's a remedy,
You make snow look better than icing on a cake!
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Such Beauty
This is beautifully weaved, more than enhancing the pretty picture accompanying your skillfully crafted words. I clearly see why it was a bronze winner, gold would have been just as appropriate.
Congratulations!
Love and hugs, B♥nnieQ
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WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!This is great well done and gd luck this poem is amazing it has a amazing affect!
keep up the good work
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a wonderful poem, read it more than once, each time I enjoyed it more ,You have added to the image posted with your beautiful choice of words Excellent
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WONDERFUL COMMENT
Wow this was a beautiful poem. Such a pleasure to read on this hot summer day! It makes me long for winter. Thank you for sharing this amazing poem. It has fantastic imagary
Take care,
Edited on Aug 12, 4:49 p.m. because ''. -
Thank you for entering the Summer Survivor Series Poetry Island Competition .. we are hard at work finishing up our reading and compiling our lists. Watch the Round 1 Column for results this week!
Cvillelisa, Desiree Darkk and Son of the Moon
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very goog write
I really loved this poem. Not only could I imagine this place, but I also felt as if I was really there. Amazing write. Good luck in this contest!
-Bethany -
very goog write
I really loved this poem. Notonly could I imagine this place, but I also felt as if I was really there. Amazing write. Good luck in this contest!
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Awsome depth and imagery! One of my favorite types of poetry! Thank you for entering and good luck!
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You've painted quite a majestic image here. I'm not a particular fan of rhyming couplets but you did a nice job here! The flow was great - and that's truly difficult to do, so, WELL DONE!
Cheers!
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Beautiful flow wonderful imagery. Such a sense of peace in this poem. Loves the vivid picture that it sends. Misty
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i always say i cant wait for winter because its so pretty when it snows..but then when it comes..i cant wait for spring. good job with writing this. enjoyed the read. nice flow to it.
Blu -
This was serenity painted with words. Dancing lace just really did it for me. I am so impressed by this poem. I have never seen snow but I can well imagine this beautiful place you so eloquently described.
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Wow! You have written a beautiful poem using words to take the reader right to this magnificent scene. The imagery created with your words was exquisite! Good job rhyming! Thanks for sharing!
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i hate snow- but i love this poem! "Winter kissed mountains" <=tha twas my favorite part. the imagery is absolutely beautiful. excellent write.
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what a beautiful and very uplifting poem....& what a nice, cute little scene you have painted here...
the rhyme was kinda good, even tho im not a great one for rhyme these days...
thanks for sharing this.
i wish you all the best on your long poetry journey -
Freakin' Great!!!
This poem has incredible flow. It seems to roll off the pages. The imagery is awesome. You made me see everything. Keep writing! -
picture perfect.
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I quite like the imagery. This was a nicely painted picture.
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A wonderful job of painting with words. You have quite a palette of words to choose from. It's nice to read poetry that flows so well. Keep painting!
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Thank you I agree that captured is better and I have corrected it. Thanks for the splendid comment. I appreciated any constructive comments to help improve my work. Melody
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Very good
Nice to see old fashion good rhyming poetry, that you can keep in your head,would I dare to say, it would even be better if verb tenses were tweaked, as captive is not a verb,captured is.
Yep, I have AS, although I may appear rude, I am an editor(poetry and short stories) and ghost writer(plays only). I see to tweak poets into creating the optimum work even when they don't like me. Your poetry is sublime kudos for that, but like our poetry we are all works in progress. -
I feel the words in this...very distinct....I can recall a time when the beauty was in the air around me....it's very important for people to take a look around once in a while and breathe it all in- surely indeed this eludes the thoughts to take the time to smell the roses....
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Very good
This is incredibly beautiful and I was immediately struck by the similiarity to the paintings by Currier and Ives. You did well. -
Beautiful imagery. Your poem is magnificent!
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pretty images. You should send this out to the people in Colorado. Brrrr...
Good to read you here.
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The flow was great, great diction...It was easy to read...light...it just absorbed me...well done...keep up the good writting...
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Wow, this is a great poem with fantastic imagery and description Keep writing, even though I am a free verse writer I love rhyme when it is this good
All the best,
Pozo
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Thank you for that wonderful sentiment. You are right I had started both of those poems several months ago, but did not like the way they headed so I put them off to the side and every now and then I'd pick them up again. So I got the idea of seeing where others would go with them, to possibly inspire me in a certain direction. And it did work. Atleast for one of them so far. But each of the poem entered in my contest are very unique and have taken their own path. I really enjoyed seeing the different directions that each of them have taken. Thanks again for your very supportive comment. Melody
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I see you were finally able to finish your work. It's funny that things happen this way. I had a quote that I've wanted to write a poem to for years and was unable to and now held a contest as that quote for a line in a poem and guess what...after being inspired by the entries, I was able to write my own poem to the quote. Funny turn of events isn't it?
Any way this is a beautiful poem. Pitty the entries, including myself, to your contest to have this as competetion
Ruth -
Thanks for the wonderful comment. I appreciate it very much. I will have to go and check out some of your work. Thanks again, Melody
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Oh, wow, this is beautiful. Your rhyme is smooth and unforced, and your imagery is splendid. And kudos to you on your scansion. This is truly a wonderful piece of art; keep up the good work, poet!
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