tears on my cheeks
salty
like our sweat
on that warm summer night
our bodies glistening under the moon
declaring their love for the other
a love unspoken
shown only through the sways
as we became one
a love still unspoken
shown only through tears
and thoughts
of you
with eyes reflecting the ocean
a mouth so tempting and sweet
all in the face
of an angel
Author notes
Haven't posted for quite some time now. Please let me know what you think of this.
Written April 9th, 2005
What did you think
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This was indeed a very beautifully penned piece. I'm sorry that it's taken me this long to find it though. Hope to see some more writes from you very soon. *Sonya*
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this was really different. im cant really explain why but it just seemed to capture something. everyone has written a poem like this before, yet something in this one makes it better. I thinik it might be your use of an angel? beautiful write, please do some more they make me smile! xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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"our bodies glistening under the moon
declaring their love for the other
a love unspoken
shown only through the sways
as we became one"
I liked this image... Not so erotic, but a certain sweetness to it. Very well done!!
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i would change the font color...you have to squint or highlight it to read it.
i think this had the air of a melancholy soul. you've found someone you love so greatly, and they've lifted all trace of sadness from you. the tears you now cry are for happiness 
beautiful job capturing the excitement and passion of first/true love!
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very nicely written. only thing is i had to highlight it to be able to read it. other than that a great write.
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Had to come back, sorry for using your promo points... but this is great..not as powerful as the one written before but very good indeed...Keep up the good work!!!
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G reat
very powerful...and very sad...aint love grand!!
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