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I Dream of My Boyhood Companion (Diaspora Italian Sonnet)

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by ~Gregg Rowe~

Dancing beneath a silver moon’s autumn light
Listen to cascading waves from Shannon’s Falls
Muses connect in a deep green forest night

Dreaming of days of youth where innocence call
Out to young hearts beneath a warm summer’s breeze
Young love has no knowledge to start building walls

Playfully we frolic and get on our knees
Boyhood innocence of sexuality
Parents, our friendship, instantly they freeze

Your relationship:  “It is such a disease!”
To my boyhood friend, I then kiss him good-bye
Taking with him my youthful love under siege

For Catholic parents I must hide and lie
Because man will never again touch my thigh

Author notes


Written April 8th, 2005

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  • pure zen
    January 7, 2006
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    I thought this peice was very heartfelt. For some reason from the comments previous to this...no one really took the time to think about your words. This poem is not only heartfelt but fantastic and emotionally felt. The innosence that a child posseses is a beautiful gift that will one day be gone and will never be retreived again. This was also about the conflict between homosexuality and religion am I right?? Well great job anyways.

    peace *&* love always,

    ~purezen.


  • Poetic-Goddess
    December 26, 2005
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    i don't really know what to say...but I agree with the whole catholic thing only if my parents knew the thing i lie about I love this i thought it was cute!!Good luck in the contest and might I add I love the background!!!
    With love,
    Poetic Goddess

  • listen
    April 9, 2005
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    ok,that makes more sense now.thanks.


  • lordoftherings gold member
    April 8, 2005
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    Listen: I think I was being cynical with the Judge Judy picture, the wholesomeness of being a judge and the image of a mother shaking her finger at correctness. It is an image that is forever engraved in my mind of my own mother and I thought maybe with the last two lines of the poem the picture was a proper fit. (it has the image of authoritian because of the robe being worn.)

    Gregg
    Edited on Apr 08, 9:53 p.m. because ''.


  • lordoftherings gold member
    April 8, 2005
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    BlackKnight: This is another version of an Italian Sonnet called the Terza Rima (Diaspora) Italian Sonnet which is a combination of the two forms: Sonnet and Terza Rima, hence the peculiar rhyme scheme that follows the Terza Rima and the 14 lines of Italian Sonnets.
    Edited on Apr 08, 9:44 p.m. because ''.

  • listen
    April 8, 2005
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    i agree,the judge judy pic was rather amusing.it seemed odd for a poem like this.i don't feel that you had a sarcastic or mocking tone.maybe it's her smirk that bothers me...anyhow,the message was well recieved.


  • -BlackKnight- gold member
    April 8, 2005
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    Good thing I'm not Catholic lol. I thought the image of "Judge" Judy at the top was pretty funny; don't know why, but it just struck me as humorous. The sonnet was pretty good as well; never seen one like that. I'm used to seeing typical, four-line stanzas, but I assume this is a variation of that? I also noticed it has an interwoven rhyme scheme similar to the Spenserian sonnet; indeed, an interesting mix, I think.

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